“Nooooooooooooo!” Moondrop shrieked in horror, her eyes widening with alarm. “Those… those are collector’s sets, mint-condition! You can’t just take them out of the boxes! They will lose all their value!”
8202265 This makes an excellent birthday present, so thanks! I am kind of sad that my whole story is shorter than this single chapter. Oh well, can't win 'em all!
Damn! This was great! I mean really great! And Dawn is pretty hot! Love that her clit is pierced, plus the other piercings. Y'all didn't go overboard with them. It added a real nice touch. But, out of personal taste, I like Blue Moon the most so far.
So... Who's next?
Please say the twins! Please, oh please, say the twins!
The taste of buttermilk, banana, and pecan filled his mouth, along with a faint hint of… something that he couldn’t quite place, but tasted oddly familiar.
Didn't really enjoy this chapter at all. All I wanted to do the entire time is strangle Dawn. I'm pretty sure we can all figure out why all her coltfriends have left her. I'd rather castrate myself then ever get involved with a major cunt like her.
I was reading this chapter, you know just reading and reading. Then I got to this
The taste of buttermilk, banana, and pecan filled his mouth, along with a faint hint of… something that he couldn’t quite place, but tasted oddly familiar.
I started thinking "There's no way Pusspuss and MadMaxtheBlack have seen Shimoneta, right?" Then I get to
8202294 hidden trophy #1: batmare rising.... hidden trophy #2: Whatever going in the family, STAYS in the family. hidden trophy #3: One for every day of the week and twice on funday... hidden trophy #4: Sleeping on a cloud, human style.
The taste of buttermilk, banana, and pecan filled his mouth, along with a faint hint of… something that he couldn’t quite place, but tasted oddly familiar.
I put my love in it!
Nope.
The sounds of scratching wood were heard, and a fallen chair was all that remained in Chasearni's room. The desktop abandoned.
8202981 So you judge people right away and don't take the time to actually meet them? If you actually read more, you would have seen why she was acting like that and actually see the real Dawn once she broke down in front of Chris.
Chris got the message and went back to work, but that didn’t stop the pleasurable grunt he made as his balls throbbed painfully from her suckling menstruations.
Malapropism, it should be ministrations.
Despite that minor error, this was an absolutely amazing chapter, and if this story keeps delivering it will be one of my favorites on the site.
You two make an excellent team, and I can't wait for more.
He could feel the added warmth of her tight, puckered anus as it pressed into the spot between the base of his shaft and testicals, causing him to groan.
This, and the part where her anus was pressed against his forehead, was so fucking hot! I would most definitely not complain if there were more ponut-centric descriptions in future chapters. Getting the full picture is Just so... so... unf.
Loving this story, but something keeps pulling me out every time it crops up (which is surprisingly often in this story) I apologize for the massive amount of grammar nerd I am about to display.
•Thrust is the standard past tense form of the verb thrust.
This is one of 23 verbs acknowledged by the Cambridge Grammar of the English Language to have the same present and past tense form. Every time you use the word "thrusted" it tweaks my brain, just a little bit. I have a similar issue with "gritted" but its past tense use as "grit" is not as widely accepted, but it does share the short i sound followed by a dental consonant (T or D) that others such as "hit" "fit" "slit" or "bid", which are officially recognized as having the same present and past tense, have. So the past tense form of "grit" being "grit" is still officially split but is gaining more and more traction.
I apologize for that massive showing of my inner grammar nerd. Once again, great story and I'm really loving it.
8203142 I can't belive you... why would you be so mean to us like that... y-you... bully!
Nah jk <3. I would make the changes to the story but this is Max's accout... and he's asleep... but I'll keep this in mind when we work on future chapters.
So far we have: A BDSM goth, A weeb, and One (seemingly) "normal" individual
God, I'd hate be the family psychologist. (But god is it hawt) Also
“Um, Specs. What are these?” he asked, holding up a group of thin, long sticks that were covered in chocolate. “Oh, those!” Moondrop said, her tail flicking about excitedly. “Those are called ‘Pocky’ sticks, silly! They’re a snack food from Neighpan! I thought you might like to try some!”
*Insert "I like pudding" scene, but replace with Pocky* I do love me some strawberry covered biscut sticks.
>22,000 words
You all asked for this, I hope you know that.
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If I hear bitching that this chapter is too long, I'm going to be pissed!
8202271 not long enough! NEED MORE LEWDS!
8202271 i think its just right. anyone who complains about too long is just too lazy to read.
The chapters are getting longer
Wait…there is 6 sister but the image clearly show 7 figures, and not once have they mention daddy so that means…oh boy there is a hidden trophy
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Thats what she said
No regrets
Better nickname would be Weablue. Missed opportunity
That is a deliciously long chapter.
so you up date the picture for new characters awesome
8202294
i wonder who it could be...... it shall be a mystery of the ages!
Well that was something I think. Oi!
8202294 It's his mother isn't it?
Want more!
Main quest is coming along nicely. Would Luna count as a side quest?
8202265
This makes an excellent birthday present, so thanks!
I am kind of sad that my whole story is shorter than this single chapter. Oh well, can't win 'em all!
I know they are all ponies but I keep feeling that this is anthro and I know it isn't. Stupid clothes wearing Dom sisiter.
8202271 No bitching here!
Damn! This was great! I mean really great!
And Dawn is pretty hot! Love that her clit is pierced, plus the other piercings. Y'all didn't go overboard with them. It added a real nice touch.
But, out of personal taste, I like Blue Moon the most so far.
So... Who's next?
Please say the twins! Please, oh please, say the twins!
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Its her or princess Luna
I know what she DID!!!!!
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I love all the pop culture shout outs in this story.
If you keep updating at this rate, you can probably stay in the featured box for a month.
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Maybe one of his sisters or his mum is one of Luna's guards? I love Luna, so I'd love to see her make an entrance.
Didn't really enjoy this chapter at all. All I wanted to do the entire time is strangle Dawn. I'm pretty sure we can all figure out why all her coltfriends have left her. I'd rather castrate myself then ever get involved with a major cunt like her.
Roses are red
Violets are blue
Poems are hard
I am too
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What don't you like about her exactly? It sounds like you didn't even read the whole chapter.
please sir... Send us some more please
All this shit is too damn hot!! And I mean Hawt!! Hawt! Hawt!!!
Ps. I was referring to Chris Tucker's line in The Fifth Element movie when he met Korben Dallas
I was reading this chapter, you know just reading and reading. Then I got to this
I started thinking "There's no way Pusspuss and MadMaxtheBlack have seen Shimoneta, right?" Then I get to
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HA HA, not 10 minutes into the story and I run into an Anna's love nectar reference. Oh I was dying laughing, WHEW nice story guys cant wait for more.
These long chapters are great! Keep it up!
So if some pony else were to read Moondrops writings, there could be hell to pay!
8202294
hidden trophy #1: batmare rising....
hidden trophy #2: Whatever going in the family, STAYS in the family.
hidden trophy #3: One for every day of the week and twice on funday...
hidden trophy #4: Sleeping on a cloud, human style.
as for the last one...
http://www.funtrivia.com/askft/Question6507.html
Is that some sort of cosmetics or is that cutie mark rather... interesting?
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Shimoneta is the best! We watched it on one of my art streams.
8202852
Wait…so I unlock the trophies or are you guessing trophy names?
I love how the art is slowly altered to show each sisters, as they get "unlocked"
Nope.
The sounds of scratching wood were heard, and a fallen chair was all that remained in Chasearni's room. The desktop abandoned.
Some spelling mistakes. That is to be expected. More words means more room for mistakes.
8202907
So sad that best girls' VA died not long after it finished.
8202265 And as for myself, I couldn't be more pleased.
8202652 The way Dawn was being such a cunt I just couldn't even read most of the chapter.
8202981
So you judge people right away and don't take the time to actually meet them? If you actually read more, you would have seen why she was acting like that and actually see the real Dawn once she broke down in front of Chris.
Malapropism, it should be ministrations.
Despite that minor error, this was an absolutely amazing chapter, and if this story keeps delivering it will be one of my favorites on the site.
You two make an excellent team, and I can't wait for more.
Is Hollow Shades the Equestrian equivalent of Alabama?
Another chapter, another character revealed on the cover art.
Max, bro, how'd you know I love goth chicks? /s
Seriously though, you somehow manage to make every chapter better than the last. 10/10, byoutiful -IGN
Also, calling it right now, next chapter will be vamptwins, Netflix and Chill style.
This, and the part where her anus was pressed against his forehead, was so fucking hot! I would most definitely not complain if there were more ponut-centric descriptions in future chapters. Getting the full picture is Just so... so... unf.
Loving this story, but something keeps pulling me out every time it crops up (which is surprisingly often in this story) I apologize for the massive amount of grammar nerd I am about to display.
This is one of 23 verbs acknowledged by the Cambridge Grammar of the English Language to have the same present and past tense form. Every time you use the word "thrusted" it tweaks my brain, just a little bit.
I have a similar issue with "gritted" but its past tense use as "grit" is not as widely accepted, but it does share the short i sound followed by a dental consonant (T or D) that others such as "hit" "fit" "slit" or "bid", which are officially recognized as having the same present and past tense, have. So the past tense form of "grit" being "grit" is still officially split but is gaining more and more traction.
I apologize for that massive showing of my inner grammar nerd. Once again, great story and I'm really loving it.
8203142
I can't belive you... why would you be so mean to us like that... y-you... bully!
Nah jk <3. I would make the changes to the story but this is Max's accout... and he's asleep... but I'll keep this in mind when we work on future chapters.
8202271 the chapter was too long.
So far we have:
A BDSM goth,
A weeb, and
One (seemingly) "normal" individual
God, I'd hate be the family psychologist. (But god is it hawt)
Also
*Insert "I like pudding" scene, but replace with Pocky*
I do love me some strawberry covered biscut sticks.