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FIRST!
Near the end, everything was in bold. Not just the song. Either way, good job. Somehow you made the explanation plausible.
707602
Noticed and fixed that when I stole first base.
Also, thanks, I was afraid it'd sound cockamamey and retarded.
707626 Dude. This is the internet. More specifically, a site where we celebrate ponies. Everything makes sense here.
Also, trying to ignore the first part...... trying so very hard.....
707638
you mean the fact that Knightmare narrates his kinky dreams?
707647 Yes. That.
707650
I thought it was fittingly disturbing and amusing.
Knightmare does use elements of myself. And, I'm a published author....
Who DOES narrate his dreams in his sleep.
707671 When did he go to sleep anyway? I missed that part.
707647
I for one was amused by this.
707680
I, intentionally, skipped the cleaning of ponyville and them into the royal chariot.
poor Knightmare still gets tired since he was required by Barricade to clean it all ALONE.
Good.
No, not good. Amazing.
You made me smile way too much.
I laughed once or twice too. Do you have any idea how hard it is for me to laugh? You have to show me something like this to make me laugh.
So way to go.
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I am thoroughly amazed by this, good job, it is very difficult to surprise me, I was not confused but I was laughing almost nonstop while reading it
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Gentlecolts.
I am pleased that you enjoy my story.
And I genuinely hope to ensure that all following chapters, including the serious ones, can be as amusing for you.
Here's a brief tip at what songs will show up in the next chapter:
'Mortal Kombat'
'How Bad Can I Be?' by The Once-ler
and finally
'PEANUT BUTTAH JELLEH TIME!'
I think I just had a heart attack.
707805
Good or bad?
707816 Terrible.
Mother of God, that was not what I wanted to hear about first.
707821
Please tell me you actually continued past the dream sequence....
707816 And then your music selection saves you. Canna stop laughing, but I think ye need more content, less Lyrics, mmmkay?
So he's a spy eh? The game is now a foot. This could be interesting for me and Fordregha's characters since cat people can smell changelings (set up in Griffin the Griffin), and I was going to have Zeta do the same.
I really loved the choice of songs. The Witch Doctor one I haven't heard since the first Rugrats movie. And I'm so glad you did Baby Got Back. Can't wait to see what happens next.
707846 I tend to struggle with getting my thoughts down to text, especially during a song.
You recal the prior chapter, where there was an action almost every line?
I had to stop, wholly re-start, pull back, rewind, and replay the same song for every damn line, JUST to keep in my head what I wanted to happen.
I need to be listening to the song WHILE typing.
Fast paced songs make this damn near impossible without listening tot he song on repeat.
It's not as easy as you think, so I add stuff I'm definite on, and let the reader's imagination take over for where I fail to add things.
Because I trust your guys' imaginations to be able to fill in the blanks, especially with a kickin' beat to help the flow.
707865 And yes, he is effectively a spy.
The Kamina of spies.
Heh.....
yeah.
Behold the power of song in a setting where ponies naturally spring into song at the drop of a hat. It's about time we got a bad-ass bard in Equestria.
707903 Man oh man, I hear you there. Except with me, one or two chapters can cover a whole song (Or a pair of songs), but taken apart and broken into visual hints and ideas Think of the repeats on that man. (If you can spot it, cookies to you BTW.) Regardless, laziness is not an adequate excuse. The fact stands, walls of lyrics a story does not make. As a hint, posting all the lyrics might not be the best idea - Perhaps trying to explain the feel of the music and put in choice lines would work better in a few cases, such as repetitive songs, who knows? Experiment a little - It's better to lag behind on updates a little then push and rush.
That all said, I do enjoy it. I really do.
Also, I'm pushing at you because I like it and want to see you do the best damn job. Plus you actually respond when I poke you.
Meanwhile, I've gotta get back to rewriting the 3K words I deleted because they sucked.
707959
I plan on taking it slower in the future.
I was experimenting on just what the 'ideal number of songs' is. I'm leaning towards just 2 or 3, with maybe 4 or 5 for EPIC chapters like the next one. so there's more than one song, but they're flowing much mroe easily.
And while I'll take your advice about cutting back on the wall of lyrics, some songs WILL have full lyrics if siad lyrics are sufficiently important, or badass.
And I'm ALWAYS gonna provide a youtube link when a song kicks off.
707976 Wise man. Luck be with ya, this gluestick is rootin' for you.
707997 Thanks. I'm gonna start chapter 3 tomorrow when I wake up, and I'm gonna take a crack at not posting the lyrics with the first song. If that looks better then I'll stick wiht it barring songs where having the lyrics are the entire bleeding point.
708016 Just go with what reads and feels right. Re-read it one or two times, and if you think it sucks, change it.
This is why I am a week behind, but that chapter needed to be re-done.
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Agreed.
Also, HOLY BUTTS AN ACTUAL SECOND PAGE!?
Enough comments to mandate two pages!? Seriously? In barely 3 days!?
Squad Equestria's been up over a month and it's nto surpassed half a page!
So griffin is going on a rock tour, and you just happen to be the king of music...
Please god, let there be a rock off!
This is great, but I was expecting him to pull out that Family Guy parody of MCHammer's song. 'I can write graffiti, even jaywalk in the street!'
708903
There will be several rock-offs.
Not saying against who or what, to avoid spoilers, but I'm beginning chapter 3 right now.
I can't stop myself from singing along! Thank you for bringing those songs back into my life.
My face hurts from the smiles you brought to it.
Also you somehow turned purvey into (somewhat)classy. You do good sir, you do good.
Also as well; The Kamina of spies...You are third best chess piece (Echo and Griffin have seniority) Glad we share the same idle.
Here to comment and bother with some correction(s).
Story is fun. It is fun to have someone who randomly bursts out into songs. LOTS OF SONGS.
" over a n entity " an
"What the hell!? And you wwere about to beat the shit out of me! WHY DOES EVERYONE I'M SUPPOSED TO BE AN ALLY WITH TRYING TO KILL ME!?" No idea what exactly to add but something i feel is needed to complete the sentance my suggestion would be "WHY DOES EVERYONE DO THIS TO ME. I'M SUPPOSED TO BE AN ALLY SO WHATS WITH EVERYONE TRYING TO KILL ME"
"I'm enjoying thsi " Spelling correction into "This"
"much tot he" Spelling correction into " much to the"
Ending comment wiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiith
Random epic quote of the comment ( dont written by me)
“I need no god, I am SCIENCE!”
''..... but on the ground I'm an untouchable ninja rocker?"
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So. Much. Laughter!
So that's TWO times that Queen Chrysalis has been interrupted by a transformed human chess-piece, just bursting into the room, dancing, singing, and playing awesome music.
Discors: Spell Check (Discord)
a n entity: Spell Check (an entity)
waery: Spell Check (weary)
mroe: Spell Check (more)
tot he: Spell Check (to the)
709821 A message from Skeleton Jack:
"A rock-off, is it? I'm not much of a rocker, but I DO have this ocarina here."
707865- speaking in a southern accent - Changeling sappin mah sentries!
HiE with changlings, who randomly burst into large scale musical numbers, and is starting off about the same time as Griffin the Griffin left off?
What's not to love?
random yet badass how does one oocomplish such a thing
first i was what
then i was huh
then it was funny
You just ruined my vision of Twilight
Knightmare seems to be taking being punted into another universe and being changed into a completely new (and often disliked) creature surprisingly in stride...
also random spontaneous singing....
Mostly whats going on in my mind is
wtf
its discord
uh, JJ? You forgot to take the Center thing off.. just look at this chapter and you'll see what I mean
Ok the first 4-5 chapters made no sense whatsoever but this last song COMPLETELY made up for it. That was freaking hilarious :D
Sooooo... When I decided to catch up with the story... I had forgotten how freaking random this story is.
the immagery i was getting when it was can't touch this was priceless! ermagerd sooo funny