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clamped fangs - clamped her fangs
devote her to - devote herself to
where she were - where she was
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Scent? What is Sharp referring to?
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Congratulations on three chapters in a single day, and I hope you are being careful to pace yourself.
Well, we knew it couldn't keep going near perfectly for Sally forever. Nothing good happens without sacrifice and consequences after all. The drama has arrived, but Sally is a fighter, she'll work hard for a good future.
I'm very curious to see how the story will turn from here.
6972186 Thanks for the typos and the encouragement, it is always good to have both.
As for the scent, remember where those fingers had been. The key I have always found, to writing characters as believably sexual in nature, is making sure they had kinks. Everyone has them, but leaving them out of your characters can really make for bland and 'beige' individuals.
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I'll just go back and read those paragraphs again.
Oh. Oooooh...
Awe, just when they had practically said their vows. Text is still a jerk like that.
Ever notice how Text always seems to step in and offer a choice when it (it being Text) is least wanted? It seems to enjoy influencing others to make a choice that they don't actually need to make. He says he opens doors. I believe the doors are already there waiting to be opened and he just shuffles the characters around to the door. Doors they might very well have found on their own without its help.
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I've always disliked how the Text handles the pathways thing... It would be more entertaining for it to hint at those pathways and what might lead towards them and what might be repurcussions, the fun is in the not knowing what might happen.