Epilogue - Night Mare Night
"How do I look, 'Tia?"
It was finally Night Mare Night, and Luna was more than ready to make her return. She had everything planned out - she would make a grand entrance, meet the citizens of Ponyville, and then pay Twilight Sparkle a visit at her library. Luna looked at herself in the mirror, examining the cloak. It wasn't anything overly spectacular, and was colored a fairly simple dark green. She had something in mind, however.
"It looks good on you, little sister. I'm sure you'll make quite the impression."
"Best part is, after I land, I'm going to make the cloak turn into bats! Oh, I'm so proud of that idea. It's so... so... festive!"
"Really now?" Celestia giggled and grinned as she looked over her sister. She had the guards, the chariot, and now her cloak would be turning into bats? It sounded decidedly silly, but Celestia still loved the idea of it all - Luna had always been much more creative than her. "I've got to say, Luna, you really do have all this planned out."
"Mhm! I've been planning this night for months now! I've got everything perfectly charted out, so that I make the best impression possible. I mean, if I got to be this popular in Canterlot just from standing up to some stuffy politicians, I can't wait to see what the citizens of Ponyville will think of me!"
"Oh, Luna! Before I forget, there's one last thing I need to tell you before you go." Celestia approached her younger sister with as serious of a look as she could muster, though it wasn't as if such a thing were difficult. "Ponyville places a lot of importance on tradition. When you visit, always be sure to use the royal 'we', 'thou', and 'thy'. Don't forget the Royal Canterlot Voice either!"
"But... won't that scare them or something? I mean, Twilight Sparkle never seems to use such language in any of the letters she's sent to me."
Celestia wrapped one foreleg around her sister's neck, pulling her closer. "That's because Twilight is from Canterlot, not from Ponyville. Of course she doesn't speak like that. And no matter what they tell you otherwise, keep using the 'we' and 'thou' and such - I became quite the laughing stock the first time I visited because I bought into that."
"...Really?"
"Mhm. I quickly grew accustomed to it. Don't worry, Luna, you'll do great."
Luna smiled and gave her sister a quick nuzzle before running off for her chariot. "Thanks for all the tips, 'Tia! I'll let you know how it goes!"
"Please do!" Celestia quietly made her way back to the throne, taking a seat upon it and sitting in silence. It wasn't until after several minutes had passed that one of her guards finally spoke up.
"...Er, your Majesty. I didn't think any of the ponies in Ponyville spoke like that?"
Celestia giggled and grinned. "They don't."
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'Hiatus' is now complete. I'll be putting up a bonus chapter in December, so don't fret just yet.
A very big thanks to everyone that has read, commented, and reviewed thus far. I couldn't have made it without any of you.
This...
Trollestia Is what i can think of, Great Job
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The ending was purposely written with Trollestia in mind. I simply couldn't pass up that opportunity.
I see it more as Celestia just having a bit of fun at her sister's expense. Luna will get over it.
An excellent end to and excellent tale. Bravo good sir. I only have one thing left to say.
*shakes fist at the sun* CELESTIAAAAAAAAAA!
Looking forward to your next story!
38902 so, Is this the end?
I always find it sad If a Story ends, If past sins would continue, i'd probably still Be reading, which Reminds me to Pick up the Fallout: Equestria Series Again...
So many good Stories, but so less time, but!
Weekend here i Come,(2 days still, Anyways)
Does it have to be over? Awwwwww
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This is, indeed, the end - for now anyways. I don't necessarily like to see it finished either, because "Oh man, I got featured!". But this fic was always intended to have a definite end, and I won't deny that simply because I like seeing myself in the featured box.
I'll likely be writing more about Luna at a later time. She is my favorite pony, after all.
38911 I personally don't mind too much, i will Move on, and after all, i have a Great deal of Stuff to read, Some shipfics which got featured, or were related, Anyways, waiting for MOAR
Well that was nice. Going into the favorites i think :)
"They don't." ...
i can so totally imagine that picture of celestia rolling on the floor laughing after that, great job writing this, i hope we'll see more stories from you
Troooooooooooollestiaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!
Congratulations on a complete, well written story!
Looking forward to read more of your work.
YES PERFECT ENDING
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Luna's revenge, detailed below:
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I love me some BarfQuestion.
a song for the end
FOOLY COOLY !
♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦
"Ride on Shooting Star",.
♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦ ♦
Slide of an orange reflects in the sky
Hanging the pride of a sponge
Spider
No need to hide
the premonition of life captured
it is like a colored dream
Ride on shooting star
I continued singing
like a shotgun with all my heart
A grunged hamster becomes more mature
and is accompanied by a lobster of revenge
Sniper
What do you say that
you can see in that framed world?
I want to touch it before you aim
Ride on shooting star
I'm looking for you and I'm having withdrawal symptoms
I lied to you
Ride on shooting star
I continued singing
like a shotgun with all my heart
39007
I have no idea what just happened.
39030 good then I have dun well
lol well that explains why luna sometimes gets her speech mixed up, good fanfic
Lowed the whole of the story and Celestia at the end.....
I liked this series. Very nice interludes. An interesting dimension to Celestia we see behind the scenes.
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Thank you. I certainly wish the show had a bit more of the relationship between Celestia and Luna, but until that happens, the fandom will have to compensate.
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Some folks are bound to figure it out faster than others. Still, I wanted a sufficient build-up to it, and I think I succeeded in that regard.
...XDDD Oh Trollestia. *giggles* I SO saw that coming. Still amusing though. >w<
You just got a stalker (watcher).
Alright, I was about to write a comment sooner, but always forgot about it, or at the end decided to safe my comment fort he last chapter you publish.
So here we are, last chapter finished with some Trollestia ^^
I must congratulate so far for writing such an entertaining story. You filled the plot hole left by the show quite thoroughly and brought us nearer to princess Luna. I especially liked her affection for art and such. She does feel much like Twilight in some ways, but I think it’s a good comparison. They do seem to be quite similar, even when you only now the show and haven’t read anything about the princess so far.
I was laughing the most when Luna got her new mane and it was close to valentines day. Seems that her lovers thought that the princess likes it rough and dirty, when I remember what was indicated to stand in the letters ^^ But you forgot to mention that her body was growing as well. I never had seen any mention about that, only her mane? She does look very different a year later. First she was a foal, cute, but not the eye catcher. In Luna eclipse she looked very adult, less to speak more “mature” than the mane six. Would not have hurt to mention that in your story ^^
The way to mixed it between diary, actions within the month and letters between Luna and Twilight loosened the story and made it easy to follow the plot while the action was going on. It was a “light” reading which could be understand very well even by foreign readers like me.
But there is one thing that bugs me :/
Your “main” plot I would say. Luna’s dreams.
It kept the reader attracted that even despite the “normal” life within the castle there was something mysterious and unsolved with Luna and you made a formidable use of the dream to draw attention and suspicion about what will happen next.
Well until the chapter Luna resolved the dream.
I was sitting on pins and needles while reading it and some paragraphs before it hit Luna it had hit me and I was going to spurt it out what I had discovered, eager to now what will happen with this new found wisdom!
You don’t know how disappointed I was to know that there will be nothing more about it :\
You build up tension about her dream over several Chapters, making it bigger and bigger and than.
SPLASH!
It exploded like a big water balloon and all it had done was make every ones face soaking wet and clueless. (copyright belongs to Hasbro!)
It’s hard to explain for me, but there’s something missing. You build it up, and it was resolved into … nothing? I don’t know what you could have made out of it, I’m not that good of an author to give some examples, but it let me feel quite “meh”
This is by far the only concern I had about your story. Everything else was perfectly fine for me and I liked to read it =:}
I’m eagerly waiting for your Christmas special and I hope I don’t miss it, when you start to publish your next story!
And well, if you don’t mind. A small chapter about the “day after Nightmare Night” when Luna confronts Celestia with her “good tips” would be nice *puppy eyes*
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"But you forgot to mention that her body was growing as well. I never had seen any mention about that, only her mane? She does look very different a year later." - One of the background artists that worked on the show actually stated that the Luna in "Friendship is Magic pt. 2" and "Luna Eclipsed" were really the same sizes. The only thing that had changed were the mane style and the coat color. Her body seemed a bit more slender to me, but I didn't feel that was really worth mentioning. Luna is still young, but by no means is she a foal - though she's still smaller than Celestia, she's certainly bigger than any of the other ponies in Ponyville (with the possible exception of Big Macintosh).
I'll admit that I probably could have handled the dream thing better, BUT even though it was a large part of the story, I didn't want it to be the entire focus of it. Yes, it was an important part, but the story was more or less about what Luna did during her year-long absence to keep herself occupied, not about what the dreams meant. As I explained for an earlier reader, Luna was less excited about the second meaning of the prophecy, and more excited about having simply solved her dreams.
I appreciate your comment, however. And unfortunately, the only bonus chapter you'll be getting will be the Christmas chapter - maybe.
39007 best confusing show ever ....eyebrows
MUHAHAHAHAHAHA
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The first chapter of the Applejack fic (and the story itself, of course) have been submitted to FiM Fiction. I just have to wait for them to show up on the site.
39413
You know what? Because you asked so nicely (and other folks seem to want to know what would happen), and because I'll likely need a break from my Applejack fic at some point, I think I may have another bonus chapter covering the aftermath of that.
39845
!
This could totally be an episode.
Trollestia is best Celestia quenerd.com.br/blog/wp-content/uploads/MINI-troll-face.png
First bonus chapter is complete and will go up later on. It's just something short and sweet, similar to the epilogue. Was still fun to write, though.
*LOL SONG*
TROLOLOLOL!
HAHAHAHA!
Lol I always knew Celestia put her up to that!
oh
that wasnt very nice but still funny
Oh Celestia, always the troll.
Now I see why? Prank.
what bout Discord?
*sigh*
why celestia, why?
HAHAHAHAHA nice Celestia.
Very good story, loved it in fact.
Celestia you're terrible.
And Trollestia strikes again!
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I was about to say the same. I don't think she would have said that if she realized how much it would have affected her night though, she only meant to have a bit of fun at Luna's expense.