Great next chapter but I was wondering if it is possible that they can come out sooner. Don't rush them if you can't though.

Honestly the story itself has potential, but so far the 2nd chapter can be skipped. It's just a list of Copy Pasted skills, which honestly no one reads or remembers, and many of them wont even be used in the story I bet.
1st chapter was introduction, 2nd chapter is explanation of skills that was A LOT longer than it should have been and not really necessary in my opinion.
I hope the 3rd chapter is the start of the actual story and there would be some progress in it.

Sorry for the criticism. I hope this will be in any way helpful.

Wow, and I thought the main Character of my Story was op...

Awesome!!!

oh, I just realized you took inspiration from star eater and don't get cocky right? cause I'm not mad about it, I'm ECSTATIC IT'S AWESOME,
thanks for doing that btw, cause I miss don't underestimate me which was supposed to be a renewal of don't get cocky but the mods said no that's plagiarism even though the guy who made don't get cocky is dead (rip) they removed both of them and I'm calling bs.

Oh and thanks for continued work on this marvel of a fic

9179315
I couldn't have said it better.

Call Aldrin

What kind of powers would Buzz Aldrin have? Do you call him and a space shuttle crashes into your enemy like this.

9179401
Thank you for pointing that out to me I just fixed it

Not much I can say we will just have to wait till next chapter because there wasn't much to this one

9179315
OMNI:Here go nuts... https://www.fimfiction.net/story/401825/dont-you-dare

9180021
Yes I know but it’s just not the same as a Gary Stu bruh don’t you dare is not a Gary Stu story

9180109
OMNI:Eh...fair enough.

9180109
Aww thank you, I feel flattered

9180509
I am available. PM me a docs link.

One million years later.....

(I wonder how that would affect his mentality?)

9180736
An interesting concept to play with if I have time

How does one realise when their time in the chamber is up? It's not like you just realise that a thousand years have passed, and it's definitely not like he can just count the time in his head. Disregarding him sleeping at all, I doubt he could count to 31,557,600,000 seconds in his head

9181445
To wait and see. Also, great job with the math

Three things 1: this is awesome and you should feel awesome! 2: what is the upload schedule if you have one for this? And 3: Can we have more!?

9187419
There is no set schedule I'm going to try to release a chapter once a month and there will definitely be more. If something happens to cause delay in release of a chapter I will inform everyone.

9187428
Damn that was fast... But thanks for the answer! Good to know I will look forward to the next chap!!!

This is amazing and awesome I hope you can continue making more

More :3

I'm looking forward to what happens "NEXT TIME ON,I HAVE THE POWER OF GODS"

Penance Stare=You look directly into your opponent's eyes and you turn all of their sins, wrong doings, and the pain (both physical and emotional) of everyone that they harmed or that were harmed in their name that were committed in their lifetime and make them feel it. It leaves the targets eyes smoldering like charcoal.

Oh celestia you batter not fuck with this one

9199587
Technically it'd only work on villains and creatures in the Everfree Forest since ponies was rather.. Shall we go with skittish or overly innocent?

9252885
Boo hoo.

Actually the Byakugan was second.

Author is your story still alive?

(I didn't know how to make a dragon icon, so I used an L in place of it to stand for legendary and the number next to it is how many times that I reset each skill on my character.)

You to. Good to see a Skyrim fan.

When is the next update?

The next chapter is coming I'm not positive when I'm going to be putting it up I'm trying to make sure that it's the best it can be and I've also been quite busy at work so I apologize

9345087
Looking forward to the next chapter.

Is this dead?

9422485
No I'm currently waiting on an editor

The Smooze's Immunity
You are completely immune to all forms of magic.

Op doesn't even begin to describe it

So you basically wanted the most overpowered character possible, hopefully it's funny then because with no actual threat to this much power there won't be a story otherwise.

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I don’t know why there are two dislikes on this comment cause this guy is kinda right I mean I had to skip all the powers in order to not have to read for half an hour on it but I want you guys to know that this IS super OP like.... more than Don’t Get Cocky but the way they can level things out is to give them a weakness or create one.

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Both you and Platinumwayne are correct as of right now nothing is really a threat to him however as the story progresses I do plan on introducing something that will challenge Jack. Also, I will confirm that I do plan on introducing something later on in the story that will be difficult for Jack to contend with that is all I will say on the matter and I will let your own imaginations run wild with what it could possibly be or if it's more than one thing

Holy...fuck.
That's...wow. I know you said op but damn. It took me about 15 minutes to read that. 15 minutes just for his list of powers. I'm not complaining or disliking the story just....whew.

I... I...

I LOVE IT

9556050
Now they're just one problem how much mana does he have because if he doesn't have enough mana for some of the spells he basically just got a bunch of spells that he can't use because he has a very little amount of magic meaning that he can't use all them.

Honestly, I'm not one for stories where the protag is overpowered as fuck..... but this..... this has caught my interest immensely.....

Hope that i skip all of the skill wouldn't be affect me greatly in the future reading this..

Damn, that's alot of words.
Too bad I ain't readin' them.