It's a girl!
Spike paced anxiously outside the door of a hospital room, biting his lip a little with worry. Pinkie had gone into labor not long ago, and Rarity had gone in to check on her. It had been an hour, and she hadn't come back. He wondered if Pinkie was ok, or if something had gone wrong. Was Pinkie doing alright? Was the baby ok? What was Rarity doing? If only he could go in... The doctors hadn't let him, because he wasn't the biological father. Rarity had made a fuss about this, since it was still his baby anyway, but to no avail. Suddenly, the door opened, and a white mare with light pink hair in a bun (he was pretty sure she was a nurse) poked her head out.
"Mr. Dragon, you can come in now." She said. Spike took a deep breath, knowing that his whole life was about to change. Behind that door was a whole new world, one full of nursing, diapers, first steps, cuddles, boo-boos, responsibilities, joy, pain, first words, growing up, and tiny miracles, a world where he wouldn't be just "Spike" anymore. A world where he was "Daddy" too. Spike walked into the room, slightly nervous at what might be within. Pinkie was laying on the hospital bed, with Rarity by her side, tears of joy sparkling in her sapphire eyes. And in Pinkie's arms, something tiny was wrapped up in a blanket. Spike walked up to Rarity's side, and took a peek. What he saw took his breath away.
"Wow..." He said, stunned by how tiny and precious the foal was. It had Rarity's soft white fur, and the same color mane, but Pinkie's bouncy curls. A smile spread across his face as he gazed upon the tiny baby.
"Isn't she precious, Spike?" Rarity asked him, not taking her gaze off of the sweet little foal. Spike's eyes lit up. The baby was a girl? He smiled even wider. He hadn't said what gender of child he wanted when others had asked, saying either was fine, but secretly, he had really, really wanted a girl. He could protect and cherish her, much like Rarity. He could be the big, strong, loving daddy who was always there for his little girl, the one who went to every ballet recital, who kissed every boo-boo, who helped her pick out her prom dress, and who would comfort her after a bad date (and methodically destroy whoever had dared to hurt his baby girl). He hugged Rarity gently, feeling a swelling joy and love like nothing he had ever known.
"Yes, yes she is, Rarity. She's absolutely perfect." He said, looking at his sweet little baby girl. Pinkie smiled at him, and stroked the baby's mane.
"Do you want to hold her, Spike?" She asked, wanting to make sure he got to cuddle with his new baby girl. He looked down at the tiny baby, a small tear of joy in his eye.
"Yes, I would love to." He said. Rarity used her magic to carry the baby to him, and he wrapped his arms around her gently. He looked into her tiny, sweet face, and stroked her fluffy purple mane. She opened her eyes and looked up at him, revealing her gorgeous blue eyes. He gasped slightly, breathtaken again by how perfect his new baby was. She smiled, and raised a hoof to touch his cheek, gurgling happily. He kissed her forehead gently, which made her giggle happily.
"I already love you so much, my sweet, tiny angel..." He said, hugging her close. Rarity and Pinkie looked at each other with a smile, knowing Spike would be a perfect father for their baby, and the four of them would be a very happy family from now on.
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Well, Spike's a daddy now, Rarity and Pinkie are moms, and P-Pop is born. Everypony's happy....and hopefully this gets more likes
Is that it?Waaaaaaaaaaaaa
5996232 Spike just became a....
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(Not so) Big Daddy
Wow, that was over quick. I would have really liked a lot more stuff between chapters 3 and 4.
5996294 It's just a short 'n sweet story, not a novel. I wanted to keep it a quick read. What I don't understand is the large amount of downvotes, though.
5999013 The answer to that depends. Is this meant as a trollfic or not?
6000074 No, it's completely serious. It's my OC's backstory.
6000105 In that case the problem is deeply rooted in the story's length. The whole concept you introduce us to is pretty weird:
Spike and Rarity are together but cannot get children.
So Rarity screws Pinkie behind his back and gets her pregnant. Spike is freaked out, yet he immediately forgives her adultery, once she explains that the three will raise the children together.
Just imagine this happening in real life - Bob and Alice want to get children, but cannot. Thus, Bob, without ever consulting Alice has sex with Alice's friend and informs her afterwards that the three from now on live together to raise the resulting child. Do you think Alice's and Bob's marriage would survive this? Even if it did, the situation would pose heavy stain on their relation.
Now, I'm not saying that you couldn't make this work, but for that your story would need more substance. There are extremely obvious problem's with Rarity's behaviour and if you want the story to be any good, you need to address them. For this you could either have your characters (Spike in particular, for this story) evaluate her actions and sort things out, or -if you go for comedy- make a point out of how the issues exist but are deliberately ignored by your characters (because your characters are stupid and/ or random)
Instead you chose to go along with a concept with huge issues without even once acknowledging their existence. That certainly isn't realistic, not dramatic and also not really funny. Thus the downvotes.
6000355 http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Polyamory?scrlybrkr
It's in the Polyamory group for a reason.
6000220 How's this one?img13.deviantart.net/7f88/i/2015/107/6/b/smoozzzz_gala_by_hillbe-d8q1zj7.jpg
6000380 I know what polyamory is. I also don't mind polyamory in general or the fact that there is polyamory in your story.
As far as I'm concerned, people can live their love life any way they and their partner(s) are happy with. If that includes several relationships at the same time, who am I to judge them?
I don't mind that Rarity had sex with Pinkie, despite being in a relationship with Spike. What I do mind is that she did so without ever consulting him first and that this is never acknowledged as a potential issue in your story.
Rarity cheated on Spike. Even if Spike doesn't mind her having sex with Pinkie, the fact that she didn't ask and thus betrayed Spike's trust remains. There is also the matter that she decided on the whole family thing on her own. What if Spike didn't want a polyamorous relation with Pinkie or raise a child together with her?
Yet Spike never even once acknowledges this as a problem. While he is worried that Pinkie and Rarity start a family without him, he doesn't care at all that it never came to Rarity's mind to ask him for consent before pulling him into a polyamorous relationship with Pinkie.
6000549 ... Ok, I figured out where you got stuck.
Spike is not with Pinkie, but he is with Rarity. Rarity is with both of them. Rarity and Spike tried to conceive. She knows Spike wants to be a father, so she's trying to help him become one. This jump of logic on her part IS addressed, it's kinda the whole story. I actually based all of this on the family structure I have.
6000563 Well, you are partially right. Rarity's leap of logic is addressed. What is not addressed is the fact that she decided over Spike's head.
Starting a family is kind of a huge decision that should not be taken lightly. Before deciding on getting children, the partners should discuss the issue and come to a conclusion together.
Even if Spike and Rarity decided to try for children before, she has no means to know whether he would agree to have a child mothered by Pinkie. In the end Spike found the idea agreeable.
This however doesn't change the fact that Rarity did not consult him for a decision that impacts their entire lives, which is a huge no-go, even in a polyamorous relationship. You can't just include something like that without having the characters show some kind of reaction to it.
6000623 Okay, having read everything you typed, the fact Rarity should have consulted Spike and that the story could have been longer are the only things that are agreeable. The description for the story was extremely clear on relationship status of Spike and Rarity and Rarity and Pinkie as well as Spike knowing full well Pinkie and Rarity were also together. He did have a reaction when he found out they had decided to have a kid without his knowledge, he ran of heartbroken on the logical assumption that he wasn't part of this new family. Finding out he was in fact included made him really happy, the happiness out weighing the "they should have told me," feelings.
Yes, the stories short and there's a lot of missed opportunity for some pregnancy shenanigans and hard hitting emotions, That being said the point of the story was the child's birth so cutting all of that is logical, though a tad disappointing to those of us who wanted to see it.
I also will certainly not deny making a decision like that without consulting Spike was unthoughtful, irresponsible, and unfair of Rarity and Pinkie, but that doesn't make it a bad story. Fuck ups tend to be one of the most realistic aspects of life, and they fucked up hard.
But the story does what it sets out to do, establish the family dynamic and get the baby born. It might not be great or the most entertaining thing I've read today, but it does what it came to do, there's a happy ending for everyone, and it's readable, not without some mistakes but that's pretty much every story. So the sheer number of downvotes is entirely unwarranted. It's not hateful, it's not a trollfic, and there's no real fuck you to Spike, just a poor decision by those he cares about.
6002763 I love you, man.
6002763
Exactly! Bad decisions are part of your life and also part of a good story. Without them a story is pretty boring.
However, the important thing about bad decisions is that you need to show some reaction to them.
In life, you should try to work things out to come to a solution.
In a story you should use a fuck-up as an experience your characters can grow over (or in tragedy shatter over.)
If your story is comedy you can also make a point out of how the characters fail to properly address the issue for laughs.
With Rarity and Pinkie though the bad decision is rather obvious to the readers, yet it is completely ignored by the story. The characters don't react in any meaningful way, neither is it exploited for comedy.
That makes it both a missed opportunity for a great plot point and also a bit problematic. If an author has characters behave badly but does never address this, it can easily be interpreted as the author supporting that kind of behaviour.
Just in case you read that last bit as an accusation, that is not the case. Despite my criticism I did also not downvote this story. I don't downvote unless a story is either painfully bad or promotes offending content, both of which definitely isn't the case here.
I'm simply trying to explain why people might have an issue with what you wrote.
6003499 But I did address it, and stuck with the character's personalities. Pinkie is excited, but also concerned when she realizes something is up, Rarity is incredibly dramatic when she realizes she screwed up, and Spike wouldn't hold a grudge to save his life. They reacted perfectly in character.
6003565 Rarity and Pinkie are both upset about Spike interpreting what they meant wrong. They never acknowledge that it might have been wrong to plan a family without consulting Spike, although they also affect his future.
While the outcome might be relatively similar, there is a huge difference here. The former can be solved and forgiven by explaining the issue. The later is a deep violation to Spikes role as a family member.
6003622 That actually wasn't a problem, because they both knew that he already wanted to be a father. In their heads, they were just helping.
6005394 Actually, the reason was that Rarity is also with Pinkie. The way making a baby with magic works randomizes the gender (it's a learned spell), and it was because Rarity and Spike were having a very hard time conceiving, since dragons and ponies have about a 1 in 20 chance of it working, so Pinkie wanted to help.
6005853
OK, I think I understand. So in laypony terms, there is no issue with Spike and Rarity having sex with each other, but the possibility of having an offspring is approximately 5%....but because of that learned impregnation spell, and having a willing partner like Pinkie, having an offspring with her is pretty much 100%--provided that both Rarity and Pinkie were in heat, correct? It's simply a matter of need. And Spike is still the father of the foal, just that Rarity is also kinda the father of the foal since technically she impregnated Pinkie. And thanks for letting me know that even though it was with two females, the randomization does offer the possibility of a son instead of the daughter that they all got.
It still seems kinda off to me, but re-reading it is making me feel better about it. After all, one could see this as a possible form of IVF between two mares, and I have to be honest: Knowing that Spike and Rarity are a couple in this story and still knows that Rarity plays around with Pinkie on the side and that he's more than cool with it made it loads more comfortable to see this.
6014815 You basically have the right idea, so I'll go with that.
Pinkie's not exactly "on the side" though. It's something called polyamory.
That was good confusing but good.
Honestly... this might be a basic misunderstanding with polyamory, but the way that Spike is not with Pinkie, and Rarity and Pinkie conceive without Spike... it doesn't seem like just saying "no, it's okay I still love you" is really enough to reassure him that he actually has a place in Rarity's heart as important as Pinkie does.
Just... the gut instinct is that this is primarily a Rarity/Pinkie, with Spike on the side, because of the way the pairings go and how they go behind his back.
6050147 I believe true polyagamy is meant to be mutliple marriages, if it was true. Spike should be married to Pinkie, i believe.
6069517 He's just dating Rarity, whereas Rarity is with both of them.
And that's how equestria was made.
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6099294 Is there room in your bunker for one more?