This is a first person, human in Equestria story about a young man named Travis who ends up in Equestria after taking part in a ritual he didn't wholly believe. He has to learn how to live in Equestria and deal with feelings he develops for a mare.
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hum I am thinking of a red meat I would like to eat behind Lunas back.
7956929 Oh my... I either have a dirty mind and am taking this the wrong way, or you're implying something rather raunchy...
Good chapter man, hope to see some action later on because it has been pretty tame so far, not that it is a big issue . Keep up the good work
7957154 If you mean raunchy kind of action, it still might be a while before then. After all, this is primarily about the romance, not any sort of raunchy stuff. As I've said before, any sort of mature scenes will simply be there as a product of the romance.
7957302 Oh no, not that kinda stuff. Im talking about interactions with other ponies and dealing with the drama of being introduced to Equestria. I guess I meant more drama wise.
7957315 Ohhh, it shouldn't be too much longer before that.
Calling it, right now: Travis is eventually going to lose all control.
7957418 And you do a great job with that. I don't typically enjoy human in equestria stories all that much aside from a few. Alot of them are just not handled right and have alot of problems that keep me from enjoying them, but you are doing a great job at staying totally true to the show and making the human relatable and not some annoying, super OP badass character with no interesting qualities, which is what a lot of these kind of stories are . Keep it up
Not sure if I like that, I guess I would have prefered it to be a dimension, so that way it would be more unlikely that an army of evil alicorns is going to appear.
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I agree with that, I don't like them to be to much Op, but then again I like them at least to be able to help in a way even if it is only being really crafty.
I agree with most human in Equestria stories not being handled right too.
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Yes
Someone has chosen to deviate from canon...
7957490 Yep, I don't like them to be completely useless either but I don't see that kinda stuff too often with these stories. Most of the time the human protagonist is a Mary Sue, overpowered character that has no relatable qualities. Self insert stories people like to call them. Thankfully, this story manages be keep my interests going unlike many others.
Awesome chapter my friend and I can't wait for the next upload for this story I'll be waiting my friend and keep me posted on the story thanks
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I agree, one of the things I meant where stories in which the hero is either going down from the first blow the enemy made, is hit in the back of his had from a friend or mother to prevent that the main char (Human) is joining the fight or the human is hiding in a room or something, guarding two of his friends, which looks to me like they only needed a reason for them not to join the fight at all.
7957442 I know what you mean, I've been trying to make sure I don't make Travis a Gary Stu.
7957490 Well, it is implied in The Journal of the Two Sisters that Celestia and Luna came from a civilisation, land, or group of alicorns, and were called away from the alicorns by Star Swirl.
7958013 Only a little, in terms of the order of historical events and how some happened. I recently read The Journal of the Two Sisters and so I'm getting some more background lore from that.
7958993 Yep, you are already going a fine job with that. Usually Gary Sues just accept everything that has happened to them right away when they come to Equestria and they love everypony instantly. Travis is obviously scared and confused at first and it takes him awhile to feel comfortable with being in a new world, which is much more interesting and relatable.
7958993 Well, if you're gonna use B Level Canon, then I suppose you'd be validated enough... Remind me, does this fic have an AU tag, because it could, debateably, exist there. To be fair, depending on if you're using the mirror as well, you're already using B Level Canon...
7959513 I never knew that canon came in different levels... I simply saw canon as canon...
7959847 It goes a bit like this: B Level Canon must be canon to the A Level Canon source, but it need not be the same visa versa. Of course, we then get Fanon and Headcanon, but those are both much more well known. Examples of B Level Canon are the IDW Comics, the Equestria Girls movies, and Lyra and Bon Bon and the Mares at S.M.I.L.E.
7958993 hhhmmm I'm not one who kind of inhales the whole knowledge in comics and everything, since I don't even get them here I think. Well....okay it if it should be something out of a comic or something then it is okay I guess.
In a way that just makes me a bit dissapointed that well they are probably not even really special.
I don't really like Starswirls, but I guess that it more the fault of other stories and what I got know about him or how.
It is like playing a game series in the wrong order with you ending up hating it, even if you could have enjoyed it.
I don't really know if I should be happy about there being several Alicorns or not.
7962353 Well, that doesn't necessarily make them not special. In lore, the journal was written over a thousands years ago, you know, the one that Twilight was reading in the episode Castle Mane-ia. It is unknown if those other Alicorns are still even around. Anything could have happened during the space of time between when they were mentioned in the journal and present day Equestria.
Ha... ha.... ha, very funny you lil pun master!
Also as a sorta off topic fact: Did you know that, what is thought by many to be, the first myth/story about werewolves started during Vlad Tepes (Vlad the Impaler/ Vlad Dracula) father's father rein time. The story goes: A group of hunters came across a circle of caravans, the caravans were inhabited by gypsies. Being that it was a superstitious time, and the fact the gypsies were dancing around a fire, the hunters returned to the nearby village and told the villages founding family. The family, sadly unknown in the modern day, sent their eldest male, and family heir, to go and execute the gypsies. He did as he was told accompanied by some of the villages bravest men and a priest. After they had killed them all, the priest went about "purifying" the bodies of any "satanic" influence in the hope that 'god' would forgive the souls of the children, and allow them to pass on. Well, as he was doing this, they soon realised they missed one, a young woman in a brown shawl. She looked at the bodies around her, and then back to the before mentioned family heir. She was crying tears made of blood as she pointed at him. She bellowed with supernatural vigor "for your vile deeds I curse you to walk in the devil's path, all those who will follow you will seek to end you, all those that you love will seek to burn you, but because I am not as vile as you Christians paint us Gypsy's, you have the possibility to be saved. The only catch is, it will be with the death of someone you love unconditionally, and loves you the same." Then she disappeared, never seen again.