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AWWWWW YA you updated.
Frankenstein syndrome or is that Frankenstallion? :)
Whens the next chapter and when will Appletart have her foal?
479971 I have no idea what your talking about
480876 What do you mean when's the next chapter, i only just updated.
482074 I mean is it this week or next week?
those who are disliking, please tell me why you don't like it
494084 As you know I'm a fan of this story. But I have a confession... When I started reading, I almost stopped when you introduced the Kodiak. I think it was a good decision, but it threw me for a loop at the time. I told myself that I can't be too harsh and to give it a chance, I am glad I did. .
This is my second reading of this chapter and I am noticing some improvement in your writing, definitely fewer spelling mistakes in this chapter . I am looking forward to Chapter 12, wondering if you'll answer questions that have plagued me like why Zyon was aboard the Kodiak II or did the Sires and Wretches emerging from Project Sire have any negative impact on the Wasteland or were they content to inhabit and plague a small area of their own.
554850 The Kodiak i thought fit well with the random encounters from Fallout 3 with the alien ship exploding in midair (never encountered it but seen it on youtube) and would be perfect to involve in my fic and to give Appletart her unique weapon. I knew that human weapons of the calibre of the mechs and firearms of GDI would be too powerful for Equestria so i also planned for the ship to be destroyed.
As for Zyon, I went through the eariler chapters some time ago and edited them and added some, didn't i say why he was there after he was rescued?
556559 Dunno, I'll have to re-read the earlier chapters.
584156 I guess I forgot that but a lot of others are using Stables beyond 101
I will gladly proof read for you. I'm really good at catching grammatical errors and incorrect word usage. So yea if you want me to help with proof reading Email me at ThinkLoveReact@gmail.com
EDIT: By the way i already started proof reading. I have not made any major changes at all. Only spelling errors were fixed so far.
703727 my e-mail is lex_the_pikachu@hotmail.co.uk if you could send me the edits that would be great and thank you
*Goes to start reading the fic again*
*clicks chapter*
OH GOD WHY!?
Okay, while my nit-picky self is ever so slowly getting used to the grammar, something else has set it off.
The "railgun" you described in this simply doesn't sound anything like a railgun. A railgun is a type of magnetic accelerator weapon, specifically one that uses two oppositely polarised electromagnetic rails to send a object downrange. Basically a railgun is a linear electric motor.
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(Also note that the armature and projectile itself complete the electrical circuit in a railgun.)
They don't have a lens, and they certainly don't make a ball of energy at the end of the weapon; their main defining feature is two long electromagnetic rails that run the length of the "barrel" either vertically or horizontally. Now while a railgun can feature a massive power build-up sequence; it would happen in the capacitors, which would be located deeply into the weapon, and not the rails themselves, which should be the only visible energy circuited component, (unless for whatever reason the capacitors are external, which would leave them vulnerable to damage).
The rails themselves wouldn't feature a build up: they need to get all their power at once.
The reason for that is, again, railguns are basically a linear electric motor; if you give even a little power to them they'll start moving the projectile, just really slowly. Think of it like the electric motors in a electric car: you depress the accelerator pedal a little bit, and they'll only receive a little bit of power and move the car slowly.
For a car with miles to accelerate that's fine, but for a gun with a limited rail length you need the projectile to reach high velocity in a short distance; in other words you have to floor that pedal down to the ground, not give it a slowly increasing power curve. Otherwise the projectile will reach the end of the rails before it got up to full power and leave the weapon with a relatively low velocity.
Likewise railguns are projectile weapons, though there are plasma railguns which could be considered a energy weapon, they work identically, except the projectile and armature are made up of plasma, or hot, ionized, gas-like particles, instead of a solid slug of material.
Even these wouldn't have the energy build up at the end, rather it'd build up a "ball" of plasma at the back and then launch it forward when the rails are energised.
They also work for engines for spacecraft. Though those tend to feature electromagnetic coils instead of rails.
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(Experimental plasma engine in 1961.)
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As well as being proposed as a containment unit for nuclear fusion reactors.
What you described as a "railgun" fits more with the Wave Motion Gun from Space Battleship Yamato. Nearly perfectly might I add.
(Though I think the Yamato's gun is a wee bit more powerful. )
Oh, and man, poor Short Circuit, her mind downloaded into the computer like that, gees man.
Okay I wasn't going to comment but now I can't help myself, this story is great and has definitely ranked as one of my top fics (I will be adding it soon) the main characters have a ton of heart to em and I just can't get over how many references you have made to different things as I read on. Most especially the Star Scream/ Sky Fire (G1 Transformers, hell yes) so yeah, you are now tied with my favorite author!!!
5819857 Excellent explanation of a railgun, and wow I never thought anyone had actually made an experimental spacecraft engine utilizing those principles!!! (I was so disappointed with Bungie when their railgun lit up at the end)
If I have one complaint, is that I think there is a plot hole in this chapter. When Longshot begins her killing of he raiders (A really good moment by the way), I find it odd that Sky fire asks why she has a problem with raiders, seeing that she has been to Stable 88 and has seen what happened there. You mean to tell me that neither Longshot and Zyon has told her that what happened there? Or that she didn't figure it out on her own. And if Appletart told only Zyon, why didn't she tell Sky fire. Hell, why didn't they figure it out when they visited her home. This plot hole is very distracting to me as a reader.
But, I would be remiss if I didn't say that the scene with the raiders was deliciously brutal, as it is both a way to show how cold vengance is horrifing. that killin relentlessly without thinking or even focusing on your own desires is a cruel way of handling it. I love how this in turn, makes her imagine what kind of mother she is going to beome. Will she let her anger flow or let her rage take her. At the same time, this is in paralle with the Krogroth mainframe.
fucking love this pony. I'm thinking of using the K-01 ACM Krogoth in a FO:E fic I'm currently thinking of making.
if that's ok with you fallout brony.
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sure, would be nice to see it utilised a little more
that made me think of an old fantasy story, part of a series called "the traveler in Black": a bunch of priests, at the orders of their king, were practicing human sacrifice, trying to bring a statue to life, so it would "hunt down the enemies of the city". when the protagonist said his usual magic words, "as you wish, so be it", it immediately killed the king and the priests!