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This story is a sequel to Little Lost Raichu


It has been over two weeks since she woke up in the Everfree Forest, devoid of memories of her past and unaware of her own powers and abilities. Twilight and her friends accepted her, nursed back to health, fed her and provided with a place to live. Despite all the accidents and troubles she caused, she was met with kindness, forgiveness and friendship.

With part of her memories restored and aware of her survival and combat abilities, Raichu is determined to repay their kindness. How? By becoming a mercenary (help for hire) and earning her keep.

No matter how dangerous or silly the job, no matter if her life would be in danger, she was going to be useful. Will ponies underestimate her due to her innocent and weak appearance? Or will she prove them wrong and make her caretakers proud?

List of Prof-readers:
Jay Tarrant (Thanks for very quick proof-reding and all your constructive feedback).

Golarala (Thanks for checking for missing errors in prologue and chapter 1).

SilverDiamond (Thanks a lot for a very quick assistance with the side-story, it will greatly haste the uploading progress.)

Chapters (16)
Comments ( 292 )

Well, if the apples are baked, it should get rid of the sour taste. So long as AJ uses some sugar.

Eh, I say leave the prequel link, there's not really any other good way to link stories on this site. Just have it explained in the description.

Applejack is gonna have a hard time getting along with Nica in the future, eh?

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Well, if the apples are baked, it should get rid of the sour taste. So long as AJ uses some sugar.

Good point. I'm sure Big Mac will subtly ensure that AJ adds extra sugar into the mix. (Of screen of course).

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Eh, I say leave the prequel link, there's not really any other good way to link stories on this site. Just have it explained in the description.

Alright. I just hoped more people who read the main story would be interested in this side-story, which is why I updated main story with link to the sone not long ago, but I see it's not the case. A pity, considering that I want to finish this story before continuing update of the main one.

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Applejack is gonna have a hard time getting along with Nica in the future, eh?

Naaaah... I don't think there will be any problem in this regard.
Nica is grateful to Applejack for all she did for her, and she'll no doubt endure the sour taste to make her happy.
AJ on the other side always had trouble when interacting with most animals since plenty of them are threat to her farm, but Nica actually proved not only trustworthy but also hard working. While it's new to the farm mare, Nica earned her respect, There's nothing to fear.

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Ah. So much for apple drama. Eh, makes sense though.

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We both know Big Mac is the real baker in the family, AJ will just ask him to make them 😉

Man, what's with these headaches? First Mayor Mare, now Applejack? :rainbowhuh: Something tells me this has to do with that Spooky Dude from chapter 10 of the main story.

(Thanks for very quick proof-reding and all your constructive feedback).

Aww, thanks :twilightblush:

“Ah have an idea. Ah’ll bake some apple pies for Nica to thank her, she’ll love them.”

Big Mac chuckled nervously.

well an applepie should be sweeter and alright for her to eat I believe.

I like this so far.

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With so many comments about Apple Pie being sweet, I decided to change the ending of this chapter a little to:

“Ah have an idea. Ah’ll bake some apple pies for Nica to thank her, she’ll love them.”

"Ah'm sure she will." Big Mac chuckled nervously. "Just... don't forget to add lots of sugar."

"Extra sweet cakes for sugarcube like Nica? Got it," Applejack said with a firm nod.

Big Mac turned around and sighed in relief.

I was even considering to add t the end "Bullet Dodge" or ", Big Maac turned around and sighed in relief, wondering if the saying 'Bullet Dodged' applied to this situation.

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You're very welcome.

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Man, what's with these headaches? First Mayor Mare, now Applejack? :rainbowhuh: Something tells me this has to do with that Spooky Dude from chapter 10 of the main story.

Big Mac have those as well, but he just hide it well. Let's just say that something really bad is happening under ponies nose and they're unaware of it. In my opinion, the worst kind of threat is the one that happens without anyone realizing it. It's really bad to just one day wake up to another calm peaceful day, only to find out that everything is ruined and bad guys won by operating under their very muzzle.

So yeah... while it's obvious that the Spooky Dude from chapater 10 doesn't hold hostile intention towards Nica (if he wanted to hurt her, he had a perfect opportunity), there seem to be hidden motives going on in his head, and his influence over Equestria spread while everyone think it's just a headache.

Ooook... was it really necessary to repeat the entire chapter from the main story? It's a fairly good chapter, and the whole Trixie thing was really heartwarming and funny to read, and to re-read, but I don't see... why is it here. I was fully expecting for new "story" to appear right after the Mayor Mare scene, maybe ponies from around Ponyville reading Nica's resumee on a public bulletin board or something. Setting up at least some of her future jobs. Something like that.

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Ooook... was it really necessary to repeat the entire chapter from the main story? It's a fairly good chapter, and the whole Trixie thing was really heartwarming and funny to read, and to re-read, but I don't see... why is it here. I was fully expecting for new "story" to appear right after the Mayor Mare scene, maybe ponies from around Ponyville reading Nica's resumee on a public bulletin board or something. Setting up at least some of her future jobs. Something like that.

There's a reason why link in author notes leads to chapter 1. The part you read is called Prologue for a reason, it was meant to introduce new readers to this side-story (I just found scene with Major Mare and Trixie to suit this role quite well). There's also a reason why I uploaded chapter 1 as well, since it is where new story starts. I appologise if it caused any confusion.

As for your idea with bulletin board, I must say it's quite good, but Mayor Mare stated that outside of Ditzy (Derpy), there are no other job offers NIca can use. But don't worry, Nica won't be only assisting her friends from Ponyville, a big opportunity will come where she'll need to travel to away and be given important responsibilities.

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I was even considering to add t the end "Bullet Dodge" or ", Big Maac turned around and sighed in relief, wondering if the saying 'Bullet Dodged' applied to this situation.

Isn't the saying "doged the bullet or something?, well not sure if that works here, but I liked the change.

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I'm not sure 'mercenary' is the right term for what Nica's being, but good for her regardless.

Does this mean Maud is in the next chapter?

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How long have the twins been babies?

Without a second to waste, she returned the cupcake. “Here you go, just please, don’t cry.” As the wild crying was replaced by a cheerful laughter, she sighed in relief.

oh no they already learn they get what they want with her.

Before Nica even noticed, she was being pulled by the smaller creature. Using her own strength she pulled in the opposite direction, her legs anchored against the floor.

I don't think any explanation can ever get me over the fact what those babies manage to do in that show.

Not my favourite chapter but not bad.

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I'm not sure 'mercenary' is the right term for what Nica's being, but good for her regardless.

She finds that term to be cool, and I'm sure she'll give mercenaries a good name with her dedication.

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Awww...that was nice.

Thank you. Poor Nica had really hard time in there. She can handle any danger, but fear of hurting defensless fillies is just too much.

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Does this mean Maud is in the next chapter?

Eeyup.

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How long have the twins been babies?

I dunno. Since this story takes place in season 7, I think they are still fairly young. They didn't have the anniversary of their first sneezes though.

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oh no they already learn they get what they want with her.

Sadly that's the case here. Nica just can't stand seeing such young ponies cry, and they can exploit it.

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I don't think any explanation can ever get me over the fact what those babies manage to do in that show.

Not my favourite chapter but not bad.

Trust me, I didn't like how OP they were in the episode, but it still happened, so I decided to just roll with it.

Quite a few missing words. Mainly small this like "the".

However a major issue is with a line where Pound Cake had hurt his sister. You said Pound Cake used his strength against "her" sister.

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Quite a few missing words. Mainly small this like "the".

However a major issue is with a line where Pound Cake had hurt his sister. You said Pound Cake used his strength against "her" sister.

Fixed, thanks, No matter how many times I check, some stuff always seems to be missing. If you can point out some of the missing "the", it would be nice.

Awww...Nica gets along really well with Maud. Love seeing Maud here, one of my favorite characters of the show.

Hmm... here's a question i'm sure everyone is thinking...

What pokemon would suit Maud the most?

Let's just say that something really bad is happening under ponies nose and they're unaware of it. In my opinion, the worst kind of threat is the one that happens without anyone realizing it. It's really bad to just one day wake up to another calm peaceful day, only to find out that everything is ruined and bad guys won by operating under their very muzzle.

That's... actually pretty Lovecraftian, if you're know what it is.

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Hmm, Rampados, Boldore/Gigalith, Dwebble/Crustle, Tyrunt... Sandslash, Golem, Onix, Excadrill, Diggersby? Not sure, though...

Mudbray or Mudsdale?

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don't ask me. i can only name about 10 pokemons without consulting Bulbapedia. evolved forms don't count you see....

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1) I did look up the ground and rock type pokemon.
2) Why don't evolutions count?

After I ignored one certain part that I always make a comment on, I managed to only enjoy this chapter and it had one of my most favourite ponies in it Maud Pie.

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Eh.... evolutions don't count for me. Feels a bit like cheating

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Awww...Nica gets along really well with Maud. Love seeing Maud here, one of my favorite characters of the show.

She's everyone's favorite. Luckily, Nica can sense aura of emotions, so Maud's stoic face won't fool her.

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Exadrill would suit Maud really well, if not for the fact that it's steel/ground type. As for which rock type would suit her, no clue, too many to choice from.

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After I ignored one certain part that I always make a comment on

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Does a pokemon for sompony needs to be pure one type? If not, Excadrill for Maud it is. =)

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Nice. Love Maud, can't wait to see what Nica does next.

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Evolutions were there since the very first gen. Just how is it cheating?

I really like this side story, also love how you did Maud’s character well and found a way for Nica to understand the stoic faced Ponies emotions behind her facade of calm boredom.

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One species, one pokemon from that lineage.
Just making it a bit harder for myself on purpose

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There will be too little options left. I recommend rethinking that rule.

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eh, call me silly, but it's a personal challenge. i just want to see if i can remember many pokemons and their evolutions and not just the evolutions of a few pokemon.

just a personal challenge

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And that's why you should INCLUDE evolutions. How can you learn evo's, if you don't "use" them...

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It goes like this...

1. think of 10 pokemon, doesn't matter what evolution of it you use.
2. try to remember the previous/next evolution of your 10 pokemon and add them to your list in front or back of the pokemon they are evolutions of.
3. for example: blank/Pikachu/blank
4. add the missing evolutions: Pichu/Pikachu/Raichu
5. rinse and repeat 10 times.

Understand how the challenge works now?

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We can do better.
https://www.pokemon.com/us/pokedex/
Select "Surprise me", and use first eight. And try to remember their evolutions, if they have those. If you want to check yourself, just click on the pokemon, and you'll find their evo's just below their entry.

And still, you can't ignore evolutions, if you want to learn them. That was my whole point. And I THINK I know a bit over ten lines of pokemon, without looking it up. =)

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well, i don't.

So, hence the personal challenge XD

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evolutions don't count for me. Feels a bit like cheating

What does it mean, then?

HA! Poor Starlight. Though to be fair, she did train herself to fight, unlike Twilight, who rather just be a bookworm.

I personally think that if Twilight actually put stock in learning combat magic and training, she would be even stronger than Celestia and Luna. Just what I think though.

Nica’s name is misspelled right away in the chapter. I was kinda hoping that Nica would have channeled TFS Piccolo when training Twilight. Hopefully Nica will have a fight with Starlight Glimmer soon.

Nica shook her head. “No accident… I just…” She rubbed her forearm nervously. “Let’s just say that I ended up testing my durability. Turns out that falling from a hundred meters of height into a pile of sharp rocks made of granite caused waaaaay less damage than I anticipated.

Has she practised suicide?

Nica nodded. “I simply exchanged my ideology and moral values with her.” She displayed her teeth in a cheerful smile. “There was something in big ego and arrogance that annoyed me for some reason. I’m really happy I helped Trixie find a better way in life.”

I get the feeling Nica is one of those that like to see the evil in Trixies behavior or what they see as evil.

“Alright, fine, you convinced me. It seems I need to rely on more than just on my defensive magic.” Twilight spread her wings and flapped them, launching herself into air.

I want to see a parody of a fight where she is trying her hardest to bore the enemy to death with her shieldmagic. Kind of like in pokemon with that Metapod fight.

Twilight frowned. “How am I supposed to evade? You’re hitting me even when I’m flying at full speed. Oh, wait… I can teleport… Maybe I should fly and teleport at the same time.”

Nica massaged her forehead. This was going to be a looong night.

While I hope Nica can be something like their equal, not in power but in battel abilitie later, I liked it and I want to see Nica and Twilight Vs Luna and Celestia, of course I kind of hope for them to win to actually show that all of them need to train.

What I meant with being equal was since Nica seems to learn what she is good at, I kind of expect her to be able to evade much and maybe having a 50% chance to have more endurance than the Alicorns or just being fast enough to have a good chance of beating them because of that. That is if she should have all of her power back and get stronger because of what she learned recently.

This is maybe a good example, you know in fighting games when there are maybe speed and power types? Not sure in how many it actually is, but I believe that was in the pokemon game from my brother. It is maybe no big theory, but I like the idea.

I accept her not being or not getting as strong as the others as long as she kind of has something like her speed that can compare to powers the princesses have.

I admit I don't understand the part with Starlight. I mean I watched an anime where the guy that always trained was forced to stop training at least for a day so his trained body ceels could "reaload" and after he was well rested he was so much stronger.
However this doesn't makes to much sense for me yet that Starlight isn't allowed to do anything since I'm not sure how much she trains her magic maybe. I don't want Nica to force her to sit down only to ensure Twilight get's to be stronger than Starlight faster.

This again was a chapter I enjoyed.

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Derpibooru doesn't work in Russia, maybe imgur?

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