Shining Armor is a young adult and taking an interest in mares. A certain mare very close to him can help him in a very special way. Incest. Clop in every chapter.
Man typical guy comes home from a business trip early to spend time with his wife instead of partying and sleeping around and he's a douche for ruining her fd up mood from cheating on him. I hope he ends up hiring velour and complains about how his wife treats him badly and that he suspects she's cheating on him making him seek out emotional comforts like having her say emotional things like she loves him to make him feel like he's worth something. That would really twist the knife in her.
8602008 You know, I am going to have to give this some thought. It's in the story that he knows about her sex work, but it's not decided how much else he knows or how he really feels. I also want him to be a genuinely good man. Any thoughts?
8600560 I worked hard on it, TTC. Would you perhaps be interested in future FPov clop scenes?
8600791 Glad you like it. :) Up next, we get to Night Light, one of the core cruxes of the whole story. Any ideas?
8602251 You answered it sorta.... he knows about her sleeping around and he's told her it's ok .... but come on what guy would really be 100% ok with it. You'd figure a guy in his position must feel pretty inadiqute and insecure. It depends on her response to him when he returns I guess. If she treats him like a inconvienence the moment he's back. I could see him running to another mare for emotional support/physical comfort. Who just might be velvet in disguise.I remember a statement from another fimfiction. You can't change a ho into a housewife. Plus once cadance finds out what's going on i could see her being upset with velvet who hurt her son emotionally and literally ripping velour psyche right outta velvet.
I remember a statement from another fimfiction. You can't change a ho into a housewife.
While I personally disagree with that statement, I'm thrilled you like this story enough to comment. I'm taking what you and others have said into account. My hope is to ultimately have no main villain in this story, instead just people who misbehaved, miscommunicated, and acted impulsively, but nobody actually be evil or the sole cause of all the drama.
It depends on her response to him when he returns I guess. If she treats him like a inconvienence the moment he's back. I could see him running to another mare for emotional support/physical comfort.
The current plan is to do a split POV next chapter, giving both sides of their particular dynamic. The situation is a touch more complicated than him being just a boor or her being a bitch -- it's still forming, and I fully expect it to be out in late January or early February. I hope you like what ultimately comes out.
8609677 I think the mods are on holiday break? Cause your story is still in the Spike group. There's usually no notification on when they remove misplaced stories.
Hmm, kinda curious if Night Light would discover the envelope Velvet gave to Cadence earlier...
Oh, right, adored the change in perspective, btw, though I do wonder if Adze (a curious name, may I ask how you decided on that?) was thought up before or after the last chapter was done.
Well, next chapter, your questions about the marrie couple, their relationship, and Velvet's sex work get answered, at least in part. I'm also very glad you liked the FPov sex scene. As for Adze Chisel, I was trying to think of a tough sounding name for a stonemason that didn't sound like some stupid parody pulp or porn name. I'm actually pretty happy with how his name comes out, because it contrasts that he's a really strong hypermasculine guy with a tough job who has a secret love for gentility and decorum. I'm wondering if perhaps he should recur later?
I hadn't planned on it, but I hadn't ruled it out, either. This story seems to keep expanding and I'm really excited about that. I'll be sure to credit you if I do.
I like that POV.
wow awesome chapter and talk about timing Night Light showing up yep there is nothing that can go wrong hear.
Nice chapter. Found a couple things you may want to fix though.
That should be "got".
And you should add a space there.
Man typical guy comes home from a business trip early to spend time with his wife instead of partying and sleeping around and he's a douche for ruining her fd up mood from cheating on him. I hope he ends up hiring velour and complains about how his wife treats him badly and that he suspects she's cheating on him making him seek out emotional comforts like having her say emotional things like she loves him to make him feel like he's worth something. That would really twist the knife in her.
8601052
Thanks, Alti. Corrected. :Twilightsmile:
8602008
You know, I am going to have to give this some thought. It's in the story that he knows about her sex work, but it's not decided how much else he knows or how he really feels. I also want him to be a genuinely good man. Any thoughts?
8600560
I worked hard on it, TTC. Would you perhaps be interested in future FPov clop scenes?
8600791
Glad you like it. :) Up next, we get to Night Light, one of the core cruxes of the whole story. Any ideas?
8602251
Most definitely.
8602251
You answered it sorta.... he knows about her sleeping around and he's told her it's ok .... but come on what guy would really be 100% ok with it. You'd figure a guy in his position must feel pretty inadiqute and insecure. It depends on her response to him when he returns I guess. If she treats him like a inconvienence the moment he's back. I could see him running to another mare for emotional support/physical comfort. Who just might be velvet in disguise.I remember a statement from another fimfiction. You can't change a ho into a housewife. Plus once cadance finds out what's going on i could see her being upset with velvet who hurt her son emotionally and literally ripping velour psyche right outta velvet.
8602532
While I personally disagree with that statement, I'm thrilled you like this story enough to comment. I'm taking what you and others have said into account. My hope is to ultimately have no main villain in this story, instead just people who misbehaved, miscommunicated, and acted impulsively, but nobody actually be evil or the sole cause of all the drama.
The current plan is to do a split POV next chapter, giving both sides of their particular dynamic. The situation is a touch more complicated than him being just a boor or her being a bitch -- it's still forming, and I fully expect it to be out in late January or early February. I hope you like what ultimately comes out.
I see what you did there
Why is this even in a Spike group?
8609551
No idea. Mistake?
8609565
Know anyway to remove it?
8609574
No idea. PM the admins and explain the situation?
8609621
Alright. I'll do that.
8609654
And how did that work out?
8609677
I think the mods are on holiday break? Cause your story is still in the Spike group. There's usually no notification on when they remove misplaced stories.
8610002
Ah. Shame.
Hmm, kinda curious if Night Light would discover the envelope Velvet gave to Cadence earlier...
Oh, right, adored the change in perspective, btw, though I do wonder if Adze (a curious name, may I ask how you decided on that?) was thought up before or after the last chapter was done.
8614413
Well, next chapter, your questions about the marrie couple, their relationship, and Velvet's sex work get answered, at least in part. I'm also very glad you liked the FPov sex scene. As for Adze Chisel, I was trying to think of a tough sounding name for a stonemason that didn't sound like some stupid parody pulp or porn name. I'm actually pretty happy with how his name comes out, because it contrasts that he's a really strong hypermasculine guy with a tough job who has a secret love for gentility and decorum. I'm wondering if perhaps he should recur later?
8607399
Oh yes in motherfucking deed.
God Dayum!
8661413
You likey?
8661854
I want it to be my fucking life!
just a little nudge wondering how the next chapter is proceeding.
8690648
Quite well. It'll be out in a couple weeks at most I think.
8691596
sweet i will be watching for it sir.
Fantastic chapter.
Is there any chance of some chapters from Candace's POV? It would be interesting to see how much she knows and what she's planning to do to help.
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I hadn't planned on it, but I hadn't ruled it out, either. This story seems to keep expanding and I'm really excited about that. I'll be sure to credit you if I do.