Pony enough to dream, or at least, be connected to the dream realm. Poor Luna, completely caught unprepared. Here is opportunity. If the police force is too constraining, perhaps an alliance with a Princess will be the next best thing? If he can actually fully access the dream realm there is extreme potential indeed. Keep going! ;)
9906354 Hmmm. Maybe a different planning style could help? Instead of plotting a series of events, try this:
Start with the character's goals. What do they want? What do they need to do to accomplish it? Do the same for the antagonists and others. From there, have each character start working on those goals, which goals may interfere with others. Many tasks can be ongoing (for example, relationships) and could even be unknown to the character, which should let you intersect them with other characters in a meaningful way.
For example: our protagonist has the goal of self preservation. To that end, one of the things he does is guard against intrusion, in this case mental. Looking at Luna now, her goal is the betterment of her subjects' lives. One of the tasks she does to accomplish that is dream walking. Now, these tasks ended up causing them to make contact, and each now gets a "WTF just happened need to find out" goal, which prompts tasks and so on and so forth.
This approach should help make things more believable and flow more naturally, so instead of "now we need to have a bad guy, now he's fighting the bad guy, oh no the bad guy did a thing" you get a richer base to grow your characters on. It should let you get your characters off their tracks and lift them from being one-dimensional stereotypes as well, since you won't be trying to hit bullet points to an end but adapting ever-changing situations.
And the cool part is, you don't even need to write all that out. Stuff (a lot of stuff) happens in the background where the user doesn't see, so keeping it cliffs notes style works great and let's you focus on your narrative.
You'd be surprised how often good authors will comment something like, "well I was trying/planning on X, but the characters ran away with the plot and we did something better."
Not to say planning is bad, it's good to have an endgame in mind, but don't feel like you need to contrive scenes to get your way just because that's what you planned.
The door was a swirl of black and blue, with not cutie mark to >>>bee seem.<<< Luna looked a little closer, and she noticed falling green text that moved across its surface.
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Nvm, it's done.
THERE IT'S DONE!
YOU CAN STOP COMMENTING ON IT NOW!
Welcome to firewall infinity
So I'm going to assume there is going to be no Gamer Luna in this?
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She will, but I don't think that the shock of this scenario would bring that to the forefront of her mind.
Props for the Firewall joke.
HA! FIREWALL AND ANTI-VIRUS SOFTWARE!!! NICE!!!!
Pony enough to dream, or at least, be connected to the dream realm. Poor Luna, completely caught unprepared.
Here is opportunity. If the police force is too constraining, perhaps an alliance with a Princess will be the next best thing? If he can actually fully access the dream realm there is extreme potential indeed.
Keep going! ;)
9906354
Hmmm. Maybe a different planning style could help? Instead of plotting a series of events, try this:
Start with the character's goals. What do they want? What do they need to do to accomplish it?
Do the same for the antagonists and others.
From there, have each character start working on those goals, which goals may interfere with others. Many tasks can be ongoing (for example, relationships) and could even be unknown to the character, which should let you intersect them with other characters in a meaningful way.
For example: our protagonist has the goal of self preservation. To that end, one of the things he does is guard against intrusion, in this case mental.
Looking at Luna now, her goal is the betterment of her subjects' lives. One of the tasks she does to accomplish that is dream walking.
Now, these tasks ended up causing them to make contact, and each now gets a "WTF just happened need to find out" goal, which prompts tasks and so on and so forth.
This approach should help make things more believable and flow more naturally, so instead of "now we need to have a bad guy, now he's fighting the bad guy, oh no the bad guy did a thing" you get a richer base to grow your characters on. It should let you get your characters off their tracks and lift them from being one-dimensional stereotypes as well, since you won't be trying to hit bullet points to an end but adapting ever-changing situations.
And the cool part is, you don't even need to write all that out. Stuff (a lot of stuff) happens in the background where the user doesn't see, so keeping it cliffs notes style works great and let's you focus on your narrative.
You'd be surprised how often good authors will comment something like, "well I was trying/planning on X, but the characters ran away with the plot and we did something better."
Not to say planning is bad, it's good to have an endgame in mind, but don't feel like you need to contrive scenes to get your way just because that's what you planned.
Great chapter and I love the firewall and SCP joke/reference, please keep the good work going bud
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Does this mean your dropping the story?
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NO! NO! NO! A THOUSAND F*CKING THIMES NO! I HAVE NO INTENTION OF DROPPING THIS STORY!
*be seen
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That wasn't a typo
Save the bees!
Always enjoy reading this!
Bring on the awesome! Xd
This is enteresting will she tell Celestia
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So she will I wonder what her reaction will be
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10043650
Never said she would
Ok sorry but this story has had my interest since I first read it
I first read this I think in 2018
Not this chapter but the first one
10043659
what are you talking about?
I don’t know
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Sorry half the time I am just confused
May I ask when ya will update, I know your not dropping the story, just wanna know when this is gonna get new chapter
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When I can find time, I have a lot of studying to do. I'm getting ready for an sat.
10055406
Okay, if you want any help with the story I'll be happy to help, or just talk if ya want
10055457
i'll keep it in mind.
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I wanna help with this
I love this story I can't wait for the next one or is the story dead
JK lol lol
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… keep up crap like this and I really will cancel this.
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I was joking I was joking don't cancel it please I was joking I love the story has amazing thing like why The fuck is joker gan
anyways you saw the other part I was just making a joke don't be bad
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…*leaves*
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I am sorry forgive me for my mistakes
PS are you actually leaving or no
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nah I'm just messing with you.
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Oh thank God I was actually scared
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Trollstia You fucking bitch
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So besides all that madness when do you think you'll make another episode of this fanfic
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oh yeah, I even have an idea for the next part of the plot.
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Does it involve a little bit of FBI open up and wet by mean by that is that someone finds out who he really is an a I
This is a really good story so far, and I can't wait to read more of it!
Add cybertronian it will make the story interesting
Add cybertronians
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what are those
Thot this is dead