9650976 please have mercy on the psyko, he just posted it a few minutes back and this is the kind of things that is better when it takes his own time to make.
good chapter but please, try to make it a bit longer so we can enjoy it better.
Don't... Try and sound fancy please. "It can even run *on* a *private* server". Almost every server in the world is a private server. You pay for access, that's what internet is. In theory, every computer period is it's own private server. So running *on* a server is really redundant and stupid. Not to mention a severe understatement if the calculation speed is of any consideration. If it can calculate that quickly, I'm pretty sure it has room for more than just ONE server. And would in fact need multiple just to be that good.
Wanna know what happens when you start up a single player Minecraft world? It creates a server on your computer. Servers really aren't that impressive. That's why you need an entire room of the god damn things to be of any use to anyone aside from yourself.
As for calculation speed itself, that's not the only thing a computer would need, especially if you want forensics. Graphics calculation would be another stat, how quickly RAM can be assigned would be another. Hell DRIVE SPACE would be impressive and absolutely needed. Anything under a gigabyte would be woefully underpowered for what it's needed for.
As for a firewall... Considering he's an AI, and he has a dedicated server(Which is what you SHOULD'VE said instead of 'private'), the only time he'd need a firewall is when he was connecting to other servers. I'm not as well versed on the subject of firewalls, but I'm pretty sure 'layers' is wrong as well. A firewall, from my understanding feel free to prove me wrong, is just a system meant to regulate internal to external network traffic. You can make the system more complex, but it's not really like you're layering more and more walls, more like you're making the wall you have stronger. And even then 'wall', isn't quite right, more like security gate, and to improve the gate you make your guards better, not add more gates with the same level guards.
Like, you could have 100 walls, but unless the walls get stronger then it's kinda useless since if someone got through the first one, they can get through all 100. Plus it's better just to have the 1 really strong wall, since otherwise you're just wasting processing power on useless procedure.
9651037 Dude, chill the fuck out. Not only does nobody really care, I AM NOT A COMPUTER SCIENTIST! I AM JUST TRYING TO MAKE A STORY THAT IS FUN TO WRITE AND ONE THAT OTHERS CAN ENJOY!
also in stories like this you need to suspend logic and realistic approaches to a lot of things in order to enjoy it.
9651092 I know I know, but I don't know anyone who could act as an editor. I promise I'll go back in and fix it up as best I can, but for now all I can do is ask you to be patient.
Ahahahaha. Now twilights gonna be interrogated by the other elements for inviting a guy.... especially to girls night. You know the usual "Is he single and like to party ..pinkie, how long has she worked with him... rarity, is he straight... AJ, does he have any pets ... shy, did she bang him... drunkenly asked by ... RD. "
9651098 Well, that's a relief. I've seen far too many good stories get tossed into the sewers because the author was too lay to find an editor or clean up after themselves.
9651049 Neither am I, but I have this philosophy of "Understand what you use" generally. Like, you could live your life without knowing how a computer works, but knowing how they work, at least general knowledge like how computer components work together and what terminology to use when is key.
There's a quote by a famous science fiction writer, lemme try and pull it up *Google searches*
Whoops, wasn't science fiction, but is still applicable to science fiction. "Get your facts right first, then distort them as you please"- Mark Twain. There's a difference between 'suspension of disbelief' and 'turning off everything you know to be true and believing what you're told'. While a lot of people won't know the things I know, there are also people who do and are instantly pulled out of that state of disbelief by your butchering of computer science.
It's like this, You can make a ship in fiction that can go past the speed of light, even most scientists would be like "Okay, it's sci-fi, so it's okay to do that". But once you get a basic thing like gravity wrong, with like... Idk a good example with gravity. But that's sorta the point. You don't need to be an expert, but it's sorta writing 101 to know at least the basics of what you're talking about.
In the case of your story, the suspension of disbelief starts with how he turned into an A.I., we don't know how he did, you never told us, but we're cool with not being told because any explanation would probably pull us out. The problem with your explanation of the computer though is that you could've done the same thing. We didn't need the specs to know it's a supercomputer, you could've even just said "It's a quantum computer" and left it at that. Sounds super fancy, and it sounds powerful. Problem is you did a half job of explaining it in a more grounded way, using calculation speed and a singular server to try and show its power. That fails in this case because you had no clue what you're talking about.
You don't need to be an expert, but a quick google search could tell you all you'd need to know about what makes a good computer in order to make a convincing sci-fi computer. Hell, you could've yelled out magical jargon instead to keep us.. well maybe not us. But you hopefully get the point now.
I don't claim to be a writing GENIUS, but hopefully I know enough to set the record straight here. THe basic idea is not to get the facts 100% right, more to avoid getting the facts wrong. If you're unsure, or have absolutely no idea what you're writing about, just google it for 5 minutes and you'll be fine, and your fic will be a LOT better for it.
Don't get me wrong, I like your idea, and your execution so far is okay. This is just a big thing to get right when writing science fiction in particular.
EDIT: Went back and reread your reply. And whoo boy was that another can of worms. I automatically replaced "Suspend LOGIC" with "Suspension of disbelief". That's like the opposite of what you want to do. A story should have logic, its own logic. And it should follow that logic so the reader can as well. In example, a sonic x mlp fic where Sonic saves the CMC and then is rewarded, but next chapter is being chased by the mane six without explanation. That's a story's logic. Sure, you don't need irl logic, but a story still needs some logic.
9651398 well, i Just have asperger, a bit of insomnia, two types of sleep disorders, depression (runs in the family at least by some level in every person). Asperger keeps the depression a bit away in the feelings. Insomnia with the two sleeps disorders just keep me awake and nervous when the weird feelings starts in the later stage of insomnia.
I can't complain, I have less problems with them in my case because those are at low levels some days. Let me guess(please don't be offended) in some moments you can get really imaginative(not creative) with your mind? Also your answer was a logical and a good one., not compresive but logical anyway.
9653114 Does had anybody do a HiE with fallout equestria? besides "fatman" and his crossover. I mean a real HiE and fallout equestria(i does not matter that much the year)
9653186 I had that idea of doing something like that, but I never finished reading the original story, so if I ever ended up doing it it would just be a fallout/mlp crossover, rather than fallout equestria.
9653205 both are quite the good ones but if you want to read something short of fallout equestria, you have to read "fallout equestria: pink eyes". it is short, it includes part of stories like project horizons, murky number seven and fallout equestria(original).
it is short but easy enough to read in 40 minutes.
"Why I say! No young mare should drink in such a matter!" Then why is Rainbow Dash passed out right next to you? Also I know I look kind of feminine but come on!
9651347 This. For now we're not going to harp too harshly on what is clearly a fledgling writer, but learning needs to happen here and starting off with a premise of "literally nothing needs to make sense and I demand you ignore that it doesn't make sense!" is a terrible stance to hold on writing...
9629823
Done.
When do we get more?
9650920
Boi. Just posted this like half an hour ago, chill.
9650947
And I have already read it and want more...
9650976
please have mercy on the psyko, he just posted it a few minutes back and this is the kind of things that is better when it takes his own time to make.
good chapter but please, try to make it a bit longer so we can enjoy it better.
9650991
Ok, thank you. I will do my best.
Don't... Try and sound fancy please. "It can even run *on* a *private* server". Almost every server in the world is a private server. You pay for access, that's what internet is. In theory, every computer period is it's own private server. So running *on* a server is really redundant and stupid. Not to mention a severe understatement if the calculation speed is of any consideration. If it can calculate that quickly, I'm pretty sure it has room for more than just ONE server. And would in fact need multiple just to be that good.
Wanna know what happens when you start up a single player Minecraft world? It creates a server on your computer. Servers really aren't that impressive. That's why you need an entire room of the god damn things to be of any use to anyone aside from yourself.
As for calculation speed itself, that's not the only thing a computer would need, especially if you want forensics. Graphics calculation would be another stat, how quickly RAM can be assigned would be another. Hell DRIVE SPACE would be impressive and absolutely needed. Anything under a gigabyte would be woefully underpowered for what it's needed for.
As for a firewall... Considering he's an AI, and he has a dedicated server(Which is what you SHOULD'VE said instead of 'private'), the only time he'd need a firewall is when he was connecting to other servers. I'm not as well versed on the subject of firewalls, but I'm pretty sure 'layers' is wrong as well. A firewall, from my understanding feel free to prove me wrong, is just a system meant to regulate internal to external network traffic. You can make the system more complex, but it's not really like you're layering more and more walls, more like you're making the wall you have stronger. And even then 'wall', isn't quite right, more like security gate, and to improve the gate you make your guards better, not add more gates with the same level guards.
Like, you could have 100 walls, but unless the walls get stronger then it's kinda useless since if someone got through the first one, they can get through all 100. Plus it's better just to have the 1 really strong wall, since otherwise you're just wasting processing power on useless procedure.
Can you all imagine Raritys' face when the M.C. said;
?
9651037
Dude, chill the fuck out. Not only does nobody really care, I AM NOT A COMPUTER SCIENTIST! I AM JUST TRYING TO MAKE A STORY THAT IS FUN TO WRITE AND ONE THAT OTHERS CAN ENJOY!
also in stories like this you need to suspend logic and realistic approaches to a lot of things in order to enjoy it.
*deep breath*
Okay. I love this. I adore this story, I want to see where it goes.
But holy mother of Frost, you need to get a fucking editor.
9651092
I know I know, but I don't know anyone who could act as an editor. I promise I'll go back in and fix it up as best I can, but for now all I can do is ask you to be patient.
9651098
Equestria the rise of Bender
9651098
Do you use G docks for writing?
Ahahahaha. Now twilights gonna be interrogated by the other elements for inviting a guy.... especially to girls night. You know the usual "Is he single and like to party ..pinkie, how long has she worked with him... rarity, is he straight... AJ, does he have any pets ... shy, did she bang him... drunkenly asked by ... RD. "
9651098
Well, that's a relief. I've seen far too many good stories get tossed into the sewers because the author was too lay to find an editor or clean up after themselves.
9651098
Psyko, please define a psychopath.
Suggestion:
Replace "f u laser crew"
With "eff-you laser crew"
9651049
Neither am I, but I have this philosophy of "Understand what you use" generally. Like, you could live your life without knowing how a computer works, but knowing how they work, at least general knowledge like how computer components work together and what terminology to use when is key.
There's a quote by a famous science fiction writer, lemme try and pull it up
*Google searches*
Whoops, wasn't science fiction, but is still applicable to science fiction. "Get your facts right first, then distort them as you please"- Mark Twain. There's a difference between 'suspension of disbelief' and 'turning off everything you know to be true and believing what you're told'. While a lot of people won't know the things I know, there are also people who do and are instantly pulled out of that state of disbelief by your butchering of computer science.
It's like this, You can make a ship in fiction that can go past the speed of light, even most scientists would be like "Okay, it's sci-fi, so it's okay to do that". But once you get a basic thing like gravity wrong, with like... Idk a good example with gravity. But that's sorta the point. You don't need to be an expert, but it's sorta writing 101 to know at least the basics of what you're talking about.
In the case of your story, the suspension of disbelief starts with how he turned into an A.I., we don't know how he did, you never told us, but we're cool with not being told because any explanation would probably pull us out. The problem with your explanation of the computer though is that you could've done the same thing. We didn't need the specs to know it's a supercomputer, you could've even just said "It's a quantum computer" and left it at that. Sounds super fancy, and it sounds powerful. Problem is you did a half job of explaining it in a more grounded way, using calculation speed and a singular server to try and show its power. That fails in this case because you had no clue what you're talking about.
You don't need to be an expert, but a quick google search could tell you all you'd need to know about what makes a good computer in order to make a convincing sci-fi computer. Hell, you could've yelled out magical jargon instead to keep us.. well maybe not us. But you hopefully get the point now.
I don't claim to be a writing GENIUS, but hopefully I know enough to set the record straight here. THe basic idea is not to get the facts 100% right, more to avoid getting the facts wrong. If you're unsure, or have absolutely no idea what you're writing about, just google it for 5 minutes and you'll be fine, and your fic will be a LOT better for it.
Don't get me wrong, I like your idea, and your execution so far is okay. This is just a big thing to get right when writing science fiction in particular.
EDIT: Went back and reread your reply. And whoo boy was that another can of worms. I automatically replaced "Suspend LOGIC" with "Suspension of disbelief". That's like the opposite of what you want to do. A story should have logic, its own logic. And it should follow that logic so the reader can as well. In example, a sonic x mlp fic where Sonic saves the CMC and then is rewarded, but next chapter is being chased by the mane six without explanation. That's a story's logic. Sure, you don't need irl logic, but a story still needs some logic.
9651221
No
9651311
a person suffering from chronic mental disorder with abnormal or violent social behavior.
I have Adhd, depression, and an spd.
9651347
Well, I appreciate the constructive criticism. It certainly beats those comments I got from that damn hamster.
9651397
Ahh. Ok.
9651400
That fucktard just tries to trigger people if u haven't already report him
9651398
well, i Just have asperger, a bit of insomnia, two types of sleep disorders, depression (runs in the family at least by some level in every person). Asperger keeps the depression a bit away in the feelings. Insomnia with the two sleeps disorders just keep me awake and nervous when the weird feelings starts in the later stage of insomnia.
I can't complain, I have less problems with them in my case because those are at low levels some days.
Let me guess(please don't be offended) in some moments you can get really imaginative(not creative) with your mind? Also your answer was a logical and a good one., not compresive but logical anyway.
I hope we can chat in pm someday.
9651639
Man, that sucks major a.
9651537
I've only seen him once and he was just a huge turd.
Some would call him an asshole, but he's the whole ass.
9653114
Does had anybody do a HiE with fallout equestria? besides "fatman" and his crossover. I mean a real HiE and fallout equestria(i does not matter that much the year)
9653186
I had that idea of doing something like that, but I never finished reading the original story, so if I ever ended up doing it it would just be a fallout/mlp crossover, rather than fallout equestria.
9653116
Ya. Honestly i think he just gets off on being an ass to authors.
9653205
both are quite the good ones but if you want to read something short of fallout equestria, you have to read "fallout equestria: pink eyes". it is short, it includes part of stories like project horizons, murky number seven and fallout equestria(original).
it is short but easy enough to read in 40 minutes.
make more chapters please
🤔why wud she think he's a mare?
Also 'fuck you laser', that's new, i like it
Interesting twist, wonder how he'll work it. Xd
9662733
In chapter three he mentioned that his body could be mistaken for stallion or mare.
9663074
Ooooh. Okay
Statement: More chapters.
Interesting.
9695466
I would like to know what was interesting about it.
9706297
The idea. And how he uses his powers.
An invisible update...?
9706339
I had finished the chapter, but forgot to send it to the editor first, sorry.
9706370
Ah, alright.
WHELP! that's gotta be awkward for the girls!
9706416
But, that's the point. Being able to pull off being a girl will help with any... interactions in the future.
I think "inept" is what you were looking for.
I've seen others use "eff-you" when describing great weapons sarcastically, and I think it flows better.
Ah, love interest seems partially locked on. But that was an extremely rude thing to do to the girls.
9651347
This. For now we're not going to harp too harshly on what is clearly a fledgling writer, but learning needs to happen here and starting off with a premise of "literally nothing needs to make sense and I demand you ignore that it doesn't make sense!" is a terrible stance to hold on writing...
6 huh?, hmmmm, Mane six foeshadowing???
fucking right i was right!