When the Wonderbolts find a strange purple cloud near Cloudsdale they decide to check it out, turns out it's a portal, a portal to a horrible place, but they pull something out and now it must figure out how to live its new life in Equestria.
He shoved his hand in and felt around, he felt something made out of spandex out of all the liquid and pulled, it took some work, but he saw Spitfire's leg.
aaahhhh I haven'T really noticed it swallowed her.
The guard replied, "More like an hour, and I'm sorry, but this needs your attention. Another portal opened up and some creatures came out, they were fully covered, with the same kinds of weapons you have."
I'm just saying this for the future chapter, not every chapter has to be filled with monsters and he has to go from Monster to monster.
I'M not sure if he was suggesting that Spitfire had some sort of fetish while being in the monster, I haven't really understood the description and the scene with the Guards was funny, but not sure if I would like the Spitfire part. I have to think about it again when I understand it better, how I have to see it.
He took a deep breath and kicked the door open, he saw two humans, they were decked out in full gear, nothing could be seen, the suits were brown and they wore gas masks.
okay I hope they aren'T in every chapter, I like to hear from such characters now and then, but I hate it when they can't leave the character for a few minuted and usually I prefer it if the main char is the only one and kind of special from his kind and world.
"No, we won't shoot first, and now that we know this planet can support us, let's chat."
what bandits?, I thought they were just two of them. Well let'S hope the new huge amount of cast doesn'T makes the chapters weird or to much filled to the brim . Not sure how to say it, but I hate it when they take of the focus from the main char to much you could say, I just hardly see it done in a way I like.
Rue had over two hundred people all hungry, tired, and dehydrated, Celestia and Luna agreed with the mines and they shook on it, to celebrate Rue, Eli, and Spitfire were in the small bar just around the barracks.
aahahhh noooo not 200....I really hope your carefull with them.
Spitfire was about to sit down, but Eli got up and said, "I'm gonna go find Anna, this castle is easy to get lost in, trust me on that."
Why is he getting Rues Girflriend from the castle and not Rue?
"To see if you should ask him out."
Spitfire blushed, "Well I.. Don't.... how'd you know?"
I like it when the others are the once that are blushing for once, but I'm still not sure if I like it that his fellow humans are used to provoke those scenes again.
I'm not a fan of the new situation with him and his old friends yet, that and I hope not to many are going to tease them/her or meddle with their relationship. Like I said the stories usually change for the worse or stranger part when they suddenly get their so called friends after chapter 3-5. It also always happend before they got used to live there.
aaahhhh I haven'T really noticed it swallowed her.
I'm just saying this for the future chapter, not every chapter has to be filled with monsters and he has to go from Monster to monster.
I'M not sure if he was suggesting that Spitfire had some sort of fetish while being in the monster, I haven't really understood the description and the scene with the Guards was funny, but not sure if I would like the Spitfire part. I have to think about it again when I understand it better, how I have to see it.
okay I hope they aren'T in every chapter, I like to hear from such characters now and then, but I hate it when they can't leave the character for a few minuted and usually I prefer it if the main char is the only one and kind of special from his kind and world.
what bandits?, I thought they were just two of them.
Well let'S hope the new huge amount of cast doesn'T makes the chapters weird or to much filled to the brim .
Not sure how to say it, but I hate it when they take of the focus from the main char to much you could say, I just hardly see it done in a way I like.
aahahhh noooo not 200....I really hope your carefull with them.
Why is he getting Rues Girflriend from the castle and not Rue?
I like it when the others are the once that are blushing for once, but I'm still not sure if I like it that his fellow humans are used to provoke those scenes again.
I'm not a fan of the new situation with him and his old friends yet, that and I hope not to many are going to tease them/her or meddle with their relationship. Like I said the stories usually change for the worse or stranger part when they suddenly get their so called friends after chapter 3-5.
It also always happend before they got used to live there.