Four Hooves

by destinedjagold

2 - 20

Somewhere...

Distant stars can be seen everywhere, twinkling in total silence.

A gentle flipping noise echoes in the silence.

A breath escapes a muzzle. Slowly, closed eyelids open, revealing black and blue eyes, reflecting the sheets and cosmos.

Another breath. Another flipping noise.

And then a smile.

“...”

A malicious one.

Comments

[111segasonic]

ok

[Aurum]

right

[tsaukpaetra]

Someone's playing games...
Keep going_ ;)

[Wellwater]

That's just mean. fc02.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2013/001/7/e/clapping_pony_icon___nightmare_moon_by_taritoons-d5prx8v.gif

[Mix-up]

This is getting interesting. Jay past was a bit more... complected then first though, apparently the temporal changes go all the way back to the very origin of pony civilization and that it was done by something malicious as well as very powerful.

[JBL]

[Dream Seeker]

7311326 Thank you for your well-written explanation. I understand your points.

Personally, I still like the chapter, but I can now see why others did not.

[Dream Seeker]

I had guessed at the very beginning of the story that it was the Founder's Era in which a change was made, but other then that, I had no idea. Well, at least I was right about that!

[Conflicting views]

Huh?
Well, I was saving this chapter for later, hoping for a cool ending of act 2.
It IS nice.
But what is it doing here? I mean, it is not a chapter, not by itself. It would've fit far much better at the end of chapter 19. In fact, it could've been the only good thing in an otherwise poor chapter.

[That One Brony Dude]

I get the feeling it was an Ursa Major. The fourth sentence mentions something "reflecting the sheets and cosmos." Either that's an Ursa Major, an Ursa Minor, or Luna's main. I doubt the latter.

[Emperor]

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[ferret]

Well, at least they made it back to Twilight's place. Nice work, so far. Come on Jay, stop hogging the flashback potion!

“‘Oh, hey there, Twilight! Can you help me return home? I’m actually a human from another world, or dimension, that is probably far, far away from Equestria.’”

“See, the thing is I'm also from another world, or dimension, that is probably very, very, very close to this Equestria. If I can't get myself back home, then how the heck am I supposed to help you?”

[Tephera]

Bing reading is hard to do you know. Worth it.

To bad it is in hiatus... ;(

[Zobeid]

Been going through my backlog of followed stories. . . finally got caught up on this one.

It's on hiatus now? Dang. I hope it'll be continued. I think it's one of the more imaginative and original stories on this site.

[Kilobytes]

I'm fairly glad you actually put it on hiatus at a good time and hell, even used the hiatus tag at all. Better than saying somewhere we won't see and then leaving it on incomplete.

[Mix-up]

Any hope to see more of this story again? I really miss the up dates for it.

[destinedjagold]

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I've been too busy with life, but I do love to finish this story. I do write whenever I can, but life is really a pain at the moment. I plan to start the weekly updates once I'm done writing the 20 chapters of Arc 3.

[Mix-up]

8463109
great to hear from you again destinedjagold, and I am happy that you haven been sitting idle in your writing too. I hope life with slack off a little for you. So what has been happening for you as of late? I am still happy to have done the cover art for you it's still one of my favored work that I did.

[DauntedSuperior]

Wow, I'm loving the story so far but man would I have been pissed if I was caught up to this point and this was the newest chapter. Maybe you posted the day after a chapter of before, but this is one hell of a dick move in my book. As that's not the case though, moving on!