Please don't tell me I'm the only one who read the description and thought this was going to be clop about a hornless, amputee Sunset Shimmer . . . and clicked anyway.
A few things to say: Twilight is right, horses are dangerous. Statistically anyway. Do you think the person who did the cover art know how many Sunset x Horse fics it has inspired? The author taking their time with the story; I approve. Keep it up.
Do you think the person who did the cover art know how many Sunset x Horse fics it has inspired?
People, are you serious? You didn't see this EqG short?
It's not an art someone did, it's just a screenshot from one of the three official bonus "EqG Rainbow Rocks" shorts, released by Hasbro in the beginning of this year.
6747639 The one short I didn't see. Still though, do you think the animators know how many its inspired? If anything that's even funnier. Thanks for the correction, watching it right now.
6747639 I actually had another picture for the cover art that depicted Sunset Shimmer having a romantic moment with a stallion. Even though I cropped the picture to hide the sex, the cover art was still deemed unfit for moderation, so I changed it. I left the note by accident.
Huh... well, your formatting is a little weird. I wouldn't break it up into parts mid-chapter like that if I were you. Personally, whenever I absolutely need to change scenes like that, I do it non-obtrusively. Three asterisks, one tab in between each, all centre-aligned, like this:
* * *
...He said, not realizing comments don't have a centre format. Still, you get my point. Ideally though, you'd want to try and avoid scene changes whenever possible. A great way to do that in this chapter would have been Sunset getting onto the bus just as her heat kicked in, and instead of cutting away, staying focused on Sunset as her estrus builds, she starts getting hot and bothered, and barely manages to keep the fact hidden. It'd build a little tension, and work as what's essentially foreplay, with a few lurid descriptions of Sunset's dripping wet crotch and her trying to imagine horses while only having ponies as a reference.
I also have a minor quibble with how you've formatted thoughts, but that one's a bit trickier to do, so can't hardly blame you there. If I had to offer advice, I'd say to use quotation marks as usual, but always follow it up with something along the lines of "she thought to herself," or "Sunset debated mentally."
By all means, please experiment with both these things, and see what works best for you and your readers!
Comment posted by Pickleless deleted May 26th, 2016
(fill in the blank) statistically causes more deaths than sharks
I'm so sick of this argument. Often when I see this argument, it's about a creature on dry land. You know why so many of those things cause more deaths than sharks? Sharks live in the ocean. It's more likely for a human to be on dry land with a horse than in the middle of the #@$%&! ocean with a shark!
8196723 Also, sharks aren't nearly as likely to attack humans who are in the ocean as crappy movies like Jaws make them seem. In fact, I've heard of some places that literally make a tourist attraction of letting people swim with sharks. That's how un-aggressive towards humans sharks can be.
this intrigues me.
Please don't tell me I'm the only one who read the description and thought this was going to be clop about a hornless, amputee Sunset Shimmer . . . and clicked anyway.
Oh no, not that cover again...
A few things to say:
Twilight is right, horses are dangerous. Statistically anyway.
Do you think the person who did the cover art know how many Sunset x Horse fics it has inspired?
The author taking their time with the story; I approve.
Keep it up.
The moment I saw that picture and the sex tag I was like... Whooooooo Boy, here we go.
I think I know where this description is going. She is going horsebelly riding, if you know what I mean.
Well one way to find out.
After reading chapter 1, I'm excited for this to continue.
So Sunset is going to fuck a horse?
6747299 Basically
It had to be done
6747118
People, are you serious? You didn't see this EqG short?
It's not an art someone did, it's just a screenshot from one of the three official bonus "EqG Rainbow Rocks" shorts, released by Hasbro in the beginning of this year.
The link to the video on Hasbro's channel: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-3ixfTKGG8A
6747639 The one short I didn't see.
Still though, do you think the animators know how many its inspired?
If anything that's even funnier. Thanks for the correction, watching it right now.
i.imgur.com/tfZQS.jpg
6746998 Absolutely, and that would have made for a more interesting and original fic. Horny quadriplegic Sunset, please.
6747639 I actually had another picture for the cover art that depicted Sunset Shimmer having a romantic moment with a stallion. Even though I cropped the picture to hide the sex, the cover art was still deemed unfit for moderation, so I changed it. I left the note by accident.
All she needs is riding naked and we're all set.
Huh... well, your formatting is a little weird. I wouldn't break it up into parts mid-chapter like that if I were you. Personally, whenever I absolutely need to change scenes like that, I do it non-obtrusively. Three asterisks, one tab in between each, all centre-aligned, like this:
* * *
...He said, not realizing comments don't have a centre format. Still, you get my point. Ideally though, you'd want to try and avoid scene changes whenever possible. A great way to do that in this chapter would have been Sunset getting onto the bus just as her heat kicked in, and instead of cutting away, staying focused on Sunset as her estrus builds, she starts getting hot and bothered, and barely manages to keep the fact hidden. It'd build a little tension, and work as what's essentially foreplay, with a few lurid descriptions of Sunset's dripping wet crotch and her trying to imagine horses while only having ponies as a reference.
I also have a minor quibble with how you've formatted thoughts, but that one's a bit trickier to do, so can't hardly blame you there. If I had to offer advice, I'd say to use quotation marks as usual, but always follow it up with something along the lines of "she thought to herself," or "Sunset debated mentally."
By all means, please experiment with both these things, and see what works best for you and your readers!
she approached the bus stop.
black mane and tail
I'm so sick of this argument.
Often when I see this argument, it's about a creature on dry land. You know why so many of those things cause more deaths than sharks? Sharks live in the ocean. It's more likely for a human to be on dry land with a horse than in the middle of the #@$%&! ocean with a shark!
8196723
Also, sharks aren't nearly as likely to attack humans who are in the ocean as crappy movies like Jaws make them seem. In fact, I've heard of some places that literally make a tourist attraction of letting people swim with sharks. That's how un-aggressive towards humans sharks can be.