I went to a normal convention with my buddy. I found this table brimming with REALLY cool swag. I decided not to break my bank, and just bought a bat from manga. And now I'm trapped in Equestria. As a game character.
So ponies are light-weights when it comes to drinking. Interesting. You should have used observe on the pink liquid before downing it, Colt. Would have at least given you some warning about what to expect.
What is with all these lore inserts? They are extremely out-of-place and have no relevance to the story as whole. It's pretty bad when entire chunks of your story can be deleted and have no impact on it at all.
Perhaps you should save these for when Coltson reads them in a book during downtime? I mean, the literally have no impact right now. If you're trying to foreshadow something, you're going about it the wrong way.
Okay, this chapter was awesome. I liked the drinking competition between Colton and RD, especially since RD was getting drunk so easily, though I do wonder what was that drink that she had that made Colton drunk. That drunk status is dangerous if it made Colton forget about his weapons and made him attack a zombie barehanded, so he better be careful about that drink. The luck status and how Colton attained them are a mystery, but in the other hand I'm happy that Celestia is going to appear soon. Anyway, now that Colton noticed that there are very few stallions, I wonder if he's going to receive attention from the mares, probably RD will want to hang out with him after beating her in the drinking contest. Anyway, hope the next chapter come soon. P.S: Hey, Colton, have you tried to get a skill that lets you know when an enemy is close to you or watching you? Maybe you can develop that skill by focusing on your surroundings and trying to predict where Pinkie is
For Colton: Invent a Super Sledgehammer! The super sledgehammer is a high-tech sledgehammer manufactured of high-strength, ultra-light, ultra-dense materials and also includes a kinetic energy storage device to increase knockback. If you could that, Big Mac might even get jealous, so extra incentive.
Concerning my earlier suggestion, I have an idea. If you learn enchanting, changing the properties of your mana bolts might be easier. Failing that, baseball bat that sets things on fire.
I think spike could become a companion for him and when spike gains levels he can increase his own stat chart like his friend in the manga (possibly effect his growth as well)
word of advise about keeping track of the status and skill sheets, is Dont worry about it to much. i have seen, read and played a number of quests and stories where the writer has kept a large amount of sheets detailing what the main character can and can't do and they always burn out quickly due to the sheer amount of work needed. Just keep a general idea of how the character is doing and just put in what sounds reasanable when you need to show a stat sheet as it would be horrible to see this fic die.
Hey Colton, a advice form me, lern electricity, why ? Even at a low level, you can make a railgun ! And, later, you can control magnetism and electromagnetism.
Uh... when did he ever take note of the Displaced Gamer skill? I've yet to see him read about that, or am forgetting about it. Yet, he never noted it at all.
7346438 About ten to fifteen more chapters. Don't look at me like that, of course I have to do something.
It's a matriarchal society, Colton is now on the other side of what he considers the gender norm. Mares will be making catcalls at him, and if he does find himself on a date, it would be considered quite rude for him to try to pick up the check.
If you plan on becoming a becoming a summoner, what are your thoughts on using little 'tokens' as a quick and easy method of calling OP meat shields without using mana?
If it sounds appealing I may know a certain lucid dreamer you could summon.
lol Well, here's a thought. Since Hax is made of wood, wonder if one of the techniques he could develop is becoming a sort of living armor or weapon for Colton?
If you're working with a stat sheet for writing, I have an idea: don't plan out your battle scenes, or at least keep the plans open ended enough that you can improvise. Have ideas for bits of the battle, then string them together. Some ideas may have to be left out, but they can be reused later on.
7347087 Big Mac, no. Some others might, but thats more of a devotion to the 'god' of purity. Most of these such ponies are far and in between, and those that do practice don't do so openly for fear of angering others.
Most ponies believe there are no gods, but that Celestia and the other alicorn are as good as they'll get. So if you find somepony worshiping, it will most likely be to Celestia. On rare cases, a pony might be found saying 'by the stars' or something similar.
Hey Colton, I don't know if your getting my messages but here's this *sudenly, a black Lance appears in world* statues attack 100 fire attack 50 dark attack 200 spd + 13 dark dmg resist + 100. A lance made of shadows created from an unknown ore, grants user the ability to pull the original owner from their world to aid you in battle Level requirement 40 Anyways, I hope your safe there, oh and you should go check the Forrest, there are 3 locations, 2 hold some power full secrets, good luck
Have you considered using googledocs/etc or something to track stats? I read on some story comment you had problems with those so might be easy way to set up some site with all off the stats organized as you like and then just alt-tab as you write if needed.
Here, have a totally unremarkable hat. *gives unremarkable hat* Also here, have a token. *hands you a flame sprayer from Bloodborne* Make of it as you wish.
Dear pinkie,
Hat are your feelings towards Colt? Maybe you want to take him out on a nice romantic picnic?
7349980 It's been awhile since your last update, and i've seen several other writers just give up on their fics, so if i don't see a update to a fic in awhile i usally start to ponder if the author is still working on it, giving up on it or is simply having a writers block.
7350049 I refuse to give up on any of my fics. I of course have been having some horrid writers block, but as shown I can work my way into its blind spot on occasion.
Question for Colton: If you have the potential for any skill, would you be able to use my token as it should be: a grimoire of occult knowledge, permitting you access to magics eldritch in nature, where you can pray to, and call upon, the Displaced, Crawling Chaos, Nyarlathotep? Great powers are in store for the dedicated, and all you have to do is read, speak, sketch, and dream... Great, alien powers are yours to command, Colton... All you have to do, is summon me... *A massive tome, bound in oddly stitched leather, appears in the library with nary a sound, but some mad whisperings...*
WARNING! This tomes learnable abilities are not compatible with your current OS. Learnable abilities will be replaced with synonamous compatible abilities as per the current OS requirements. Windows 10 will be installed upon shutdown.
7351899 Curses; another incompatible universe! Um... Wow, some adaptation is required for this existence; the grimoire couldn't even manifest! Maybe I need to code it differently, and split it into volumes? Maybe send the volumes scattered, under different names? Or maybe one spell per volume? Or spell branch? This is going to be awkward... Let's try my summoning tome first; hopefully this won't retrict my powers like last bloody summon...
(I just realize I have no idea how to do that cool thing where you obscure the text with awesome script, making it look like some form of eldritch black tongue... I really like it's aesthetic...)
"Sebehy er rut ta desheret Iw iyin s n kekw Em seshet’w djuu senefu"
I like Colton's style... I looooooooove rocket launchers!
Anyway...
Colton, do you plan on ever learning Shadow or Darkness aligned abilities? I ask this because you could sneak around easier without making an ID, and you could also avoid the Pink annoyance... Even though her Pinkie Sense can still sense where you are (as would any empath) she won't be able to see you... and they also can come in handy in though spots. And, unlike dark magic, they do not cause any ill effect on the user's body, so no corruption.
And Pinkie? Please learn the meaning of personal space, for Colton's sake. The poor guy needs his alone time... Or just tell him you already know about his secret... Although that might end up badly...
Dear Colton I have a couple suggestions for you to try if possible, that could give you a few good "early game" advantages, that involve the displaced. You seem to like having pet monsters/familiars that could fight alongside you and grow in power too. For some real good ones, you should see if you can get ahold of Golden Freddy, Zinnia the Delta Guardian or maybe the Mewtwo displaced from "Misunderstood and Mutated". They could give you access to some Pokemon, and let's face it, pokemon are going to be better than most of the animals and such you could get ahold of on your own (Freddy and Zinnia could get you some for sure, though Mewtwo is more of a maybe).
For the other advantage, I would suggest talking to Jason Huges. With his Omnitrix he could splice your DNA with that of say some Sayin or other powerful creature. That would unlock the option of having some species modifiers that would give you additional strength and powers/abilities. You could probably even get them to where you can turn them on and off.
I demand MOAR! Also for Colton : Dude get some armor or anything that qualifies as an armor. Weapons and skills are nice and all but if you can't take hits why bother learning to fight at all? Also try learning any skill related to electricity and magneticism who knows you might be able to turn your arm into a Railgun. But my suggestion for a weapon? Guns. Lots of Guns.
Hey Colton, I've noticed you've been getting suggestions for new spells, but have you thought of combining some? Imagine the effects of your mana bolt delivered via face punch express....
Just opening new avenues for you. Also, good luck with Celestia.
7358588 Face Punch is 'activated' by the user closing their hand into a fist, and making sure their knuckles collide with the face of the target.
When Mana Bolt is activated (the automatic vocal version) the blast of magic is expelled from the palm of the user. If the hand is closed, an explosion will occur and damage will be reflected back upon the user.
Currently Face Punch and Mana Bolt are incompatible. If Colton learns how to exude Mana Bolt from areas other than his open palm, this may change.
For the Gamer powers, you don't need to keep track of everything ever, really. You just need to keep track of it well enough so that your readers go 'yeah, he can do that' or 'yeah, that can happen'. Face Punch running out of mana before the zombie dies? Sure! He has enough mana for X? Certainly. It also reduces the amount of Game Messages in the story, which improves the flow.
Wordplay aside, I like your name. And yes, The Doctor is supposed to be rather OP. He's been around for a while, making him a higher up. His place in this story however... I don't know if that sheet will reflect his first appearance.
At the very least, his level will be blocked out from Coltons vision by a '???".
Please don't let the dredys ruin your day. Dreadlocks are indeed meant for dirty, unwashed hair. But whether or not that was true, if people are giving you guff because of how you used a hair style in a story, then those people have both too much time on their hands and clearly have nothing of actual consequence in their lives, because if they didn't then they wouldn't even be able to fathom the thought of getting upset over a description of hair let alone the gargantuan effort it would take to waste the necessary chain of chemical releases across there synaptic relays to have the actual thought themselves. Case in point, when was the last time you heard about anyone getting upset for caring about the presentation of their hair and then whining about having their day ruined because someone wrote it off as being 'preppy', as though it were a negative to be prepared. Don't sweat the small stuff, and don't let the ignorant, unwashed, dreadlocked masses ruin your day because they decided to whinge at you for having the audacity to have your own opinion.
To Colton: If you ever have some spare time I would suggest either grinding your ID skills in order to earn loot and xp, or try to do some whittling because not only could you sell what you made it could also level up the skill for crafting things.
Try not to use too many numbers if you don't have to, for example instead of saying "He fired X mana bolts and got no mana left " say something like "He keep firing until he run out of mana".
Wow, you're super good with the cliffhangers. It's interesting to see inattentional blindness is a hangover quirk capable of counteracting the observe skill, I was wondering if that had a weakness.
He really should learn hamsterball mode. Step 1: learn mana shield, Step 2: set it on fire/ice/lightning, Step 3: CHARGE!
So ponies are light-weights when it comes to drinking. Interesting. You should have used observe on the pink liquid before downing it, Colt. Would have at least given you some warning about what to expect.
What is with all these lore inserts? They are extremely out-of-place and have no relevance to the story as whole. It's pretty bad when entire chunks of your story can be deleted and have no impact on it at all.
Perhaps you should save these for when Coltson reads them in a book during downtime? I mean, the literally have no impact right now. If you're trying to foreshadow something, you're going about it the wrong way.
Okay, this chapter was awesome. I liked the drinking competition between Colton and RD, especially since RD was getting drunk so easily, though I do wonder what was that drink that she had that made Colton drunk. That drunk status is dangerous if it made Colton forget about his weapons and made him attack a zombie barehanded, so he better be careful about that drink. The luck status and how Colton attained them are a mystery, but in the other hand I'm happy that Celestia is going to appear soon. Anyway, now that Colton noticed that there are very few stallions, I wonder if he's going to receive attention from the mares, probably RD will want to hang out with him after beating her in the drinking contest. Anyway, hope the next chapter come soon.
P.S: Hey, Colton, have you tried to get a skill that lets you know when an enemy is close to you or watching you? Maybe you can develop that skill by focusing on your surroundings and trying to predict where Pinkie is
For Colton: Invent a Super Sledgehammer! The super sledgehammer is a high-tech sledgehammer manufactured of high-strength, ultra-light, ultra-dense materials and also includes a kinetic energy storage device to increase knockback. If you could that, Big Mac might even get jealous, so extra incentive.
Dear Colton
Concerning my earlier suggestion, I have an idea. If you learn enchanting, changing the properties of your mana bolts might be easier. Failing that, baseball bat that sets things on fire.
I think spike could become a companion for him and when spike gains levels he can increase his own stat chart like his friend in the manga (possibly effect his growth as well)
word of advise about keeping track of the status and skill sheets, is Dont worry about it to much. i have seen, read and played a number of quests and stories where the writer has kept a large amount of sheets detailing what the main character can and can't do and they always burn out quickly due to the sheer amount of work needed. Just keep a general idea of how the character is doing and just put in what sounds reasanable when you need to show a stat sheet as it would be horrible to see this fic die.
such fun cant wait for more
This amuses me and I now desire more. Just like I desire more of The Gamer.
Did you jump from cider to magical everclear?!
Also one big question, you planning on forming a party?
Hey Colton,
a advice form me, lern electricity, why ? Even at a low level, you can make a railgun ! And, later, you can control magnetism and electromagnetism.
Uh... when did he ever take note of the Displaced Gamer skill? I've yet to see him read about that, or am forgetting about it. Yet, he never noted it at all.
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What? Oh sorry, he forgot to focus on that. Seems like something that might have been important...
7346264 lol Nice.^^
7346264 what would it take to get you to throw in a romance tag?
7346438
About ten to fifteen more chapters.
Don't look at me like that, of course I have to do something.
It's a matriarchal society, Colton is now on the other side of what he considers the gender norm. Mares will be making catcalls at him, and if he does find himself on a date, it would be considered quite rude for him to try to pick up the check.
Gender skewing is fun~
7346514 indeed it ish
dear Colton
If you plan on becoming a becoming a summoner, what are your thoughts on using little 'tokens' as a quick and easy method of calling OP meat shields without using mana?
If it sounds appealing I may know a certain lucid dreamer you could summon.
lol Well, here's a thought. Since Hax is made of wood, wonder if one of the techniques he could develop is becoming a sort of living armor or weapon for Colton?
If you're working with a stat sheet for writing, I have an idea: don't plan out your battle scenes, or at least keep the plans open ended enough that you can improvise. Have ideas for bits of the battle, then string them together. Some ideas may have to be left out, but they can be reused later on.
7346514
Oh? How much Gender skewing are we talking about here? Are you willing to provide us with any specifics?
... Does Big Macintosh wear a chastity belt?
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Big Mac, no. Some others might, but thats more of a devotion to the 'god' of purity. Most of these such ponies are far and in between, and those that do practice don't do so openly for fear of angering others.
Most ponies believe there are no gods, but that Celestia and the other alicorn are as good as they'll get. So if you find somepony worshiping, it will most likely be to Celestia. On rare cases, a pony might be found saying 'by the stars' or something similar.
So happy there's a new chapter
7347648
Go read Little Nemo too *Shameless plug*
7347685
Haha okok shesh
I'm always glad when I see this updated will look forward to reading more of it so thank you for the great read
Hey Colton, I don't know if your getting my messages but here's this *sudenly, a black Lance appears in world* statues attack 100 fire attack 50 dark attack 200 spd + 13 dark dmg resist + 100. A lance made of shadows created from an unknown ore, grants user the ability to pull the original owner from their world to aid you in battle Level requirement 40
Anyways, I hope your safe there, oh and you should go check the Forrest, there are 3 locations, 2 hold some power full secrets, good luck
7182390
Have you considered using googledocs/etc or something to track stats? I read on some story comment you had problems with those so might be easy way to set up some site with all off the stats organized as you like and then just alt-tab as you write if needed.
colton you should make a electric attack that can work like a taser and can stun stronger enemys so that you have a chance to fight or run
pinkie.... make me a cake please. \...
hax, why you so cool? i want a pet like you.
Dear Colton,
Here, have a totally unremarkable hat. *gives unremarkable hat* Also here, have a token. *hands you a flame sprayer from Bloodborne* Make of it as you wish.
Dear pinkie,
Hat are your feelings towards Colt? Maybe you want to take him out on a nice romantic picnic?
Sincerely, Trithtale
It's great to see that you are still working on this fic.
7349971
Of course I am, why wouldn't I be?
7349980 It's been awhile since your last update, and i've seen several other writers just give up on their fics, so if i don't see a update to a fic in awhile i usally start to ponder if the author is still working on it, giving up on it or is simply having a writers block.
7350049
I refuse to give up on any of my fics. I of course have been having some horrid writers block, but as shown I can work my way into its blind spot on occasion.
Question for Colton: If you have the potential for any skill, would you be able to use my token as it should be: a grimoire of occult knowledge, permitting you access to magics eldritch in nature, where you can pray to, and call upon, the Displaced, Crawling Chaos, Nyarlathotep? Great powers are in store for the dedicated, and all you have to do is read, speak, sketch, and dream... Great, alien powers are yours to command, Colton... All you have to do, is summon me... *A massive tome, bound in oddly stitched leather, appears in the library with nary a sound, but some mad whisperings...*
7351135
7351899 Curses; another incompatible universe! Um... Wow, some adaptation is required for this existence; the grimoire couldn't even manifest! Maybe I need to code it differently, and split it into volumes? Maybe send the volumes scattered, under different names? Or maybe one spell per volume? Or spell branch? This is going to be awkward... Let's try my summoning tome first; hopefully this won't retrict my powers like last bloody summon...
(I just realize I have no idea how to do that cool thing where you obscure the text with awesome script, making it look like some form of eldritch black tongue... I really like it's aesthetic...)
"Sebehy er rut ta desheret
Iw iyin s n kekw
Em seshet’w djuu senefu"
I like Colton's style... I looooooooove rocket launchers!
Anyway...
Colton, do you plan on ever learning Shadow or Darkness aligned abilities? I ask this because you could sneak around easier without making an ID, and you could also avoid the Pink annoyance... Even though her Pinkie Sense can still sense where you are (as would any empath) she won't be able to see you... and they also can come in handy in though spots. And, unlike dark magic, they do not cause any ill effect on the user's body, so no corruption.
And Pinkie? Please learn the meaning of personal space, for Colton's sake. The poor guy needs his alone time... Or just tell him you already know about his secret... Although that might end up badly...
Dear Colton
I have a couple suggestions for you to try if possible, that could give you a few good "early game" advantages, that involve the displaced. You seem to like having pet monsters/familiars that could fight alongside you and grow in power too. For some real good ones, you should see if you can get ahold of Golden Freddy, Zinnia the Delta Guardian or maybe the Mewtwo displaced from "Misunderstood and Mutated". They could give you access to some Pokemon, and let's face it, pokemon are going to be better than most of the animals and such you could get ahold of on your own (Freddy and Zinnia could get you some for sure, though Mewtwo is more of a maybe).
For the other advantage, I would suggest talking to Jason Huges. With his Omnitrix he could splice your DNA with that of say some Sayin or other powerful creature. That would unlock the option of having some species modifiers that would give you additional strength and powers/abilities. You could probably even get them to where you can turn them on and off.
I demand MOAR!
Also for Colton : Dude get some armor or anything that qualifies as an armor. Weapons and skills are nice and all but if you can't take hits why bother learning to fight at all? Also try learning any skill related to electricity and magneticism who knows you might be able to turn your arm into a Railgun. But my suggestion for a weapon?
Guns. Lots of Guns.
Hey Colton, I've noticed you've been getting suggestions for new spells, but have you thought of combining some? Imagine the effects of your mana bolt delivered via face punch express....
Just opening new avenues for you. Also, good luck with Celestia.
7358588
Face Punch is 'activated' by the user closing their hand into a fist, and making sure their knuckles collide with the face of the target.
When Mana Bolt is activated (the automatic vocal version) the blast of magic is expelled from the palm of the user. If the hand is closed, an explosion will occur and damage will be reflected back upon the user.
Currently Face Punch and Mana Bolt are incompatible. If Colton learns how to exude Mana Bolt from areas other than his open palm, this may change.
For the Gamer powers, you don't need to keep track of everything ever, really. You just need to keep track of it well enough so that your readers go 'yeah, he can do that' or 'yeah, that can happen'. Face Punch running out of mana before the zombie dies? Sure! He has enough mana for X? Certainly. It also reduces the amount of Game Messages in the story, which improves the flow.
7360718 is up with your name?
Wordplay aside, I like your name. And yes, The Doctor is supposed to be rather OP. He's been around for a while, making him a higher up. His place in this story however... I don't know if that sheet will reflect his first appearance.
At the very least, his level will be blocked out from Coltons vision by a '???".
Please don't let the dredys ruin your day. Dreadlocks are indeed meant for dirty, unwashed hair. But whether or not that was true, if people are giving you guff because of how you used a hair style in a story, then those people have both too much time on their hands and clearly have nothing of actual consequence in their lives, because if they didn't then they wouldn't even be able to fathom the thought of getting upset over a description of hair let alone the gargantuan effort it would take to waste the necessary chain of chemical releases across there synaptic relays to have the actual thought themselves. Case in point, when was the last time you heard about anyone getting upset for caring about the presentation of their hair and then whining about having their day ruined because someone wrote it off as being 'preppy', as though it were a negative to be prepared.
Don't sweat the small stuff, and don't let the ignorant, unwashed, dreadlocked masses ruin your day because they decided to whinge at you for having the audacity to have your own opinion.
To: Colton
Do you fear the Boogeyman?
To Colton:
If you ever have some spare time I would suggest either grinding your ID skills in order to earn loot and xp, or try to do some whittling because not only could you sell what you made it could also level up the skill for crafting things.
Try not to use too many numbers if you don't have to, for example instead of saying "He fired X mana bolts and got no mana left " say something like "He keep firing until he run out of mana".
Wow, you're super good with the cliffhangers. It's interesting to see inattentional blindness is a hangover quirk capable of counteracting the observe skill, I was wondering if that had a weakness.
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Unfortunately, I have no confidence in my ability to construct fight scenes. They always come off weird to me.