“Tell me,” you politely ask your life-saver as your vision blurs, “Did my whiskey survive?”.... What a fine thing to say to the mare who saved your miserable life. How very Canterlot of you.
I just got up and Crowley updates a story...great...too tired. Anyway I think this is very similar to most beginnings of shows on bravo or hallmark or something in a book I read. Does that make it terrible...no its still great the only thing was...wasn't this suppose to be rated teen?
1141575 It was originally, but plans change mid-fic. This happens very regularly. Often, a fic I write ends up very different to when I started writing it, with entire chapters being rewritten in some cases - this is why I always release the stories when they're complete, and never chapter-by-chapter.
1142008 That was the good stuff, too! Now all I've got left is my good scotch! ; ; 1142236 YESSIR! *Does a barrel roll* Booyeah, take that! Chocobos are good at more than just running you know!
huh... that was... different. A nice dark opening to sadden me up to remember some of the bad shit to happen to me mixed in with some feelings that I'm sure everyone here has probably gone through at least once in there life, and the hero is Pinkie Pie? Well I'd say I'd drink to that but, apparently the whiskey didn't survive on the way done from that little experience and now If you'll excuse me, I has alcohol to get out of my system now. Thanks Crowley
Welp, this hit closer to home then I'd like... now I never got to THIS dark a depth but I understand the feeling of loneliness after a busted relationship and how it can still haunt you so long afterwards. It was a couple of years for me... only just starting to come on the other end of that and pick myself back up. This will be and interesting read in that case...
This hits pretty close to home for a friend of mine.
I really liked the inclusion of the "twitchy tail" moment, as it's a great callback to the series and I think everyone had a similarly strong reaction with the implications of it in this context meant. Great opening here!
Thank you. I don't know how, but this matches up to a dream I had recently. Not word for word or anything, but close enough that it makes me happy. It is also comforting to read a story like this.
Sweet a new story
This had me in stitches from laughing so hard!
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Sharpquill? How the buck did that guy get here? Shouldn't he be crying to the Mayor still about how he got fired from the post office?
You should make Sharquirlle a recurring antagonist
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Thats what i was thinking!
Also, YAY! new crowley fic!
I just got up and Crowley updates a story...great...too tired. Anyway I think this is very similar to most beginnings of shows on bravo or hallmark or something in a book I read. Does that make it terrible...no its still great the only thing was...wasn't this suppose to be rated teen?
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It was originally, but plans change mid-fic. This happens very regularly. Often, a fic I write ends up very different to when I started writing it, with entire chapters being rewritten in some cases - this is why I always release the stories when they're complete, and never chapter-by-chapter.
Awesome
NOOOOOO, MY WHISKEY!!! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_RageFace.png
1140788 Do a barrel roll!
Sharpquill is a dick.
"The day she left you at the alter and ran off "
Maybe "altar"
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Cheers. Fix'd.
“Did my whiskey survive?”
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Must be Irish.
You have to stop going from present to past tense. Gotta stick to one exclusively. That aside, you have fine writing.
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wait where is sharpquil from?
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My Ditzy Doo fic, More Than Buddies.
One that spends most of the day to make, Needs either takes instead of spends or a you spend.
Fucking Sharpquill.
Another dark start, is this going to be a trend?
1142008 That was the good stuff, too! Now all I've got left is my good scotch! ; ;
1142236 YESSIR! *Does a barrel roll* Booyeah, take that! Chocobos are good at more than just running you know!
GOD
DAMNIT I READ THIS IN HANDSOME JACKS VOICE GET OUT OF MY HEAD
NOOOOOOOOO Whiskey!
1142914 Nah, "we're" closer to Scottish. If "we" were Irish, it would've been Guinness. Man, I fancy some of that right now!!!
Hmm, alcohol and heights. Yeah that's a good combination!!! What was "I" thinking???
1513045 Funny, you seem to be confused about your species, Mr "Chocobo"!!
huh... that was... different. A nice dark opening to sadden me up to remember some of the bad shit to happen to me mixed in with some feelings that I'm sure everyone here has probably gone through at least once in there life, and the hero is Pinkie Pie? Well I'd say I'd drink to that but, apparently the whiskey didn't survive on the way done from that little experience and now If you'll excuse me, I has alcohol to get out of my system now. Thanks Crowley
Welp, this hit closer to home then I'd like... now I never got to THIS dark a depth but I understand the feeling of loneliness after a busted relationship and how it can still haunt you so long afterwards. It was a couple of years for me... only just starting to come on the other end of that and pick myself back up. This will be and interesting read in that case...
Couldn't help myself...
I like it!
The moment I read the words "twitchy" and "tail", my first thought was "oh crap!"
This hits pretty close to home for a friend of mine.
I really liked the inclusion of the "twitchy tail" moment, as it's a great callback to the series and I think everyone had a similarly strong reaction with the implications of it in this context meant. Great opening here!
I know the feeling of betrayal. It hurts real bad.
5983679 wow a lot of these comments are like that
Ok, so Pinkie pulling random stuff around to do other things= totally canon, but you would think the any of the many pegasi in town would help.
Thank you. I don't know how, but this matches up to a dream I had recently. Not word for word or anything, but close enough that it makes me happy. It is also comforting to read a story like this.
“Everypony move, that stallion’s gonna jump!”
Do a flip.
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Kickflip
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A flat spin!
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Sharpquill be like: Aww come on i wanna see some blood.