"I want you to put your colt-milk in my tummy."

Sheesh Flurry, at least buy the guy dinner first...

Daaammmnn flurry get to the point why don't Yea! Lol

"...and don't think I didn't see all those other naughty things you were thinking of, readers!"

Oh deer god, I had a double-take there, haha. Thanks Pinkie :)

"...and don't think I didn't see all those other naughty things you were thinking of, readers!" Pinkie said, making the foals give her an awkward look.

I've got two images that sum up my thoughts on this line:

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omg less than 2 paragraphs later...

"I still...see what you're thinking...readers..." Pinkie mumbled in her sleep, both startling and confusing the foals even further.

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I too wanted to mentally edit her out of the story just for that. Talking to the readers has a place, but I think this story isn't it.

Time to get some good old discovery colt milk!

Pinkie Pie was passed out on the couch in a combination of exhaustion and a sugar coma

Okay, two things wrong here (in my eyes, anyway):
a) Pinkie Pie gets affected by sugar comas? That doesn't seem at all likely, considering how, to my knowledge, she's never shown any adverse affects to eating sweets in the show. Also, unconscious Pinkie Pie doesn't seem natural either, considering how hyperactive she is.
b) The foalsitter fell asleep. How unprofessional of her - what if a twin got hurt? Or wandered off somewhere? Not keeping tabs on the location of your charges is kinda a big no-no when it comes to foalsitting, along with every other job requiring 'watching over other people's children' (like school, or kindergarten, or day care). How has Pinkie not gotten fired for negligence? It's also why babysitters shouldn't spend all their time on the phone in our world, which unfortunately has become a stereotype.

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You have a better way of getting them alone? Also we are talking about young teenagers, not kids, it's not like they need to be watched 24/7.

That was a awesome read this was a interesting read so far and getting better .can't wait to see what will happen next.

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They needed Pinkie out to get to the meat of the story.

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Just let it go. Don't take things too seriously.

"Can I...touch it?"

This again???!!! Ugh.

Pound was somewhat dumbfounded. "You don't have willies ?!"

Pound be like: *le gasp* how is that P O S S I B L E ?
I have been told a lie
My world crumbles underneath my hooves
Oh, cruel destiny, goodbye

Fun times ahead Dont forget: Drink your Milk to grow big and strong.