Ch.6 - Bodyguard Career pt.1
Raichu for Hire
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Chapter 6
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Bodyguard Career pt.1
Rarity trotted nervously between numerous houses, searching for the long-tailed creature. With a few citizens telling her that Raichu was working for Derpy today, and that they were visiting numerous shops, she spent half an hour checking store after store in search for her.
A wide smile formed on her the moment she noticed familiar faces at the entrance into ‘Antique shop’. The grey pegasus pulled a covered cart filled with who know what kind of artifacts, while Raichu walked by her side, carrying a small saddlebag supported on her shoulder. Both smiled cheerfully while looking at each other.
“Raichu, I was looking everywhere for you,” Rarity said as she approached at a quick pace.
“Oh, hello Rarity, is something wrong?” Nica asked. “Also, my name’s Nica. It turned out Raichu is just a name of my species.”
“I see, I will make sure to address you properly from now on.” Rarity took a quick glance at the collar with five gems and metal attachment present on Nica’s neck. Twilight mentioned that she improved my collar with a translation spell. It will make things so much easier. After taking a deep breathe, she spoke, “My friend from Manehattan, Miss Coco Pommel, is in need of assistance, but nopony is brave enough to work for her.”
Rarity grabbed the pokemon between her hooves. “Twilight told me that you’re very brave and looking for random jobs.” She lowered Nica to the ground and placed a forehoof on her own forehead in a dramatic fashion. “Without the help of a brave strong little knight like you, Miss Pommel will be left at the mercy of thugs in the most dirty and poor part of the big city where no law reaches far enough to help its citizens.”
Nica looked at the pegasus with a worried look.
Derpy kept smiling and said in a happy tone, “It’s okay, you helped me a bunch. Thanks to you I was able to visit so many shops I was always afraid of visiting.” Using her wing, she wrapped Nica’s shoulder and pulled to her side. “You were the bestest, and I loved your tail-tricks. Hope we can meet again.”
Nica allowed herself a moment of pleasure in Derpy’s wing-hug before answering, “I’d love to show you more tricks. Making you happy makes me happy.”
Derpy unzipped her saddlebag with her teeth and grabbed numerous bits with her hooves, only for Nica to gently return them into the pegasus’ saddlebag.
“There’s no need to pay me, helping you was a pleasure.”
Derpy blushed and hid it behind her wing. “Oh jeez… you’re too kind.”
“No, you’re too kind, and you make really tasty muffins, I really enjoyed them,” Nica said before embracing Derpy’s neck and next approaching Rarity. She waved at the pegasus who waved back, their smiles warm.
Rarity looked down at Nica in confusion. “You know you’ll never earn any bits if you do charity work all the time.”
Nica shook her head and poked her saddlebag, causing numerous bits to make noise. “Oh, but I was paid, not by Ditzy, though.”
“Huh? Then by who?”
“The shop owners.”
“Why?”
“Well…”
After paying the shop owner for the numerous porcelain plates and vases, Derpy turned around and started trotting cheerfully, only to slam into a five meter tall shelf filled with fragile porcelain, tilting it over.
The stallion yelled in terror. In a few seconds the shelves were going to crash into each other with a domino effect. His heart was about to escape through his throat.
Out of reflex, Nica leaped towards the shelf, pressing her forepaws and tail against the floor while her rear paws pressed against the large shelf. She stabilized the structure before the damage could be done. Upon hearing the noise of falling vases, she wrapped her long tail around them, catching them centimeters above the floor.
She lowered her trembling legs to the floor and wiped sweat from her forehead, sighing in relief.
“...And then the stallion stood on his rear hooves, forced me to dance with him, and next gave me a small bag of bits. I got similar rewards for preventing Ditzy from causing damage on numerous occasions.” She lowered her head and tapped her paws together. “It was my job to protect Ditzy and keep her from having accidents, yet I didn’t expect to be paid this much by so many ponies. I wanted to return their bits, but they refused…”
Rarity chuckled. “Oh, sweetie, you worry too much. Ponies of Ponyville are very kind and they always forgive Ditzy for her accidents… though some call her Derpy as a tease. In turn, Miss Ditzy was afraid to visit many shops, which is why she hired you in the first place. You should just accept payment for a job well done.”
“If you say so,” Nica said before her ears perked up, her mod shifting immediately. “You were saying something about helping a pony in trouble. Whatever it is about, I’m in!”
“Splendid.” She levitated Nica onto her back and started walking towards the train station. “Manehattan, here we come!”
Perched on the double seat inside the train, Nica looked out the window, watching as the trees, buildings and hills were moving on the horizon. I seem to have a lot of stamina and I am quite fast. I wonder…
“You seem deep in thought, what are you thinking about, dear?” Rarity asked, sitting next to the pokemon with her forehooves placed between her hind legs.
Nica turned away from the view and looked up at Rarity. “I’m just wondering. If I ran towards Manehattan, would I arrive there faster than this train?”
Rarity raised a forehoof up to her mouth and laughed. “You, reach Manehattan first while running? You have an interesting sense of humor.” After she stopped laughing, noticing Nica’s serious stare, she asked, “You weren’t joking, were you?”
She shook her head.
“Well… Earth ponies pull the train between Ponyville and Appaloosa nearly as fast coal-powered or magic-powered trains, but the road to Manehattan is way longer. I certainly do not question your speed, but you would need to have more stamina than those earth ponies to win the race to Manehattan.”
Nica smiled cheerfully. “Sounds like a challenge. I’m so racing the train once I come back to Ponyville.”
“Your love for challenge reminds me of Rainbow Dash. She’s our friend. Have you two met yet?” Rarity asked.
“Not really,” Nica said with a shake of her head. “Is she nice? What is she like?”
“Well... “ Rarity said, looking at the ceiling while tapping her chin. “She is very athletic, competitive and easy to provoke. Usually, she was the first to rush into a fight and take action, but she matured quite a bit and is now much better at teamwork and more level headed than before.” She lowered her head and looked at Nica. “I suppose she is kind, but a bit rough around the edges if you annoy her.”
“Oh… sounds like many pokemon from my dream. They were also athletic, competitive and easy to provoke, all willing to act and battle on the spot. I feel Rainbow Dash would have fun wherever I came from.”
“Speaking of which,” Rarity said, “I still don’t know much about your home and your past. The only thing I know about you is that you don’t speak our language, possess powerful abilities, electrocuted my sister by accident and felt very guilty about it. Would you tell me something about yourself while we ride this train?” She smiled warmly. “It will help us pass the time.”
Nica nodded and smiled sheepishly. The day she hurt young ponies being the worst day of her life.
“Oh, sorry, I didn’t mean to bring back sad memories.”
“It’s okay.” Nica forced a smile. “Still, before I tell you about my past, can you tell me more about my job and the pony that needs my help?”
“Oh, but of course,” Rarity said. She waited for the service to place two cups with tea on the table before them, levitating over a cup and taking a sip. “Miss Coco Pommel is a friend of mine who once worked for my rival. She revealed that her boss was cheating and gave up her job, and we became friends ever since.” She took another sip and lowered the cup, waiting for Nica to drink some tea as well. “Recently, Miss Pommel found out about a part of Manehattan which lacked clothing stores, and there was a building with storage for sale very cheaply, which she could turn into a shop of her own.”
Nica nodded.
“Sadly, while my friend has a very good heart, she is a bit naive. The police in Manehattan do not have enough staff to patrol the entire city, and this part of Manehattan is considered to be very dangerous, filled with thugs and gangs.” She sighed, her ears drooped. “It did not take long before Coco found out why her new accommodation was so cheap.”
“Sounds like a criminal organization is involved. My trainer dedicated her life to fight crime.” Nica narrowed her eyes and clench bronze edge of her forepaw. “Just lead the way and I’ll defend Miss Coco Pommel with my life!”
Rarity looked around nervously, her friend’s shouting caught the attention of nearby passengers, giving them disapproving glares.
“How uncouth that pets are now allowed to ride a train, for shame,” spoke an arrogant looking unicorn mare wearing a white dress. “Miss Rarity, oh, my deepest apologies? If this creature is with you, it must be of great importance.” She lowered her head apologetically and looked away.
Rarity rolled her eyes, recognizing the unicorn as one of Canterlot ponies she meet on Twilight’s birthday party while in presence of Fancy Pants. Once the numerous eyes were no longer on them, she looked at Nica and said, “It’s not exactly a criminal organization. According to the letter, a group of thugs formed a gang and even thought they could become a mafia family. They started terrorizing shops and homes, demanding money for protection. They are small fry, but finding a bodyguard proved problematic.”
“Problematic, why?” Nica asked, taking another sip from her teacup.
“Most ponies were not interested in working at this part of Manehattan, or were too afraid to face thugs. A few shady individuals offered their services, but the payment they demanded was even worse than simply paying the protection money.” She gave Nica a trustful smile. “I showed Coco’s letter to Twilight, and when she told me about your talents and that you are looking for a job, I thought you were perfect for this task.”
“You can count on me,” Nica said enthusiastically. It was the chance she was hoping for, an opportunity to help a friend of her friend. She could use her skills to defend a pony in trouble against a bunch of thugs.
Could her day get any better?
Coco Pommel observed the city from the window of her store, seeing nothing but dirt and graffiti covering the walls of nearby homes, or a group of angry and arguing ponies wearing dirty and damaged clothes. Fashion crime probably not being their only offence.
Whatever she earned from her hard work went to pay the thugs, which kept her stressed and on high alert. A white-bordered lavender sailor collar with a scarlet tie decorated her neck, which she rubbed over and over out of stress.
“How… how could I end up in this mess?” She struggled to resist bursting into tears. Her career and well-being were at risk due to her hasty decision. All of her bits and resources she had became this very shop. She couldn’t sell it, and leaving it would leave her sleeping on the street.
Her ears perked upward and she flinched, screaming in panic upon hearing knocking at her door. She raised a forehoof up to her chest, hyperventilating. She approached her glass counter and asked, “W-who’s t-t-there?”
“It is me, your friend Rarity.”
Coco Pommel smiled with an open mouth, dashing towards the door. She opened it quickly and embraced her friend. “Rarity, I’m so happy to see a friendly face!” She released her friend and started walking back and forth. “It was terrible, Rarity, just terrible. I thought I was making the best decision of my life, opening my own little store, only for it to turn into a nightmare.” She sat and held her forelegs near her chest under her neck like a pleading puppy. “Those mean ponies… they were so scary.”
“Now, now,” Rarity said, patting her on the shoulder. “You do not need to worry any longer. When I heard about your trouble, I could not leave you to those savages.” She pointed at the long-tailed critter sitting patiently in front of them. “I brought a solution to all of your problems.”
Coco blinked in confusion, gazing at the pear-shaped creature who smiled cheerfully and waved at her. She looked Rarity in the eyes and asked, “Ummm… do not get me wrong, I appreciate any help… but how can this cute little animal help me?”
“Oh darling, I know her appearance may be deceiving, but trust me.” She punched the air with her forehoof. “Under her soft appearance lies a powerful warrior with a heart of gold.”
“R-really?”
The critter stood on her rear paws swung her tail like a sword. “I won’t let anyone hurt you, I swear.”
Coco looked between the critter and Rarity’s smiling face before gesturing for them to enter. “Please come in and make yourselves at home.”
Nica stepped into the shop, walking on her two feet while examining her surroundings. At the other end of the room in front of the entrance was a glass counter with a door behind it. The left side of the room was filled with dummies wearing clothes in a variety of colors and shapes. Some having holes for wings. They were not on the quality level of Rarity’s work and certainly not as over-the-top. On the right side were similar dummies, but were wearing dresses and skirts instead.
Aside from the dummies, she noticed a few glass counters with some sort of shoes which would fit on pony hooves. In the left and right corner of the room were small platforms with curtains, most likely if a pony needed some privacy while testing different outfits. Wait… ponies are naked most of the time, so what’s the point of having these? she thought, finding ponies culture to be overly complicated.
“Please, come this way.”
Nica looked towards the source of the voice, approaching the door behind main glass counter. The room they were now in was even bigger, filled with random machinery, numerous rolled materials with a diversity of colors and numerous identical clothes being stacked atop one another.
“This is my storage and workplace,” Coco explained before pointing at a sofa in front of square table, poking the sofa in an invitation for her quests to sit on.
Accepting the invitation, Nica ran closer and climbed up onto the sofa, sitting in the middle. Rarity sat on her right while Coco sat on her left. Her ears drooped, the aura of worry and depression she sensed before once again grew in strength. She raised her paw and gently stroked Coco’s side.
“Would you like… some tea?” Coco asked.
Rarity shook her head. “We already drank tea in the train. While I do not want to act impolite, I need to return to Ponyville as quickly as possible.”
“Huh, but why?” Coco asked.
Rarity flapped her mane with a hoof. “Let’s just say that Miss Photo Finish is interested in making my mane a big hit. I need to make preparations for the shoot.”
“Oh… I’m sorry,” Coco said and lowered her head, rubbing her arm nervously.
“Oh, no no no, do not feel sad, your problems are way more important.” She stepped from the sofa and pointed at the critter. “Coco, meet my friend and Twilight’s newest care, Nica. She’s a pokemon traveler from a distant unknown land and she is still recovering from her magically forced amnesia.” She walked towards the earth pony and turned around. “Miss Nica, meet Miss Coco Pommel, my friend and a fellow very talented fashion designer.”
The earth pony raised her forehoof towards the critter. “Nice to meet you, Miss Nica.”
The pokemon took a deep breath and performed a graceful bow. “The pleasure is all my, Miss Pommel.” She grabbed the hoof and shook it. “I must say, your tie looks so elegant.”
Coco blushed. “Oh… thank you sweetie.” She lowered her head. “Your collar is elegant as well, a true masterpiece that fits your colors perfectly.”
“It is so elegant thanks to Rarity’s hard work and Maud’s generosity,” Nica said, poking the gems on her collar. “Maud Pie shared her collection of gems, Twilight and Starlight magically made them absorb my electricity so I wouldn’t hurt anyone by accident, and Rarity turned it into this precious collar.” She pointed at the metallic tag with ‘Raichu’ written on it. “Twilight improved it recently to translate my language. I can talk with you as long as I wear it.”
“Translate? Absorb electricity?” Coco asked.
“My species name’s Raichu and I’m capable of using electricity, so I need something to restrain my power so I wouldn’t hurt you or any other innocent creature. Also, according to ponies, when I speak, all they hear are words made of the name of my own species, but Twilight’s improvement changed that.”
“Oh, I see…” Coco said, her face showing growing interest. “You look a bit chubby, but you’re definitely incredibly cute. I love those cute funny ears of yours, and your tail is very impressive. I find it hard to believe that someone with your adorable features is capable of hurting anypony with electricity.”
Nica blushed. “Thank you, I get that a lot.” She chuckled. “I must say, you look adorable yourself. Your blue-teal mane, your blue eyes, the color of your fur…”
Rarity cleared her throat, breaking the discussion. “I apologize for interrupting, but I need to take my leave very soon and I would like to say something before that.”
Coco raised forehoof to her mouth and looked to the side. “Oh, but of course. Please, do speak Lady Rarity.”
The unicorn pointed at the large critter and explained, “Miss Nica may look adorable, but she is battle-hardened and possesses the ability to use electricity for combat. She was looking for a job, and when I learned of your terrible situation, I thought she could become your bodyguard.”
“Oh…” Coco said, taking her eyes away from Rarity to look at Nica. “You want to work for me as a bodyguard? But you are so small…” she poked her belly, “...and soft.”
“Don’t let my size deceive you, Miss Pommel, I assure you that I can protect you from any danger.” She puffed her chest proudly. “Lately, I started teaching Princess Twilight self-defense. I can evade her incredibly powerful spells, and I even managed to break her barrier recently. Furthermore, according to my memories, I fought a few hundreds battles while being way smaller than I am now.”
“R-really?” Coco said, her eyes wide.
“R-really?” Rarity said and gasped. “You held your ground against Twilight Sparkle?” The moment Nica nodded, Rarity walked towards the exit. “I believe that settles it. I will be leaving back to Ponyville. I wish you both the best of luck, farewell.”
The moment the door closed, Nica looked Coco in the eyes and asked, “So… ummm… can I…”
“You’re hired.”
Nica displayed her teeth in a wide smile. The aura of fear and depression she sensed weakened substantially. In a rush of excitement, she leaped towards Coco, tackling her from the sofa onto the floor as she embraced her neck in a hug. “I swear, I’ll be the best bodyguard, I won’t fail you.”
“T-t-that’s g-great… b-but… could you… release my neck… c-can’t b-breath.”
Nica flinched and held her forepaws together apologetically. “Sorry!” She approached, helping the earth pony stand up. She took a few steps backward and saluted. “As your bodyguard, I’m awaiting your orders. Is there anything you want me to do?”
Coco blushed and tapped her forehooves together. “W-well…”
“Yes?”
Coco’s ears dropped and blush on her face became even stronger. “Ummm… Lately, I have been under alot of stress… Will you allow me… to rub your cute white belly? It would relax me.” She looked to the side in panic. “I mean… if you don’t want to.”
“Sure,” Nica said, approaching on her two feet before wrapping her tail around Coco’s belly, lifting her up. Walking on four legs with a bit of struggle, she approached the sofa, perching the confused pony on it. She climbed up, perched herself on Coco’s legs and exposed her belly. “I love nuzzling, cuddling and belly rubs, and I have gained a few hours of experience in this field under Fluttershy’s guidance. In other words, my fluffiness is at your disposal.”
Coco blinked in confusion. After explaining her embarrassing request, this was certainly not an answer she’d expected. She carefully touched the fluffy white belly with a tip of her hoof, gently rubbing against it, her nerves calming down. The creature on her legs had closed eyes and bit her tongue, radiating in satisfaction. Coco exhaled and smiled warmly. Not only had she gotten herself a bodyguard who –in theory– was going to save her business and protect her from mean thugs, but her bodyguard was the cutest and most cuddly creature she could’ve wished for, surpassing even her most pleasant dreams.
Could her day get any better?
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Now we're going to Coco Pommel huh? I was wondering when we'd get to her as she's one of the story's tags. Can't wait to see where this goes.
So who is going to come into Coco’s life today and sweep her off her hooves? This poor mare deserves a ton of happiness her way!
Yeah she cute but deadly
I'm glad they're finally putting quality works into the Featured Box, because this, this is quality.
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Yeah, I never got over the fact the Pidgeot, one of his first members, and apart from Pikachu, the most loyal one, was released and never once visited...
Speaking of Pikachu, what DOES he suffer? He seems much more powerful than an ordinary one, but apart from few incidents, he was actually cured from all negative effects.
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Nica will meet many characters, it's just that Coco's apperante was big enough to mark her as main characters and she appears early enough.
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Don't worry, Nica's on the job. Her combat experience make her perfect for a body-guard position, and she's still cute, kind and cheerful enough to make the mare happier. As for the "sweep her off her hooves" part, tackling ponies when she's excited is something she can't resist, though lifting Coco with her tail would be considered a little bit lack of respect for personal space (but to be fair, ponies levitated and grabbed Nica off the ground quite often, so it's only fair she do the same).
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I don't think deadly is accurate here since Nica is really scared of hurting others by accident. I think 'cute but a force to be recon with' suits her better.
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Why thank you. To be honest, I wanted to get to the Coco's ark faster, but I thought it would be out of place if Nica didn't visit Applejack and meet Maud Pie yet. There were some small friendly favors in Ponyville for her to do before she could go into the big city. I may consider uploading another chapter for 6 hours if I'll get more than 12 comments on this chapter in that time. Seeing readers excited for a chapter is quite motivating.
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Nice. Can't wait to see who else she meets.
Coco is sure to be safe under Nica's cute, cuddly powers
actually yeah we haven't seen Rainbow Dash yet,
have we?
That's uncouth, not uncoof.
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A massive case of 'Power Creep, Power Seep' and 'Strong as they need to be' I suppose.
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Ah, yes. When he battled Clement I was susrpised that he was an equal. Despite Bunnelby being Ground(?), and having the type advantage I thought Ash's Pikachu would totally destroy him. I mean it. A starting Jum leader vs person with many leagues and HUGE experience, not to mention that Pikachu CAN deal with those, immune to electrical types...
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I'm not a fan of making alicorns, but I believe that even earth pony can ascend. Not sure if it's true, never read it, but from IDW comic it seems Cadance was a pegasus, and ascended. So, it stands to reason that earth ponies can ascend too.
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Officially? There was an episode in the original series, at least in the dub, that stated that a year had past and another Pikachu short where Ash was celebrating their first meeting implying another year had past. I take the whole age thing with a grain of salt.
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Cadance was a pegasus, but all other supplementary material seemed to imply that if a powerful enough unicorn studied under Celestia there was a chance of being a princess. At no point were Earth Ponies ever mentioned.
And of course guys are immediately disqualified.
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Poor Pikachu's been Worfed pretty hard over the years.
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All we know is he'll never hit puberty.
I didn't knew they haven't met yet, Nica and Rainbow I mean, it seems I forgot that.
The chapters come out really fast.
Nice chapter. Coco was one of my favourite once.
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Pikachu gets his power levels reset every region, and tends to be as strong as the plot demands-even WITHIN an episode he went from unable to overwhelm a simple lightbulb to breaking out of a spaceship reactor.
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Yeah, at this point I would consider him to be able to hold his own against legendaries with ease...
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One of those times when writers are definetly to blame.
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Actually, it's her combat prowess, durability and skills that will keep Coco safe. Cute cuddly powers is just a nice bonus she has to offer.
Nope, she's the only one of Twilight's friends Nica didn't meet. Dash was busy with the Wonderbolts and she was unlucky enough that Nica went on a friendship mission during her visit.
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I am sure there are many memes with Maud being a rock gym leader. But yes, she would like to explore rock types.
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For me, Ash should gain 3-5 years during his adventures. While not every new region need to take a year to explore, I think half a year would be nice.
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Fixed, thanks.
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Can't argue with that. I wish Pikachu's abilities were more consistent. One time he defeat a legendary regice, mega evolved Lucario, or even beat Tyranitar and Metagross in a row and still have stamina to hurt Charizard a bit, another time lose to beginer Snivy (and by some mirackle, endure lots of attacks and a few minutes lng crushing from his fully evolved form during the turnament).
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I try to keep updating the side-story one chapter per day. It doesn't have as much quality as main story when it comes to grammar, but thanks to SilverDiamond, I can get the chapters running very quickly. The main story will maintain once/per/week uploading speed.
Once? Who replaced her as your fave then?
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I rather not. The fact that unevolved Pikachu managed to defeat a legendary pokemon in one vs one fight made legendary pokemon seem less impressive and special. When they were introduced, they were like powerful bosses that many pokemon need to team up against to defeat. Now with unevolved pokemon beating them in one vs one and with so many pseudo-legendaries running around, legendary pokemon are no longer special.
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Don't forget how in the current season, he had no idea what Teleport was, despite seeing and experiencing it dozens of times! Or how he scans the same Pokemon on a Pokedex no matter how many times he's seen it before.
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Well, he might scan pokemon he knows just to get them into his pokedex. After all, he gets a new one every season. But not knowing teleport despite being experienced with hundreds of pokemon? Stupid. Blame the writers, though.
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I was talking about how much experience Ash' Pikachu has. I wasn't talking about just ANY Pikachu beating a legend. I would dare say that Ash's Pikachu and Nica would be tied. Nica is all about planning and power, while Ash's pikachu is extremely unpredictable, and beaten stronger Raichu twice.
Accidentally pushed the next chapter early, eh?
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Ash's Pikachu faced a lot of challenges and was with Ash for many years, so he is powerful, but the same can be said about every pokemon who train under a trainer for years. (He may be talented, but he's not the only one who can grow this strong, for example elite four Infernape had extreme durability). Pikachu may have talent, but he's till unevolved and Pikachu's hp and def. stats are very poor, yet Ash's Pikachu endure damage that would take down Snorlax twice over. For me it looks more like a plot armor since he's pokemon mascoth and main character, which is why I can't take his victory against Regice seriously.
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I promissed that with enough feedback, I would upload another chapter soon, but when I did, it didn't update on main page. I wasn't sure if other readers were updated about it so I took it down and will try to upload it again tomorrow. (I suppouse main page display updates only once a day, not sure how it works).
I don't know how I feel about these fics.
On the one hand, Nica can deal with any situation no problem. She is earnest and sincere enough that she can get along with anypony, to the point that she can get away with electrocuting children after a pep talk and an apology speech. She understands others well enough to fix the changeling hive using a plan she came up with after meeting only Thorax, and also well enough to reform Trixy like ten minutes after meeting her.
And for any problem that can't or won't talk to her she can just stop with overwhelming force. In a fight she has: crazy mobility, good dps (including decent options for alpha strike), good cc with electricity, extreme tankyness, and limitless stamina. And she knows how to use all of it in a fight. The only thing that could actually pose a threat would be something that uses status effects, like sleep, but the only thing that seems likely to use that is the main villain whoo is just being sneaky in the background, and isn't affecting the plot yet.
And for anything else Twilight or Starlight can probably magic up a solution. Nica's having memory problems? Magic. Nica isn't childproof? Magic. Nica can't talk? Magic.
What I'm saying is none of the conflicts have tension. Nica will be able to come up with a solution because she has a solution to everything. The biggest obstacle she's having to overcome is her amnisia and she is literally just waiting for it to fix itself. Honestly it feels like the biggest piece of character development she's experienced is learning to not put her head in the ceiling whenever she jumps, because she had to work at that for like a week.
But on the other hand. OMG she's so fluffy and cute and nice and soft and cute and i love her and dawwwwwww she just booped her on the snoot and da belly rubs.i love da bellyrubs. an it's just so good!!! Everyone's just so frickin cute!!!
So yeah. Keep doin what your doing. I'm enjoying it more than i think i should.
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I can see where you're comming from, but I suppouse it just mean that Astra did a really nice job raising her. Not that Nica is flawless or anything, she have her weaknesses and character flaws, her desires and fears, but her body and skills, as well as her character was well developed during her years of adventures, so not much can challenge her. (Her memories are limiting factor, so in a sense she's developing into someone she was in the past while aquiring new experiences on the way.
Regardless, outside of the harsh begining and her struggle with controling/re-learning how to use her powers at the begining of the story, I didn't plan to let her face any dramatic tension. For now it's mostly a story how she's adapting to live among ponies as both sides learn about each other's culture. However, I can assure you, the time for dramatic tension and real challenge for Nica will come.
Thank you. I suppouse not everything needs to involve character development and challenges. In this case we have Nica who have very durable body and great skills, but she also have very low self-esteem and is desperate to make others happy. Equestira is just a really good place for someone like her, and as ponies show her friendship and kindness, she's more than willing to make them happy however she can. I think it's more of how ponies react to her. She's a visitor from distand land after all, and ponies want to make sure her forced stay is plesant, and she in turn want to use her powers to keep them save.
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Yeah, I guess so. Keep writing.
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No I focus on Fluttershy, Tempest, Trixie, Maud, maybe Starlight and I guess I find Mrs. Harswinney somewhat interessting lately. Chrysalis is still my favourite Villain it I don't take into account what some authors do with her. I don't enjoy every version.
Coco is still nice, but the hype is gone.
Nica, please, dial down the cute. It's too much.
Hmm... *rings up The Helper * "We got a live one! Doctor Whooves style!"
release my neck… c-can’t b-breath
1. Breathe.
There are criminal organisations in Equestria and they're all led by the same stallion by the name of Moriarty. His Cutie-Mark is an apple with a bite out of it.
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Doesn't sound like an Honest Apple.
But. Her name is already Ditzy...
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Contrary to popular belief, the loss with Snivy is entirely justified. Pikachu had been trading lightning with Zekrom not long beforehand, lost half his moves, clearly tired himself out trying to use said lost moves, and both he and Ash were utterly confused by the situation. More importantly, it wasn't a big deal. It was a simple trainer battle with nothing at stake besides Trip's opinion. Ash cared more about finding out what was wrong with Pikachu, and Pikachu cared more about the fact that he couldn't use half his moves.
Also, the battle in the Unova League takes place after Pikachu has fully recovered his electrical powers, near the end of the journey where even if he got reset, he'd be back at his previous endgame strength anyway, not to mention that as a Pokemon League battle he would be giving it his all since Ash's dream was at stake.
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Ever consider that maybe Ash just has to refresh his memory every so often?! Just because he's seen the Pokemon before and battled it several times doesn't mean he has flawless recollection of it! I remember lots of Pokemon, but that doesn't mean I know them inside out! I can recognize a Tangela, but that doesn't mean I remember its type and movepool off the top of my head! Or even when it debuted in the games!
Make sure you get the correct shampoo, Rarity.
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To be fair, I do that every generation or so, because not only did they start updating the Pokédex entries with new and interesting information about the Pokémon (instead of rewording the same few entries repeatedly), but I also don't have an encyclopedic knowledge of the 700+ (now 900+) different Pokémon that there are.
If I, a 21-year-old who likes memorizing random trivia for fun, have trouble remembering every Pokémon, then I think I can forgive Ash, a forever-10-year-old who just wants to have fun exploring and battling, for forgetting some as well.