Can you pleassseee not give in to the readers. HEAR ME OUT! The way it seems to going, it looks like Twi and Sombra are gonna win. Well, generally, if you try and do that, people start to complain. Please don't give in! It would be more original for them to win anyway, and this is YOUR story. So when the time comes please don't change it from your own vision..
Also, can you make an Evil Badass Spike? That would be dope as fuck.
Aside from that, just make the chapters a bit longer, pace it slightly better, and go over each chapter a couple more times for mistakes, and I see a great story. Upvoted and Followed, please don't dissapoint!
PS, I got this account from a phone that my friend gave me, but I can't change the name so I am going to make a new account. Vixile is me!!
Why do I have the Idea that this Story ends with this Twilight going back in time and killing Sombra before he steals Twilight while giving Celestia the knowledge that Sombra will try to change history. That would make a good Story twist.
Can you pleassseee not give in to the readers. HEAR ME OUT! The way it seems to going, it looks like Twi and Sombra are gonna win. Well, generally, if you try and do that, people start to complain. Please don't give in! It would be more original for them to win anyway, and this is YOUR story. So when the time comes please don't change it from your own vision..
Also, can you make an Evil Badass Spike? That would be dope as fuck.
Heh. Way to contradict yourself in the same comment, hero. Please imagine that last word being in GLaDOS's wonderful, wonderful voice. Also, where would the Evil Badass Spike come from? Twilight was the one to hatch the dragon egg in the original timeline, so where would the Evil Badass Spike come from? I, personally, am hoping for a Undecided Badass Trixie, as seen here:
You know, without Celestia being a bumbling idiot and taking away Trixie's power, and teaching Trixie to control that power instead, since, you know, Twilight was being trained by Sombra.
So Shining has gone from Gold Knight to Dark Knight.
Shinning has betrayed Equestria for his lost sister lets see where this goes now.
I always love Sparkle incest, I can't wait to see what will come next
Wow, this story can't get any more screwed up...
Then you proceed to prove me wrong :P
7886722 lets see if this story will prove you wrong once again.
7885959 I think dark soldier is a more appealing name.
Can you pleassseee not give in to the readers. HEAR ME OUT! The way it seems to going, it looks like Twi and Sombra are gonna win. Well, generally, if you try and do that, people start to complain. Please don't give in! It would be more original for them to win anyway, and this is YOUR story. So when the time comes please don't change it from your own vision..
Also, can you make an Evil Badass Spike? That would be dope as fuck.
Aside from that, just make the chapters a bit longer, pace it slightly better, and go over each chapter a couple more times for mistakes, and I see a great story. Upvoted and Followed, please don't dissapoint!
PS, I got this account from a phone that my friend gave me, but I can't change the name so I am going to make a new account. Vixile is me!!
7911254 It all depends on what theory about time travel you adhere to. There are two or three varieties that are most used in fiction.
The way I see it, what's happening in this story falls under a variation of the timeline theory as shown here:
Why do I have the Idea that this Story ends with this Twilight going back in time and killing Sombra before he steals Twilight while giving Celestia the knowledge that Sombra will try to change history. That would make a good Story twist.
This is amazing continue this story and you will get another follower
7897128 I second this more than you know! It has been going badly( in a good way ) so far that it needs the ending!
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Currently working on the next chapter.
Thinks for telling me.
And I would be honored to follow you
Anymore?
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Sombra may be a cold bastard but that doesn't mean he is incapable of love and compassion.
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Well there is a romance tag.
how bad is the gore? on a scale of 1 to 10
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Maybe a 5 at most. It's just blood for the most part, no guts being ripped out or anything.
Heh. Way to contradict yourself in the same comment, hero. Please imagine that last word being in GLaDOS's wonderful, wonderful voice.
Also, where would the Evil Badass Spike come from? Twilight was the one to hatch the dragon egg in the original timeline, so where would the Evil Badass Spike come from? I, personally, am hoping for a Undecided Badass Trixie, as seen here:
You know, without Celestia being a bumbling idiot and taking away Trixie's power, and teaching Trixie to control that power instead, since, you know, Twilight was being trained by Sombra.
Nicely done Twilight.