(A/N sorry if this one seems a bit rushed but I was determined to get this out today and I had to write the entire chapter in an hour and a half- I'm going to kalahari for school- and I only had one page done last night. hope you enjoy this little piece of character building)
Luna was distantly aware that she wasn't in her own bed, but she remembered she was in Ponyville. She was then aware of the smell of Lavender. This wasn't distantly. This was 'oh my god did someone cram Lavender up my nose and mouth?!'. As she opened her eyes her head almost literally exploded, a pained groan escaping her lips. She tasted something odd on them, but chose to ignore it. She heard another groan and was aware she was part under another pony. That pony was Twilight Sparkle, and she was using Luna's chest as a pillow, their forelegs wrapped around each other.
They locked eyes and Twilight remembered everything. Her face flushed up as she tried to wriggle her way out of their position, but was surprised to find Luna was holding her closer.
“Please don't go Twilight...this is...very nice...” Luna pleaded. Twilight knew this very well, and now that the Princess was actually asking for it she couldn't object, though to avoid revealing this she made a halfhearted protest. An hour later the sun told them it wasn't quite as early as before, so they decided to get up.
“I Apologize Twilight Sparkle...” Luna said as they brushed their manes.
“About w-what?” Twilight asked, a feeling of dread forming in her gut. Did the princess regret last night?
“For keeping you in bed like that...it was selfish, but I just didn't want it to stop.” Luna replied a bit sheepishly. Twilight stared for a moment, but shook her head a moment with a slight chuckle.
“No you were right, it was nice...do...do you remember anything from last night?” Twilight asked. Luna scrunched her face in concentration as she picked through her memory.
“I remember we got really drunk and stumbled home...we had some sort of dispute...and...I...pulled you into bed? That's all I remember...oh Lord...we didn't-” Luna remembered.
“No no no! no...we didn't do anything like that!...well...not entirely...” Twilight cut her off, ending a bit sheepishly.
“...Twilight...is there something I don't remember?” Luna asked a bit cautiously, not sure if she wanted to know the answer.
“...yes...” Twilight sighed.
“...This isn't my first morning after a night of drink Twilight...I've awoken to very strange things...not quite as far as you might imagine, but you've assured me if it was anything it wasn't that far either so you couldn't possibly offend me. Did I say things when I was drunk? Did I...get...clingy?” Luna began asking, thinking of things alcohol has done to her in the past.
“No...well, you were a bit clingy...but...well...um...we kind of...kissed...” Twilight said.
“Well that's not so bad...we were drunk...right?” Luna retorted. Twilight flinched a bit and a look of hurt flashed on her face, but she quickly shook it away.
“It...it was more than just a drunken Mare's alcohol poisoned mind's escapade...it...there was so much passion in it...and...I returned it...” Twilight said, looking awkwardly up at the princess.
“...I...we...you...” Luna started, trying to get the words out. Twilight sighed as a defeated look found it's way on her face. Luna sighed as she gave up on words, instead taking action. She put a hoof under Twilight's chin, pulled her face up and planted a gentle kiss on her lips. Twilight was surprised for a few moments, but returned it after a few moments. Luna gave an ever so slight moan as Twilight slipped her tongue into her mouth, both of their faces putting Big Macintosh's red coat to shame.
“Hey Princess, Twilight you u-oh ok never mind!” Spike said, entering the room and instantly turned around and returned from where he came. The two Mares yelped and separated, embarrassment only eclipsed by the disappointment of the sudden end to their unplanned make out session.
“O-oh god...Spike...” Twilight stuttered.
“Um...well...I guess that answers my question I had yet to ask of how to tell him...” Luna mumbled. Twilight smiled weakly, but ten gained a sad face as she slumped to the ground.
“What's wrong?” Luna asked.
“...What will everypony think of us? I'm not ashamed of it...but I'm worried they'll all see badly on us...as long as my friends don't I'll be fine but...you're a princess...if your subjects think bad of you...” Twilight started, but Luna stopped her with a hoof on her shoulder.
“Twilight I would endure another thousand years of isolation if it meant I could be with you...besides...I'm not really a princess anymore...the only thing I do now is raise the moon and put the servants on their guard...I came to ponyville on nightmare night because I was receiving the same treatment as when I first arrived back in Canterlot...but now that Ponyville seems to have accepted me I'll be spending a lot of time here...now even more so.” Luna explained.
“If you're fine with it then I am...” Twilight said.
“With what?”
“Going public...” Twilight replied.
“Well...maybe not just yet...the other elements of course will be told first...but let's make sure we both want this...I'm fine if it doesn't go any further than this though so don't worry about being pushed.” Luna said, nuzzling the unicorn. Twilight sighed but returned the affection.
“Right...well...let's go make sure Spike isn't scarred for life...” Twilight said. Luna nodded with a giggle.
---
“Spike?” Twilight called in the library.
“In here...” his voice came from the kitchen. They found him making pancakes and muttering to himself.
“Spike...you ok?” Twilight asked.
“Yeah...were you two really doing that or was I still dreaming?” Spike asked, putting the pan down and looking at them.
“That depends on what you saw.” Luna retorted. Spike rolled his eyes.
“I saw the pony that's practically my mom making out with Princess Luna...” Spike said flatly.
“Oh what's wrong with that Spike?” Twilight asked with a frown.
“Just...nothing...it just shocked me...you ever walk in on your parents when they were doing that?” Spike retorted.
“...I don't really remember but I get what you're saying.” Twilight answered.
“You don't remember?” Luna asked.
“Well...Last time I saw them was when I was enrolled into the school for gifted unicorns...I mean every now and then when I was in Canterlot I'd pass them and we'd spend an hour talking...but I really haven't seen them.” Twilight replied.
“Really now? So Tia has been your mother figure all this while?” Luna asked.
“I guess so.” Twilight shrugged.
“Well then, we should pay them a visit. I am interested to meet them.” Luna said.
“Oh...um...maybe...” Twilight answered.
“So what are you gonna tell everypony else?” Spike asked.
“We don't know...we'll just- oh I'll get it.” Twilight started as she was cut off by a knock at the door. She opened it to reveal a red faced Fluttershy and a sheepish Shadow Wing.
“What's wrong with you?” Spike asked. Fluttershy just squeaked as her face went to a darker shade of red. Shadow sighed and explained what had happened.
---
“But I'm not Tired~ Shadow I wanna play a game!” Fluttershy giggled as they entered the tree cottage, Fluttershy leaning heavily on the gray mare. The two had talked for most of the all-day party and they both found Fluttershy couldn't handle her alcohol. When she was drunk she became the opposite of shy. She had already made many raunchy comments as they walked home. Shadow didn't mind though, this Mare was really cute.
“Come on Fluttershy, you're drunk.” Shadow said with a grin as she stumbled on nothing.
“But so are you!” Fluttershy retorted from her place on the ground, flailing her hooves for emphasis.
“Not as much s'you” Shadow said.
“Well...um...well...so are you!” Fluttershy attempted to retort, but just made the both of them laugh. After ten minutes of stumbling and half-assed drunk flirting they finally made it into the bedroom. The bed look really inviting so neither mare let anything stop them from snuggling up in it's cloudy embrace.
“You know Fluttershy...you're adorable.” Shadow giggled as they stared at each other.
“I know...so are you!” Fluttershy retorted, nuzzling the other Pegasus. Shadow giggled as her brain completely shut off. Without even hesitating she caught the not-so-shy-anymore mare in a kiss. It wasn't full of passion, but it had enough to be real. Fluttershy wasted no time in returning it. Soon Fluttershy was on top of the other Mare, nibbling on her jaw-line. Fluttershy slowly made her way downward.
---
“You had a one night stand with the Element of Kindness?” Luna asked with a sly grin.
“W-w-we were Drunk! And-and...ugh...” Shadow terribly retorted.
“So what are you going to do about it?” Twilight lightly asked Fluttershy.
“W-we t-talked...and...w-we d-decided t-to...” Fluttershy squeaked, but nothing else was comprehensible on any sound frequency.
“We decided to...uh...date I guess...” Shadow finished.
“Oh that's wonderful!” Twilight and Luna said happily.
“Y-you mean...you're not mad or anything?” Fluttershy asked.
“Why would we be mad?” Twilight asked, confused.
“Shadow...just because you have your honor as my captain doesn't mean it has to bind you like this. You're on vacation.” Luna said.
“Yeah, and if you think it's because you're both Mares...why would we have a problem with that?” Twilight continued.
“R-really?” Shadow asked.
“Yeah...” the two answered, giving each other a glance and a nod.
“We're kind of um..dating too...” Twilight said and they explained what had happened to them.
Rushed? Oh yes, easy to see.
Not that it matters.
674454 three pages in an hour? rushed is fine
I like this fic
keep up the good work
How long is this thing going to be? Cause I don't want it to stop.
674460 i dunno...depends on where it goes
674463
Far... Where else would it go?
674485 i could actually probably end it in two to three chapters, but let's just say I intend to have this fic in the alicorn twilight section by the end
674491
Nice
giggity giggity
*Twilight remembered everything.
"we got really drunk and stumbled home...we had some sort of dispute...and...I...pulled you into bed? That's all I remember" - luna*
WIN! i can't believe you actually made twi out to be the one to remember, while the other one doesn't! that never ever happens.
i had to take a break from reading to laugh like a freaking lunatic
674537 sorry, wanted to get it out. I'm going to be away from wi-fi all day at a water park
674549 but my ocd made me get at least one chapter out a day...
Rushed? Yes. Still good? Definately. Just add details throughout at some point and it should be fixed. Ja?
This is so cute
Well if everything rushed had this quality then I wouldn't mind more rushed things
Although I agree with the fact that it's better to take longer on something so it's better in the end.
Still, awesome!
Patiently waiting for more
well my criticism has been said by others already sooooooooooooo... nothing to do here
Rushed? Heck yes. But it did have some funny stuff. Just consider a minor rewrite.
lunalight? kay. but srsly, looks good, I'll put it on my reading list.
That is all.
Please sir may we have some more
Sincerely the Doctor
Just
"but let's just say I intend to have this fic in the alicorn twilight section by the end"
I CAN'T YES YES YES ENOUGH.
this chapter did seem a little rushed, a few typos here and there, but still a great read.
keep it up :D
Has been said (and responded to) already, but this seems kinda rushed.
I understand the need to get something to paper before you forget what you wanted to write. Grammar is surprisingly fine. The main thing is some of the Dialogue needs to be reworded to sound more natural.
While rushed, I had to look for the typos, so they didn't trip me. Plus for that.
Since rushed, I noticed it was short, but that just means you owe us an extra long chapter! Plus for that.
This is TwiLuna. Plus-Plus for that.
Hilarious "walk right in, walk right back out" motion with Spike just turning on his heel. Plus for that.
You get all five moustaches.
I really like this story. I found the Fluttershy part particularly funny:P
inb4 totally awkward but hililarious double, if not more, dates!
674550
Miss Ocd is a harsh mistress
675998 indeed
*read like the Spy's voice clips*
Ahem... Gentlemen.
What?
Mon deiu!
Aaaaah!
Help me!
676079?
hope that theres gona be a day dream about the event... this has some real potantial... just saying better a day to late than a hour to early take your time and let us hunger for more respect dude V>///<
676118 day dream about what event?
I have to say the Story is interesting and quite good, it's just the picture for the story, it creeps me out
676184 oh but i love the picture...
Rushed? Totally!
Did I mind? Not one damn bit!
I'm really enjoying this dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
“You had a one night stand with the Element of Kindness?” <- so... pity sex? :P
GIGGITY
The story is pretty good, gotta say. The only issue I have is that, not that the chapter is rushed, but that the story itself feels rushed. It seems to be happening very suddenly. Of course this could just be personal preference from me. I like things a little drawn out, especially romance, and this seems like "ohey i have crush on you, you have crush on me? kay, let's get drunk and go steady? kay." Don't take that as saying it's bad or anything. Your sentence structures and grammar are fantastic, and even at the speed it's going the flow is great. It just seems too sudden to me is all. Though if you're planning on making it a short fic, that's totally understandable. All the same, it's a good, cute story. Keep up the good work.
676111
>play TF2
>understand reference
676417 not planning on making it long, this is a revision of my first twiluna, i wasn't too good back then so yeah it is a bit rushed storywise
676420 i played it so much it got boring and i know the references, i just don't know what you're doing with them
676437 dude...TwiLuna is in the description...the picture is the biggest twiluna fanart i've ever seen...and the title is TwiLuna-esq...if you don't like the pairing then why the fuck did you click the link? and how is it disgusting?
676450 turn off your caps button...and wtf wingboners? where did i mention wingboners once?
676448 she hasn't drank in a thousand years, you'd think her resistance to alcohol would deteriorate
676453 It is my reaction as the Spy. But I forgot one. "This is getting awkward"
It's cute!
I'm looking forward to more in the future!
I meant to say thisis getting good but it could get bad in the relationship between them.
676686 you made no sense
yea!! i Derpy!
676836
You don't happen to go to school in Wisconsin do you? Or are you driving in with your school? Or am I just derping and not realizing that there are other water parks called the kalahari?