It was a long day, the longest Wednesday of her life
It was a long day, the longest Wednesday of her life
Noon, the last of the children had go home already and as every fifteen days, Cheerilee had to fill progress-reports, so the teacher stayed on her desk until late. She had a long hour before her but it was okay, it was all part of being a teacher.
She was half-way-in when somepony called at the door.
“Yes?” Asked Cheerilee happily.
Right before here, she saw three unicorns the teacher had never seen before: a couple of mature unicors, a soft-gray mare with purple and white mane; the stallion had light-blue fur with navy-blue mane and golden eyes. Finally a younger stallion with snow-white fur and electric-blue mane.
“Ehem, hello?” Asked the teacher.
“It’s a pleasure, my name is Night Light and she’s my wife Twilight Velvet and my older son Shining Armor. Are you Cheerilee Blossom, the town’s teacher?”
“Twilight Velvet? So you are Twilight Sparkle’s family?” Asked Cheerilee frowning.
They nodded.
Cherilee took a deep breath and confronted them:
“Yes I am Cheerilee Blossom and no, I don’t regret for what I’ve done. I had enough by explaining my reasons to Princess Celestia and she accepted my reasons so if you have a problem with me you can go talk to her”
“No, no, please! First thing we did was to speak with her” said Night Light sighing. “My first impulse was to come and tell you even how you’ll die… but giving the circumstances I have no choice but thank you for helping our youngest son”
Twilight Velvet let escape a small tear.
“When Twilight announced she wanted to go live by herself to continue with her studies closer to Princess Celestia, it wasn’t a surprise. The surprise was that Spike shouted that he would join her. They were really close and all, but I had my doubts that Twilight would be capable of taking care of her younger brother; I don’t know how they convinced me to agree but now they proved I was right. This situation could be avoided”
“Indeed, how old were Twilight when she started taking care of Spike, huh? What the hay were you thinking?!” said Cheerilee angrily.
“Twilight was always too mature for her age, and Spike seemed always happy around her, that’s why we agreed; and also that’s why we never suspected about Spike’s conditions” explained Shining Armor ashamed of himself. “I think we’re now paying for our mistakes”
“But what our daughter did to Spike is unforgivable, we Sparkles are supposed to be there for each other; not to take advantage between us!” Said Night Light angrily.
Cheerilee nodded.
“I think I understand how you feel. What I don’t get is what you need from me if you talked to Princess Celestia already”
Shining nodded sadly.
“We know, but we need to know exactly what happened. How you did you realize what was going on with Spike? We understand this could be a bother but please. We need to know”
Cheerilee doubted for a little, but at the end she accepted, even if they were complete idiots, they still were Spike’s family and they worried about him.
Bon-Bon was busy accommodating the recently made chocolates on the shelves, when Lyra suddenly entered to the store and ran behind the counter to hug her.
“Lyra, what a nice surprise! Did you left early the rehearsal?” Said Bon-Bon blushing.
Lyra hugged her tighter and then Bon-Bon knew something was wrong.
“Lyra?”
“I received a visit from the Social Services. Spike’s family came for him”
The cream-coated pony let drop the tray where she was taking the chocolates and if it wasn’t for Lyra’s reflexes and magic, all the content would spread all over the floor.
“Bonnie, don’t be sad! We knew this was a temporary arrangement!”
Bon-Bon sighed sadly.
“Lyra, please don’t pretend! You only make this more difficult for me!”
They both nodded at the unison and stood there sadly. Knowing Bon-Bon couldn’t attend anypony in that state, she changed the door’s sign to CLOSED.
“In times like this I wonder if it’s really okay that the two of us are together” sighed Lyra.
“Ly-ly, please don’t talk like that! You’re the better thing that ever happened to me”
“But I cannot give you what you want the most! Do you know how difficult it is to see you whenever a kid enters to the store? Or when we bump into a family in the park?”
Bon-Bon cleaned a couple of tears from her eyes and smiled to her wife. She knew Lyra all-too-well; and this time it was her who hugged the chocolatier.
“Lyra, you don’t have to pretend I’m the only one who wants a foal. Who inscribed us in the Social Services program? Who spent all the time she could with Spike?”
And that was enough, the unicorn began to sob on her own. Bon-Bon smiled to her and after a kiss, they stood there hugging each other when Spike got into the store happily.
“Bon-Bon, Bon-Bon! Oh, Lyra is also here? What happened?”
“We’ll tell you later, you seem to have more important news” smiled Lyra.
Spike shook his head quickly and then smiled very excited.
“Rumble invited me to his home this Friday for his birthday party! He says his parents organized a huge party that will last until the night and I want to go, and since you’re the ones taking care of me I thought…”
The two mares sighed at the unison.
“Spike, we would really want to give you permission to go to Rumble’s party… but that’s impossible. I’m so sorry” said Bon-Bon sadly.
“Yeah, it’s just not possible”
“But I asked and Pinkie Pie won’t be there, I promise; that was the first thing I asked to Rumble” said Spike.
Lyra sighed and placed her hoof around Spike’s shoulder.
“Spike, we better go home now, and take the chance to say goodbye to Ponyville because I don’t think you’ll be back in a while. Sorry”
“What do you mean? I thought it was a misunderstanding”
Bon-Bon hugged him with delicacy.
“About that Spike…”
“It may be a misunderstanding Spike, but the thing is in those cases the best thing for you is to stay with your family; you stayed with us because mail is slow and the Social Services took their time to locate them, but now they’re here to take you home” explained Lyra.
Spike didn’t know how to react to this, for one side he was excited to see his parents again along with his bigger brother; but he didn’t want to say good bye to Lyra and Bon-Bon, and of course his new friends. Then he froze for a moment, his new friends… but they’ve been in Ponyville the whole time, why he began to play with them until now?
“Then shall we go, Spike?” Asked Lyra taking Spike out of his thoughts.
“I guess so” said Spike touching his new backpack. “At least I have something to put on my stuff now, not that I have that many”
They arrived home and Spike hurried to put his comics, school books and some gems Rarity gave to him inside the backpack along with a box of chocolates from Bon-Bon.
“Thank you for everything, you were great friends” said Spike trying not to sound too sad.
“Thank you Spike, it was great having you here” said Lyra with a faint smile.
“And you now you can count on us whenever you need. We’ll be here for you”
So they waited in silence until they heard a soft knock at the door. Lyra opened it with her magic, and as she suspected it was a pony from the Social Services and who Lyra suspected was the Sparkle family.
“Mom, dad!” Said Spike jumping happily to hug the two unicorns.
“Hi little one, how are you?” Asked Twilight Velvet with a smile.
“It’s been a while son, I hope you didn’t bothered this nice ladies too much” joked Night Light.
“It’s so nice to see you! So I’m going home with you until this whole misunderstanding cleans up?” Asked the little dragon.
The two older ponies looked to each other without knowing what to say. Spike seemed so innocent and calmed.
“Didn’t you explain it to him?” Whispered Shining to Lyra’s ear.
“You try to do it, he breaks my heart”
Shining then shook his head and looked at Spike.
“Actually Spike…”
“Yes?”
“We’ve been discussing, darling, and we thought you better stop living with Twilight permanently” said Velvet softly.
“What? Why? I mean, I know there’s a misunderstanding and all but after the hearing at the family court everything can go back to normal, right?”
“Don’t you really get it, son?” Asked Night Light worried.
“Get what?!”
Being direct was the best way to address this problem, but none of the adults wanted to break Spike’s heart. At the end Shining sighed and tried to explain himself:
“Spike, we’ve been discussing this for a while and we think you should go live to the Empire with Cadence and me. I know you love Twilight and all, but this whole ‘misunderstanding’ started because she cannot take care of you as much as you need, as you deserve. Won’t you like that? Go to school in there, playing with other kids; basically what you’ve been doing the last days but… well, at the Empire”
“But what about Twilight? Will she be okay with this?”
Shining grinded his teeth.
“She better”
Spike seemed confused at this but still he asked.
“But what about the school?”
“We’ll enroll you in the best and biggest school of the Crystal Empire, you don’t worry about that. And hey, if you need help with your studies, I’ll help you; or Cadence, she’s smarter than me in any way”
“But what about my friends here? Rumble just invited me to his birthday this Friday, please, can’t I stay in Ponyville until Friday so I can go to his party? Just until Friday and I’ll take the chance to say goodbye to my friends!”
The family turned to the pony from the Social Services, who just lowered his head.
“The family always have the last word”
Lyra and Bon-Bon smiled to each other and Lyra made a small nod.
“We can take care of Spike for extra two days, we don’t really mind”
Shining also thought it was a good idea.
“Considering that Spike haven’t had friends of his age in a while I don’t see it completely irrational. We just have to write Cadence and… mom, dad can I stay with you for this two extra days?”
“Sure Shiny, we would love having you around!” Nodded Twilight Velvet.
“And I can warn Cadence right now!” Offered Spike cheerful.
“Sure, thank you Spike” said Shining finishing a quick note.
Spike happily sent it straight to Cadence and the answer came in half of a minute. The Princess of Love wished him to have a lot of fun at Rumble’s party and she’ll take the chance to finish all the processes to enroll Spike in the new school so he wouldn’t have to wait to start going.
Sweetie Belle was standing in front of the library unsure of what to do. For the tenth time that minute she checked the letter Spike asked her to deliver while she asked what happened. She remembered that when she gave Rarity hers, the unicorn began to sob and ran to lock into her room. What just happened? That’s why she took her time to deliver the letter to Twilight wondering how would she react. Did the letter had something bad? So Sweetie asked Rarity if it was really okay to give the letter, and Rarity’s reaction was to nod furiously.
“Please do it Sweetie Belle. Sorry if I overreacted, but don’t let that to stop you. I just couldn’t with the guilt”
“What happened?”
“I don’t want you to worry about my problems dear, just deliver the note no matter what. Okay?”
And that happened, so Sweetie took a deep breath and knocked at the door. Twilight opened it, she had her eyes red after all that crying, she hadn’t take a shower and seemed that she didn’t sleep in a very long while. Sweetie gulped and Twilight just looked at her sadly.
“Hi Sweetie. Sorry but i0m not in the mood to open the library in those days, can you go home please?”
Sweetie Belle gulped again.
“Eh, Twilight, I’m just here because Spike asked me to give you this” the filly said offering the letter to Twilight.
Twilight’s eyes widened and with an unknown fury, she violently took the letter from Sweetie and ripped the envelope into pieces. Three words:
I MISS YOU
“Spike… SPIKE!”
And before the rally scared Sweetie Belle Twilight ran to the train station. As the letters said, her parents would be coming for Spike that day so she had to see him at least for an instant; that was all she asked. To hell with the restraining order, she had to see Spike.
The train station was small and the passengers few, it wouldn’t be difficult to locate her little brother, but there was no sign of Spike anywhere.
Then she saw them, not Spike but her parents and big brother getting into the train. They saw her as well. They didn’t say anything, there was no need; they just angrily turned their backs on Twilight and walked into their wagon. Last thing Twilight saw was her mother’s disappointment and rejection in her eyes.
So Twilight stood there in the middle in the station sobbing.
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Hmmmm it might be nice when this all over for a big time skip.
Spike as an adult resolveing the issue with the main 6. I'm not saying he has to or even should forgive them. But it would gives spike and us readers some closure.
Looks ok, but considering how Twilight is breaking down more, I'm at my limit here
I can't read this. not because of the grammar- it is a translation -but because of the subject.
In no way, shape, or form was what Twilight was doing is abuse. The only thing done wrong was that Twilight didn't help with the chores. Also, there's no indication that this is actually how it is. Nor am I at all satisfied that Celestia didn't notice. She's not that blind for heaven's sake; Twilight and Spike lived in her castle for years.
Years ago, they started children doing such things at a young age. And farmer's kids have to, just because there's too much to do.
So no, this story is a waste. A piss-poor premise, as well as deeply disrespectful of mlp in general.
On a side note: I suffered from abuse myself, and was removed from the home as a result. To take a child away because a nosy teacher got mad because he was doing chores of all things. The only thing he shouldn't have been doing was the grocery shopping; all else was perfectly fine.
Rarity and the others using him is a different issue. He can always say no.
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Okay, this is frigging ridiculous! Twilight didn't take advantage of Spike! Everyone not on the Mane Six are being stupid, they're all harsh and stupid! I really hope Twilight get Spike back
And how could her family rejected her like that?! Jerks, all of them!!!
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You seriously need to take into account what Chronokat said:
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You seriously need to scrap this and do it correctly!
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I'm aware of all the flaws of this story, they've been already pointed out in the original version. I'm only translating what is finished already. Sorry, I do appreciate the advices you're giving me and I wish I did better the first time; but I feel that change the story for this other site would be disrespectful to my original attempt to write drama.
First off if twilight velvet and night light are the parents then they have no reason to judge twilight since it's their fault for having twilight raise spike. 1. They practically didn't raise twilight. 2. Spike was their responsibility not twilight .....saying she was mature for her age doesn't cut it because she had no guideline to follow she was at the castle with staff and the rare instance celestia might find time out of her busy schedule to spend time with twilight. What maybe every other day she's running a country how much time did they think she was giving twilight. 3. When twilight and spike were at the castle celestia was responsible for there care as their guardian not the castle staff who you know were the real ones taking care of them. I mean twilight was carrying him around when he was still sucking on a pacifier .... how is that fair .... Her family needs to stfu ... and cadance who probably took more care of them then either her parents or celestia should definitely be blaming them and not twilight as her babysitter she saw the neglect first hand.
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I understand. And I apologize. I just can't wrap my head around this. I mean I've read stories with characters being OOC, but this is pretty far out there.
I'm not gonna mention any examples, as you can clearly find them in the comments of other readers.
Man i hope spikes biological parents show up and have celestia charged with kidnapping. And sue her,twilight velvet, and night light for emotional stress and damages. Celestia was technically required to track them down when spike was born. The egg wasn't supposed to be able to hatch but once it did she was probably at least required to tell Lord/King Torch about it as we all know dragons wouldn't stand for ponies raising their young. I mean after torch found out he was raised by ponies he didn't even care about spike and thought him to weak to compete for the scepter you know he woulda nixed that real quick if he was still a infant to have him raised to proper dragon standards.
Damn I didn't think Twilight's family would be that mean to her about this
I mean yeah what she did was wrong and Spike's my favorite but he wasn't actually being abused or anything and he was happy and yes I know the whole he's going to be happy sense he's never been shown better, but when you think about Twilight was never shown how to be a parent she went from filly with parents to Celestia's student were she would of witnessed how Celestia was pampered for and always had other ponies doing all the work. so this whole thing could be blamed on Celestia and Twilight's parents for letting Spike go with Twilight knowing she had no parental knowledge or practice.
I am suprised not one of Twilight's parents have confronted Twilight over the matter. Seriously freezing her out is more likely to have Twilight dissappear on them than anything else. I mean there literally giving Twilight the cold shoulder and I could see Twilight packing her bags and leaving town to return to Canterlot or even moce elsewhere for a fresh start. I can see some of the other girls possibly doing the same. Rarity could take the disdain she is getting to leave for the bigger city or Applejack to leave for a while to work on another farm in the Apple Clan. Even Rainbow Dash might take how she is being treated as a reason to move back to Cloudsdale. At that point, it's goodbye Elements of Harmony.
Honestly? Whoever wrote this story is the one with daisies for brains. Not only is Celestia depicted as a cold calculating dicatator, but every single pony turns on the Elements, their own defense forces against monsters and magical disasters. Compounding on that,
Twilight's depression is getting worse by the freakin' second if her "empty eyes" are any indication. I wouldn't be surprised if the entire pony population pushed her into suicide. No, until this stupid story actually gets better, I'm done here. All the writer is thinking of is one thing: "How far can I hurt Twilight until she shatters?"
The pacing is a little bit fast, but the premise is solid and the execution isn't terrible. I eagerly await the rest of this story.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
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Really, the only issue I am having with it is for me drama is better when both sides are looked at by those not directly involved and, while ones like Twilight's parents, might be disappointed with her, they are still willing to talk with her and find out her side. Same with the rest of the mane 6, they did wrong, want to try and fix what they did but no one is really giving them the chance to, I only hope that the hearing goes into the details and decides in favor of Twilight, IF she takes steps to fix what went wrong.
Screw the cold shoulder everyone is showing the Mane 6. Unacceptable, even if what she did is wrong; you don't just cut people out of your life, not even when they made a mistake like this. My sympathies lie with Twilight and against her parents, Cheerilee, and every other persecuting pony in this story.
This story is not the best. There's only so much cold shoulder and pain any individual can take before they begin seeking solutions to stop said aforementioned pain.
Are the main 6 punching bags for you Kaliann25?
I know it's child services and all, and that there's a restraining order but they should atleast let Twilight have one last 5 minutes with him to say goodbye.
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Mlp or not, that's not how ether of those things work, allowing that would defeat the purpose (mumbles under breath) especially since it's really possible that twilight might do something.....extreme in those 5 minutes since she IS one of if not the most powerful unicorn there at the moment and spike will do anything she orders him to do. In their POV
Me: Oh no, Spike can't go back to Canterlot. Those racist upperclass unicorns might pick on him again.
Me a few minutes later: oh, so he'll be staying with Shining in the Crystal Empire. That's kinda okay. But it's still sad.
Again, these commenters are somewhat right. The story is seriously antagonising the Mane 6 too hard. Twilight is a complete wreck. Hopefully, everything will be okay soon.
Ok two fold. What Twilight has done in the show is total abuse, the physical labor going well beyond chores, him getting hurt and her never caring or yelling at him, him getting no education or time off to have fun with other children or anyone we have seen or time off in general. This is all for Season 1, 2, 3 and 4.(abused children can be happy. Sadness is not the only measure of abuse.)
However and this is a big however, Celestia is just as guilty for not overseeing anything as is her parents, just trusting a child with another child's care without any supervision is the only reason this happened. They are compeltly guilty and are similarly at fault. Second the Townsfolk hatred makes less sense than false pretenses of friendship. Elements of harmony are important and its realistic for the townsfolk to sacrifice Cheerilee and Spike to the altar of Self Preservation. But most importantly this chapter is what changed this fic for me. Twilight's family would not abandon her, in every way her Mom and Dad would blame themselves and while their anger at Twilight might be immense(though again probably far less then their anger at themselves), they would talk to her, yell at her, hug her and say that they are unimaginably disapionted in her, that she has hurt her family greatly and she shouldn't see Spike until much later, and that they of course still love her. Here I don't see a family that loves their daughter but is disgusted by her actions, I see a family who hates their daughter and that makes no sense to me.
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And goodbye equistria