Three months have passed since Shining Armor has been trapped as an earth pony maid. Now known as Lowly Servant, she had given up all hope of rescue. She thought it was over until Twilight's error prone pupil, Evening Storm turned her into a filly!
That ice cream scene... When Peppermint cries into her ice cream, and gives Twilight one last hug... So sweet!
And the foreboding, when the imposter takes her into the other room... The drama, waiting to see whether or not she would give finally give Evening his "gift..."
If I have one criticism, it's that I think Shining Armor is a little too put-together at the end of the chapter. After living for months as a slave, enduring all that psychological torture... being forced to give away her body day after day, and watch powerlessly as Cadance falls in love with somepony else, all the while never paying a second thought to the devastated maid in the corner... I rather think Shining would collapse into tears on the spot upon finally being freed of the spell. Finally having his free will restored, finally being able to speak for himself, and reflect back on the full dimensions of the horror that had been inflicted on him... that would be such an enormous emotional release, such an intense moment of combined grief, pain, and joy, I don't think he would rightly be able to string a sentence together, much less deliver a logical and well-articulated explanation of what had happened to him. Seeing him collapse into Twilight's arms and start babbling his pain would have been super feelsy.
I have only one, really stupid, nit-picky little gripe.
“Okay daddy!” She whispered back, causing him to sigh.
“Are you seriously going to keep up the daddy thing all night?” She blinked.
“Daddy is daddy.” She said simply.
Yes, I'm talking about the dialogue rules regarding periods and saidisms. When dealing with dialogue, the sentence is not merely about the action of speaking. One does not simply write "She said," and tack on a period because you only have a sentence fragment present. In such a situation, we have a predicate without the subject. The sign said, "Long haired freaky people need not apply." She said what? That's what the sentence is about.
So since the contents of a quotation are considered part of the "She said," sentence, she said would always be followed by a comma before initiating the quote, and when following the quote, she would not be capitalized, and the last period becomes a comma. Interrogation and exclamation points are left as normal, as the comma is implied, but the period before the quotation mark always changes.
“Okay daddy!” she whispered back, causing him to sigh.
“Are you seriously going to keep up the daddy thing all night?” She blinked.
“Daddy is daddy,” she said simply.
Sorry to just dump that, but it's a little pet peeve of mind.
Still incredibly glad this is going the way it is going.
Also, I'd be lying if I didn't say I can't wait to see the fallout from all this!
I imagine Twilight's rage at Cadance is going to be nothing short of apocalyptic. "You did WHAT to my brother?! And you left him that way for HOW long?!"
And oh, how wracked with guilt Cadance is going to be when she finds out. Twilight already put her in her place once in the first chapter, but now, to learn what she did to her own husband — on top of the foals she has growing inside her! Spiral into depression, much? Actually, I wonder if Shining and Cadance have any future left at all after this. If they do, there's gonna be some serious guilt and trust issues.
Will Canterlot become involved? What would Celestia's response be if she ever learned of this?
And of course, there's fake Shining Armor. Can't even imagine what his reaction will be when he learns the whole plan has fallen apart, or what kind of punishment will be visited upon him.
This was an amazing chapter. I do hope that 'maid' gets her just come-uppance for trying to replace Shining. Already said the comeuppance I think would be good in the last chapter too.
Either way, amazing sequel you have being written here.:D
I honestly think Shining Armor should divorce Cadence after this. Now, I know some of you will say that is harsh, but think about it. Shining Armor trusted Cadence to protect him in his vulnerable state, and she failed him. Shining Armor is going to have a very hard time trusting Cadence now, which is an important part to marriage. Can he learn to trust her again? Yes, but it is unlikely, and staying together would most likely lead to them having an unhappy, or at least uncomfortable, relationship for the rest of their lives. While you can make the argument it was a very strange set of circumstances, me personally, would always have that little nugget in the back of my mind that would refuse to completely trust Cadence after this.
I did think about the whole "trapped for a while" angle and what that might mean for when she was free.
I guess if I had to defend myself, I'm going on the idea that she's drunk on freedom and worry right now. Basically she's so relieved to be able to talk and act as she wants, that she's going a mile a minute without really thinking about it, just high on the fact that she CAN do such a thing.
She's also worried about the 'fake Shining' and might be more then a little angry and is focusing on revenge. It'll likely all catch up to her/him a bit later.
I actually forgot about that when writing. This uh, story doesn't have an editor. I've been doing it all myself, so pointing out these things helps me out a lot. I'll try to go through the story and correct these when I have time and energy. ^^;
(Just worked a ten hour work day. I kinda have neither right now)
Man, I really hope Twilight goes nuclear next chapter. Evening has just lit the fuse on the world's biggest powder keg, and I really can't wait to see it go off!
6728387 I see it as more of an ingrained military training. Depend on the person that the training is successful or not. The type of training that let people bounced back from traumatic event quick enough to go back to battle and leave the PTSD shits to after battle.
I'll agree on the part about Shining's reaction in ch2. I don't think anyone could put themselves together that quick, even with military training. (Also keep in mind this is after he's been mentally broken for three months, tortured, depressed, and possibly suicidal, unable to kill himself.) Story could have been really touching here if it had slowed down enough to let the scene breathe, but it comes across as the author was in a rush to get to the next chapter and jammed eight pages worth of plot into eight paragraphs and skipped out on the character development. A missed opportunity.
I think Shining should have a lot of mental scarring coming out of this. This kind of thing leaves a mark on a person. If this story has a 100% happy ending and he gets together again with Cadence again and everything is hunky dory, I think that will be a shame. He ought to have PTSD, difficulty adjusting to every day life again, difficulty trusting other ponies, HUGE marital issues, etc... I get that this story is striving for a good end, but at the same time, if the whole experience hasn't had ANY traumatizing effect on him whatsoever, then I think that's unrealistic and kills my suspension of disbelief. Other people might disagree, but just that's my opinion.
Anyway, good story so far, has my upvote. Anxious to see the ending.
Part of me is tempted to go and change it, but seems a bit late now.
Personally, upon reading the original fic. I don't see Lowly as broken yet. She's depressed and mourns for the life she had, but I didn't see her ready to give up yet. I think it's the news of foals that finally broke her. I feel it was then she was ready to just give up, and that's when Evening shows her kindness and pulls her back from the pit she just started to sink into.
What I was going for, is that thanks to the small freedoms she was given thanks to being Peppermint, she was already healing. Finding a new reason to go on, to live. So that gave her the strength to fight against the spell, and thus when it's gone, she's on such a freedom high, that the past three months haven't caught up to her yet. Basically she's so excited to be free that right now all the pain she went through doesn't matter. She's just happy to be able to do and say whatever she wants.
The story being rushed could be a factor though, as I was just trying to get this all finished. Honestly I didn't want this to be a long, long thing. I have two other stories I should be writing instead, but I had to do this one to shake off the feeling the ending of the original gave me. So here we are. :/
Loved this story so far, though I'm kind of sad to admit that I liked the idea of Evening being Peppermints father. Those scenes with the two of them together were just so adorable. But as they say, all good things must come to an end. And now an even better ending is coming! Looking forward to the next chapter!
You write whatever you want. It's your story, and if that's your interpretation of the character, then stick by it and never apologize for it. Frankly, I think most folks are probably so grateful to you for lifting them out of the gloom and despair of the last fic, they oughtn't complain too loudly. You've done a wonderful job so far, no need to doubt yourself!
Get that last chapter out! I want to see how it ends!
I normally LIKE the kinds of stories this one is a sequel to, but NOT when a sadistic monster takes advantage of it turns it into a living hell for the subject.
“Are you seriously going to keep up the daddy thing all night?” She blinked.
Believe that should be a HE...odd to find this at he beginning.
I also can't wait for that last part! Get to it man! I need a happy ending for this tragic story!
And I feel like the favorite food thing mentioned in the first chapter will be a critical key point in helping prove Peppermint to being the true Prince of the castle. ^^ Can't hide now! We must charge out for the blind truth!
just starting into this now and i think i figured out why this isn't working , don't know why it took me this long since before i read the fic i thought the act of kindness that would set in motion the events for this sequel was going to be a minimal passing by interaction where something happens and the real shining's original persona regains some control over their thoughts/actions and then has to maneuver around everything to try and break the spell cast on him , and then it would have been even better with the idea of how the first chapter ended with the fake shining realizing this and then actively trying to thwart the real shining's efforts making it a concealed battle of the minds like what death note is , and then the rest of the story could have written itself with a little scenario creativity.....
but instead how you chose to approach the fic with shining having so much character interaction with the main cast right away you even have him being taken care of by them while they still aren't aware of the situation , making the focus on warming/tragic character development instead of a thriller of a battle of the minds for revealing/suppressing the truth like what phoenix wright is.......
......i wonder how the other sequel fic is in regards to this after having laid out these thoughts as i have.....
continuing.....
hmmmm , now what would be the reason for fake shining to tell real shining those commands instead of just to keep quiet till the age regression is reversed literally the next day? not only that but wasn't cadance's rank in the hypno spell the highest of all and with real shining being ordered to be a filly shouldn't real shining already not know anything about what fake shining is talking about and thus not be capable of fulfilling the commands thus rendering them null? that part seems very contradictory......
I loved writing this part, especially where Peppermint frees herself from the spell. So I just have this sinking feeling, everyone will hate it. >_<
i don't , it would have been awful if you hadn't done that , but so far you've made this fic seem like it's only purpose for existing was to do so , and then eventually get shining back to normal , aside from the temp adoption thing there doesn't seem to be any other theme or purpose for this fic....
and i should really go to bed now..... ========================================
ok good i can still update this next morning as it seems nobody has read it yet....
you know i feel like you missed a real interesting and potentially powerful situation to have happen in the fic with the elements you have established thus far which also would have been serviceable to the idea of the fic in the first place , which from the original fic was to have really fetishy clop with shining armor.....
where you could have made it so that eve's tragic backstory , which is the only reason he noticed the real shining in the first place , would have had something related to when fake shining gives the sex commands to the real shining , so that when the real shining is forced to carry out those commands eve doesn't completely stop it and they copulate , with heavy emotions and thoughts passing by as they both contemplate on what's happening to both of them , which would give the initial readers like myself exactly what we wanted which again is fetishy shining clop.....
and then after they've finished , with the fake shining armor being so arrogant and foolish as to not specify that the real shining armor could never reveal anything about the temporal commands he had been given AFTER he had fulfilled them , after the sex scene a simple little bit of digging by eve and having the real shining say he was forced to do this , not specifying by whom or how thus not going against the command , would have been a far more compelling way to have the fic play out , and thus enabling for more heart felt feels at the end when everything is worked out to have both characters connect from their shared experiences and maybe even continue to partake in them or at least stay good friends......
also im still not sure what the fake shining's purpose for doing something like that eve was aside from maybe thinking it would make eve hate lowly servant , nor why when eve (finally) figured things out the real shining armor was afraid the fake was going to mind control eve in the same way , when 1 he already knows that only cadance was capable of such magic and 2 that the current shining armor having once been an earth pony knew nothing of unicorn magic and from their time spent with each other should also be away that the current shining's magic capabilities are that of a colt.......
unlike other fillies who had tea parties, you’d hold classroom and pretend to teach her. You’d make me join in all the time!” Shining crossed her hooves across her chest. “She always got better grades than me too. I’m your brother Twily! You couldn’t cut me a little slack?”
“What do we do?” He asked out loud. “Twilight won’t believe her brother is the villain! Okay, so I don’t tell her. But what if she insists we bring it up to him and Cadance? What if he’s already in her room, waiting for me to throw you out of my own? I’ve been Twilight’s pupil for three months! She’s had a brother her entire life! He could tell her anything and she might believe it! Maybe even say that I’m under a spell too!” He slumped down, holding his head in his hooves.
Is undoing a persona spell dangerous? If it's not then he could just suggest it to Twilight and they could just undo it.
10631422 The issue with that is he's still in a female body. If I put 'He' I'd get someone asking: "Wait did Shining suddenly revert back to being a stallion? When did that happen?"
So as long as your body is female (In my stories), I'm using female pronouns, regardless of your mental state. It's just to keep things clear and simple.
To his surprise he did find the spell, much sooner than he thought. There it was, a powerful source of magic feeding off her own natural earth pony magic to keep itself sustained. In one way it was amazing. By doing that, it insured it’d never weaken or wear off.
I know that exact spell! Someone in this one world(cool story bro but it needs mor ponies is the fic name) used it to cause permanent transformation!
If anybody hated this part...
Then they re a sick, sadistic sshole.
Ohhhh, gosh. I feel like a hige weight just came off my shoulders. Thank you so much for this story.
Another really good chapter!
That ice cream scene... When Peppermint cries into her ice cream, and gives Twilight one last hug... So sweet!![:pinkiesad2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesad2.png)
And the foreboding, when the imposter takes her into the other room... The drama, waiting to see whether or not she would give finally give Evening his "gift..."
If I have one criticism, it's that I think Shining Armor is a little too put-together at the end of the chapter. After living for months as a slave, enduring all that psychological torture... being forced to give away her body day after day, and watch powerlessly as Cadance falls in love with somepony else, all the while never paying a second thought to the devastated maid in the corner... I rather think Shining would collapse into tears on the spot upon finally being freed of the spell. Finally having his free will restored, finally being able to speak for himself, and reflect back on the full dimensions of the horror that had been inflicted on him... that would be such an enormous emotional release, such an intense moment of combined grief, pain, and joy, I don't think he would rightly be able to string a sentence together, much less deliver a logical and well-articulated explanation of what had happened to him. Seeing him collapse into Twilight's arms and start babbling his pain would have been super feelsy.
6728270 or a typical Call of Duty player.
The upvote has been committed.
I have only one, really stupid, nit-picky little gripe.
Yes, I'm talking about the dialogue rules regarding periods and saidisms. When dealing with dialogue, the sentence is not merely about the action of speaking. One does not simply write "She said," and tack on a period because you only have a sentence fragment present. In such a situation, we have a predicate without the subject. The sign said, "Long haired freaky people need not apply." She said what? That's what the sentence is about.
So since the contents of a quotation are considered part of the "She said," sentence, she said would always be followed by a comma before initiating the quote, and when following the quote, she would not be capitalized, and the last period becomes a comma. Interrogation and exclamation points are left as normal, as the comma is implied, but the period before the quotation mark always changes.
Sorry to just dump that, but it's a little pet peeve of mind.
Still incredibly glad this is going the way it is going.
6728439 Is there really a difference?
6728476 No not at all.
6728483 Good. I have met very few nice people there.
Also, I'd be lying if I didn't say I can't wait to see the fallout from all this!
I imagine Twilight's rage at Cadance is going to be nothing short of apocalyptic. "You did WHAT to my brother?! And you left him that way for HOW long?!"
And oh, how wracked with guilt Cadance is going to be when she finds out. Twilight already put her in her place once in the first chapter, but now, to learn what she did to her own husband — on top of the foals she has growing inside her! Spiral into depression, much? Actually, I wonder if Shining and Cadance have any future left at all after this. If they do, there's gonna be some serious guilt and trust issues.
Will Canterlot become involved? What would Celestia's response be if she ever learned of this?
And of course, there's fake Shining Armor. Can't even imagine what his reaction will be when he learns the whole plan has fallen apart, or what kind of punishment will be visited upon him.
Ooooh, so much to look forward to!
Everything is coming to light... Waiting for next chapter...
This was an amazing chapter. I do hope that 'maid' gets her just come-uppance for trying to replace Shining. Already said the comeuppance I think would be good in the last chapter too.
Either way, amazing sequel you have being written here.:D
He ought to shove something pointy (and sharp perhaps) in Cadance, just to even things.![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
Red wedding comes to mind for some reason.. not sure why
6728635 Cadance should be wreaked by alot more than guilt![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
Can't wait for the next chapter.
I honestly think Shining Armor should divorce Cadence after this. Now, I know some of you will say that is harsh, but think about it. Shining Armor trusted Cadence to protect him in his vulnerable state, and she failed him. Shining Armor is going to have a very hard time trusting Cadence now, which is an important part to marriage. Can he learn to trust her again? Yes, but it is unlikely, and staying together would most likely lead to them having an unhappy, or at least uncomfortable, relationship for the rest of their lives. While you can make the argument it was a very strange set of circumstances, me personally, would always have that little nugget in the back of my mind that would refuse to completely trust Cadence after this.
6728387
I did think about the whole "trapped for a while" angle and what that might mean for when she was free.
I guess if I had to defend myself, I'm going on the idea that she's drunk on freedom and worry right now. Basically she's so relieved to be able to talk and act as she wants, that she's going a mile a minute without really thinking about it, just high on the fact that she CAN do such a thing.
She's also worried about the 'fake Shining' and might be more then a little angry and is focusing on revenge. It'll likely all catch up to her/him a bit later.
6728444
I actually forgot about that when writing. This uh, story doesn't have an editor. I've been doing it all myself, so pointing out these things helps me out a lot. I'll try to go through the story and correct these when I have time and energy. ^^;
(Just worked a ten hour work day. I kinda have neither right now)
Man, I really hope Twilight goes nuclear next chapter. Evening has just lit the fuse on the world's biggest powder keg, and I really can't wait to see it go off!
Wow, I'm not sure how I found this, but damn I like it.
THIS STORY TOUCHED MY HEART I LOVE IT
Please ask pajama if you can make a split off of your own coming from his story
6733274
Not sure I understand.
Well, that's at least one less recurring nightmare for me. So thank you dude.
6728387 I see it as more of an ingrained military training.
Depend on the person that the training is successful or not.
The type of training that let people bounced back from traumatic event quick enough to go back to battle and leave the PTSD shits to after battle.
6733274 Uh...He did get permission.
I will probably vote for a divorce...after this sort of stuff...it's near impossible to get back to a loving relationship with Cadence.
I'll agree on the part about Shining's reaction in ch2. I don't think anyone could put themselves together that quick, even with military training. (Also keep in mind this is after he's been mentally broken for three months, tortured, depressed, and possibly suicidal, unable to kill himself.) Story could have been really touching here if it had slowed down enough to let the scene breathe, but it comes across as the author was in a rush to get to the next chapter and jammed eight pages worth of plot into eight paragraphs and skipped out on the character development. A missed opportunity.
I think Shining should have a lot of mental scarring coming out of this. This kind of thing leaves a mark on a person. If this story has a 100% happy ending and he gets together again with Cadence again and everything is hunky dory, I think that will be a shame. He ought to have PTSD, difficulty adjusting to every day life again, difficulty trusting other ponies, HUGE marital issues, etc... I get that this story is striving for a good end, but at the same time, if the whole experience hasn't had ANY traumatizing effect on him whatsoever, then I think that's unrealistic and kills my suspension of disbelief. Other people might disagree, but just that's my opinion.
Anyway, good story so far, has my upvote. Anxious to see the ending.
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I guess this is just my failure as an author. :/
Part of me is tempted to go and change it, but seems a bit late now.
Personally, upon reading the original fic. I don't see Lowly as broken yet. She's depressed and mourns for the life she had, but I didn't see her ready to give up yet. I think it's the news of foals that finally broke her. I feel it was then she was ready to just give up, and that's when Evening shows her kindness and pulls her back from the pit she just started to sink into.
What I was going for, is that thanks to the small freedoms she was given thanks to being Peppermint, she was already healing. Finding a new reason to go on, to live. So that gave her the strength to fight against the spell, and thus when it's gone, she's on such a freedom high, that the past three months haven't caught up to her yet. Basically she's so excited to be free that right now all the pain she went through doesn't matter. She's just happy to be able to do and say whatever she wants.
The story being rushed could be a factor though, as I was just trying to get this all finished. Honestly I didn't want this to be a long, long thing. I have two other stories I should be writing instead, but I had to do this one to shake off the feeling the ending of the original gave me. So here we are. :/
Loved this story so far, though I'm kind of sad to admit that I liked the idea of Evening being Peppermints father. Those scenes with the two of them together were just so adorable. But as they say, all good things must come to an end. And now an even better ending is coming! Looking forward to the next chapter!
6735299
You write whatever you want.
It's your story, and if that's your interpretation of the character, then stick by it and never apologize for it. Frankly, I think most folks are probably so grateful to you for lifting them out of the gloom and despair of the last fic, they oughtn't complain too loudly. You've done a wonderful job so far, no need to doubt yourself!
Get that last chapter out! I want to see how it ends!![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
6737228
I'm working on it. I'm doing what I can to get it out by weeks end. Let's hope nothing comes up.
derpicdn.net/img/view/2014/3/24/584105__safe_solo_oc_oc+only_unicorn_reaction+image_mare_icon_%3C3_artist-colon-zajice.png![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Oh god thank you for saving her ! I believed I got traumatized with how the original story ends.
I'm straight but at this point I don't mind kissing Evening at all. You got some skill writing a hero
Man, I needed to see that and you made it happen! you're awesome man.
how old is Shining Armor?
6740045
As a filly? CMC age
6740418 it a good he don't get younger then that.
I love bad endings. Make him stay a filly >=3 pleeaseeee
This song also came to mind at the very end of this chapter
Golden Horse shoes, g1 reference.
I normally LIKE the kinds of stories this one is a sequel to, but NOT when a sadistic monster takes advantage of it turns it into a living hell for the subject.
“Are you seriously going to keep up the daddy thing all night?” She blinked.
Believe that should be a HE...odd to find this at he beginning.
I also can't wait for that last part! Get to it man!
I need a happy ending for this tragic story!
And I feel like the favorite food thing mentioned in the first chapter will be a critical key point in helping prove Peppermint to being the true Prince of the castle. ^^ Can't hide now! We must charge out for the blind truth!
just starting into this now and i think i figured out why this isn't working , don't know why it took me this long since before i read the fic i thought the act of kindness that would set in motion the events for this sequel was going to be a minimal passing by interaction where something happens and the real shining's original persona regains some control over their thoughts/actions and then has to maneuver around everything to try and break the spell cast on him , and then it would have been even better with the idea of how the first chapter ended with the fake shining realizing this and then actively trying to thwart the real shining's efforts making it a concealed battle of the minds like what death note is , and then the rest of the story could have written itself with a little scenario creativity.....
but instead how you chose to approach the fic with shining having so much character interaction with the main cast right away you even have him being taken care of by them while they still aren't aware of the situation , making the focus on warming/tragic character development instead of a thriller of a battle of the minds for revealing/suppressing the truth like what phoenix wright is.......
......i wonder how the other sequel fic is in regards to this after having laid out these thoughts as i have.....
continuing.....
hmmmm , now what would be the reason for fake shining to tell real shining those commands instead of just to keep quiet till the age regression is reversed literally the next day?
not only that but wasn't cadance's rank in the hypno spell the highest of all and with real shining being ordered to be a filly shouldn't real shining already not know anything about what fake shining is talking about and thus not be capable of fulfilling the commands thus rendering them null? that part seems very contradictory......
i don't , it would have been awful if you hadn't done that , but so far you've made this fic seem like it's only purpose for existing was to do so , and then eventually get shining back to normal , aside from the temp adoption thing there doesn't seem to be any other theme or purpose for this fic....
and i should really go to bed now.....
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ok good i can still update this next morning as it seems nobody has read it yet....
you know i feel like you missed a real interesting and potentially powerful situation to have happen in the fic with the elements you have established thus far which also would have been serviceable to the idea of the fic in the first place , which from the original fic was to have really fetishy clop with shining armor.....
where you could have made it so that eve's tragic backstory , which is the only reason he noticed the real shining in the first place , would have had something related to when fake shining gives the sex commands to the real shining , so that when the real shining is forced to carry out those commands eve doesn't completely stop it and they copulate , with heavy emotions and thoughts passing by as they both contemplate on what's happening to both of them , which would give the initial readers like myself exactly what we wanted which again is fetishy shining clop.....
and then after they've finished , with the fake shining armor being so arrogant and foolish as to not specify that the real shining armor could never reveal anything about the temporal commands he had been given AFTER he had fulfilled them , after the sex scene a simple little bit of digging by eve and having the real shining say he was forced to do this , not specifying by whom or how thus not going against the command , would have been a far more compelling way to have the fic play out , and thus enabling for more heart felt feels at the end when everything is worked out to have both characters connect from their shared experiences and maybe even continue to partake in them or at least stay good friends......
also im still not sure what the fake shining's purpose for doing something like that eve was aside from maybe thinking it would make eve hate lowly servant , nor why when eve (finally) figured things out the real shining armor was afraid the fake was going to mind control eve in the same way , when 1 he already knows that only cadance was capable of such magic and 2 that the current shining armor having once been an earth pony knew nothing of unicorn magic and from their time spent with each other should also be away that the current shining's magic capabilities are that of a colt.......
well onward i guess.....
I'm sorry. This part had me rolling.![:rainbowlaugh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowlaugh.png)
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Is undoing a persona spell dangerous? If it's not then he could just suggest it to Twilight and they could just undo it.
Shining armor is mentally himself again. So you should use male pronouns.
10631422
The issue with that is he's still in a female body. If I put 'He' I'd get someone asking: "Wait did Shining suddenly revert back to being a stallion? When did that happen?"
So as long as your body is female (In my stories), I'm using female pronouns, regardless of your mental state. It's just to keep things clear and simple.
I know that exact spell!
Someone in this one world(cool story bro but it needs mor ponies is the fic name) used it to cause permanent transformation!
10269211
It can be!