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A Tank of Emotions

Rainbow Dash falls apart when faced with Tank's hibernation, prompting Fluttershy to comfort her in an unexpected way.

A rewrite of a certain scene from Tanks for the Memories.

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Sage of the Leaf

Sage of the Leaf #1 · Oct 30th, 2015 · · ·

It's not terrible. My only immediate problem is that Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash were made out to be a bit more naive than I would have expected. But hey, you're the writer. The way your wrote wasn't technically incorrect, just a bit unexpected.

But I like that their relationship began with something this sensual. Bravo to you sir.

Smallfry

Smallfry #2 · Oct 30th, 2015 · · ·

I will certainly agree the final conversation felt a bit awkward, but given what Rainbow Dash just went through I guess it does make sense. I enjoyed it, thumbs up.