Chrysalis likes to practice photography now that she has so much free time. Her favorite subjects are four of her pony pets, Princess Twilight, Princess Celestia, Princess Luna, and Princess Cadence. Oh wait. Princess isn't in their names anymore. :)
8458180 Thanks! I don't usually like "painting a picture with words" but this pic inspired me. lol. working on the next chapter right now, it's a little more actually cloppy, but pretty lacking in photography so far. It follows the usual progression for my not quite dark stories, where I cement the dark tag in the second or third chapter. Whoopsies. Still, I knew that going in. I loved how the picture looks like innocent fun at first glance, but the closer you look, the more apparent it becomes that something... isn't quite right for those four gals.
Good story, but how is Chrysalis going to keep them as her pets, after all Celestia and Luna have to raise and lower the sun and moon, Cadance runs the Crystal Empire and Twilight down in Ponyville with her castle and the Cutie Map, also if Sunset were to return and find out about this she could undo ALL of what Chrysalis did to the four Princesses quickly.
8458276 Good questions! But I'll have to wait on answering them. Some are answered in the bit I'm writing. But honestly, it's ancient history now. I mean, that's at least 3 or four years ago. Could be as many as ten, or maybe even more. They've had a lot of time to resolve these little issues. That being said, I'm sure Shimmy is around somewhere. It's just that this is the exclusive "alicorns only" club that Chrissy keeps for herself. How selfish of her.
Honestly I'd be more concerned about Glimglam wandering around. She can F*** S*** up, and has proven willing to in the show. And Discord, of course.
The other question is "Where in the timeline is this?" It's clearly after Twilight's ascension, so what other characters are floating around. Is Flurry heart here? She'd be older now. What's an alicorn goddess gonna end up like if she grew up in this crazy world thinking it was the norm? What if they led her to believe that it's her sacred duty to raise the sun and moon, and that she's just a fledgling changeling queen that can't change? Shining armor would still be her dad... And really, isn't it family that matters?
And who says princesses need to run their countries after the changelings have conquered them? Why bother conquering them at all if that was the case?
So many questions! And I'll hit a few in the bit I'm writing, but certainly not all.
And, of course, the everpresent question in my changeling fics. Where the heck is Spike?
I dislike two things generally about mind break/control stories: the villain is portrayed as sympathetic, and the villain engages in wanton cruelty. I haven't seen either so far as it strikes that tenuous balance between the two. More story might change that, and I would be sad if it does, but so far I see a rather sexy short piece.
8458347 Actually, in this story Chrysalis will intentionally not be cruel. She might be mean here or there, but not needlessly cruel. It was one of the things I decided at the start. As far as sympathetic, I dunno about that. I try to make all my characters as empathetic as possible, but rarely do I try to make the villains sympathetic. I think the one case I can think of is "ex-smooze me." But that's for very specific reasons...
Also, sympathetic and cruel is very difficult to pull off since cruelty is basically the opposite of sympathy... But what do I know. lol.
8458359 I don't like it because mind breaking and mind control is often an inherently evil act. This is especially true if you are rewriting certain aspects of someone's personality and make them do things they would otherwise not do. It's why I have such a huge beef with the Friendship is Mind Control story. Twilight does horrible things to her friends, and because another also does bad things, that... makes what she did better? Sympathetic and cruel can be done. It just doesn't often make a story better.
In here, Chrissy literally broke Cadance's brain. She's done evil. Granted, it wasn't intentional, but that should decrease the scope of what she'd done. It's a trap a lot of stories fall into: forgetting what got them to that point and doing something that a character shouldn't or likely wouldn't given the context of their previous choices. When it happens, I just role my eyes, unsub to the story, and downvote depending on how bad they utterly screw the pooch.
Chrissy does have that fae succubus trope floating around her, so if anyone can do mind control right, it would be her. I speak for no one but myself, but the new changeling look is utterly hideous, so I like the stereotype. O am surprised there aren't more mind control stories involving her. She does deal with emotional manipulation more than anyone except perhaps Cadance, and has the villainous streak to want to do it in the first place. I like bad girls in general, but it seems more plausible that to use evil magic like mind control, it is best to start with an evil character. Plus, long tongues are hot.
8458397 I could see that. The only story I have where the main character does mind control and is painted as the protagonist is the ex-smooze me one I mentioned, but that's because The protagonist and the antagonist are the same character that's been warped by time travel/mind control/ and an alien infection. I was going to flick the story all the way back around to the beginning, and then run through it again from the antagonist's point of view, all while staying with the same character.
But that's the only one. The others I have, the "main characters" that do mind control are clearly the bad guys. I want people to empathize, but certainly not sympathize with them. And if you ever find yourself rooting for them, you're laughably wrong. Take my recent one, feather bangs.
He's a no holds barred bad guy. He doesn't think he is, and maybe it's not his fault. But is it a lions fault that it's a lion? He's still very much the bad guy.
And Glimmer is a bit... super evil still sometimes in cannon. But I haven't written much about her. lol.
100% with you on long tongues. We should start a club or something. Oddly this story has a bunch in common with chapter 6 of my other story, Competent Villains... Its the new leader for most active characters in a scene, has changelings, has tongues, and a few weirdly similar themes. But the Chrissy here is absolutely not CV:C Chrissy. That one would be... much less nice.
Oh, this is promising. Very highly so. Add my vote to the “please sir may we have some more” pile. The best part was keeping the reference image open in another window as I was reading this – seeing the actual poses and facial expressions made it twice as hot.
I love all the pets, though my favorite has to be Celestia. There’s nothing more fun than playing with a slave who isn’t quite broken yet, but who’s resigned to her new life and who’s perfectly obedient nonetheless. Forcing her to expose herself so openly is beautiful. Perhaps more focus on our pets’ backdoors in a future chapter, such as having a semi-unwilling Celestia bend over and hold her cheeks open for the camera for a prolonged period of time, the sheer humiliation she must feel as she imagines the world staring at her pucker and fapping to it …
… ahem. Imagination’s getting away from me.
I also second the vote for more CV:C. It’s how I first discovered your stories, years ago now. Always wondered what was going on with Rarity …
EDIT: The moment I post this, I notice chapter 2 is already up. Awesome.
Meh. Boring. Feels too much like ordinary, vanilla porn for my liking.
If the Princesses still had some fight left in them, it might be more interesting. But that would be a repeat of Competent Villains: Chrysalis with added photography, I suppose.
Very well-written. Quite sexy, even in this short chapter. :)
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Thanks! I don't usually like "painting a picture with words" but this pic inspired me. lol. working on the next chapter right now, it's a little more actually cloppy, but pretty lacking in photography so far. It follows the usual progression for my not quite dark stories, where I cement the dark tag in the second or third chapter. Whoopsies. Still, I knew that going in. I loved how the picture looks like innocent fun at first glance, but the closer you look, the more apparent it becomes that something... isn't quite right for those four gals.
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Oh, yeah. Twistedscarlett's art is a masterpiece. I got a commission from him a little while ago. Worth every penny.
Good story, but how is Chrysalis going to keep them as her pets, after all Celestia and Luna have to raise and lower the sun and moon, Cadance runs the Crystal Empire and Twilight down in Ponyville with her castle and the Cutie Map, also if Sunset were to return and find out about this she could undo ALL of what Chrysalis did to the four Princesses quickly.
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Good questions! But I'll have to wait on answering them. Some are answered in the bit I'm writing. But honestly, it's ancient history now. I mean, that's at least 3 or four years ago. Could be as many as ten, or maybe even more. They've had a lot of time to resolve these little issues. That being said, I'm sure Shimmy is around somewhere. It's just that this is the exclusive "alicorns only" club that Chrissy keeps for herself. How selfish of her.
Honestly I'd be more concerned about Glimglam wandering around. She can F*** S*** up, and has proven willing to in the show. And Discord, of course.
The other question is "Where in the timeline is this?" It's clearly after Twilight's ascension, so what other characters are floating around. Is Flurry heart here? She'd be older now. What's an alicorn goddess gonna end up like if she grew up in this crazy world thinking it was the norm? What if they led her to believe that it's her sacred duty to raise the sun and moon, and that she's just a fledgling changeling queen that can't change? Shining armor would still be her dad... And really, isn't it family that matters?
And who says princesses need to run their countries after the changelings have conquered them? Why bother conquering them at all if that was the case?
So many questions! And I'll hit a few in the bit I'm writing, but certainly not all.
And, of course, the everpresent question in my changeling fics. Where the heck is Spike?
I dislike two things generally about mind break/control stories: the villain is portrayed as sympathetic, and the villain engages in wanton cruelty. I haven't seen either so far as it strikes that tenuous balance between the two. More story might change that, and I would be sad if it does, but so far I see a rather sexy short piece.
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Actually, in this story Chrysalis will intentionally not be cruel. She might be mean here or there, but not needlessly cruel. It was one of the things I decided at the start. As far as sympathetic, I dunno about that. I try to make all my characters as empathetic as possible, but rarely do I try to make the villains sympathetic. I think the one case I can think of is "ex-smooze me." But that's for very specific reasons...
Also, sympathetic and cruel is very difficult to pull off since cruelty is basically the opposite of sympathy... But what do I know. lol.
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I don't like it because mind breaking and mind control is often an inherently evil act. This is especially true if you are rewriting certain aspects of someone's personality and make them do things they would otherwise not do. It's why I have such a huge beef with the Friendship is Mind Control story. Twilight does horrible things to her friends, and because another also does bad things, that... makes what she did better? Sympathetic and cruel can be done. It just doesn't often make a story better.
In here, Chrissy literally broke Cadance's brain. She's done evil. Granted, it wasn't intentional, but that should decrease the scope of what she'd done. It's a trap a lot of stories fall into: forgetting what got them to that point and doing something that a character shouldn't or likely wouldn't given the context of their previous choices. When it happens, I just role my eyes, unsub to the story, and downvote depending on how bad they utterly screw the pooch.
Chrissy does have that fae succubus trope floating around her, so if anyone can do mind control right, it would be her. I speak for no one but myself, but the new changeling look is utterly hideous, so I like the stereotype. O am surprised there aren't more mind control stories involving her. She does deal with emotional manipulation more than anyone except perhaps Cadance, and has the villainous streak to want to do it in the first place. I like bad girls in general, but it seems more plausible that to use evil magic like mind control, it is best to start with an evil character. Plus, long tongues are hot.
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I could see that. The only story I have where the main character does mind control and is painted as the protagonist is the ex-smooze me one I mentioned, but that's because The protagonist and the antagonist are the same character that's been warped by time travel/mind control/ and an alien infection. I was going to flick the story all the way back around to the beginning, and then run through it again from the antagonist's point of view, all while staying with the same character.
But that's the only one. The others I have, the "main characters" that do mind control are clearly the bad guys. I want people to empathize, but certainly not sympathize with them. And if you ever find yourself rooting for them, you're laughably wrong. Take my recent one, feather bangs.
He's a no holds barred bad guy. He doesn't think he is, and maybe it's not his fault. But is it a lions fault that it's a lion? He's still very much the bad guy.
And Glimmer is a bit... super evil still sometimes in cannon. But I haven't written much about her. lol.
100% with you on long tongues. We should start a club or something. Oddly this story has a bunch in common with chapter 6 of my other story, Competent Villains... Its the new leader for most active characters in a scene, has changelings, has tongues, and a few weirdly similar themes. But the Chrissy here is absolutely not CV:C Chrissy. That one would be... much less nice.
Hmm.... I should finish that thing.
Oh, this is promising. Very highly so. Add my vote to the “please sir may we have some more” pile. The best part was keeping the reference image open in another window as I was reading this – seeing the actual poses and facial expressions made it twice as hot.
I love all the pets, though my favorite has to be Celestia. There’s nothing more fun than playing with a slave who isn’t quite broken yet, but who’s resigned to her new life and who’s perfectly obedient nonetheless. Forcing her to expose herself so openly is beautiful. Perhaps more focus on our pets’ backdoors in a future chapter, such as having a semi-unwilling Celestia bend over and hold her cheeks open for the camera for a prolonged period of time, the sheer humiliation she must feel as she imagines the world staring at her pucker and fapping to it …
… ahem. Imagination’s getting away from me.
I also second the vote for more CV:C. It’s how I first discovered your stories, years ago now. Always wondered what was going on with Rarity …
EDIT: The moment I post this, I notice chapter 2 is already up. Awesome.
Nice. Glad to see Chryssie doing well for herself.
Mmmm, long tongue ~
now that's what i call a strong first start
Meh. Boring. Feels too much like ordinary, vanilla porn for my liking.
If the Princesses still had some fight left in them, it might be more interesting. But that would be a repeat of Competent Villains: Chrysalis with added photography, I suppose.