Daniel Blaze is a human who’s has lost the few people he had close to his heart and has experienced nothing but pain and suffering for years. But all changed when he was brought to a world ruled by anthro ponies, and other mythical creatures.
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lol its out now actually just added the story
Read it and love it!
Looking forward to reading the new version.
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Will it be less porny than the old one? Because for me it was killing the whole storyline...
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And is it just re-edited the whole story?
Looking foward to read it.
The only error I saw in this story was that you put other human characters and new oc's.
But I can't wait to see the remastered version.
I'm looking forward to it. And keep up the good work!
Im interested :) It’s been a while.
This is a hilarious satire but fails miserably as a story meant to be taken seriously.
I understand that this story was probably written when you were a newer writer, and I see you suggesting that it’s getting work done. But editing a story like this only helps so much. It’s usually better to rip the guts out and re do the entire idea.
Unless this actually is satire or a parody. Because then with a bit of work you have me rolling.
I could point out every cliche you hit in the first chapter alone here but life is too short and I’m sure you heard it already. But I will point out a few:
-Bleeding heart protagonist
-Edge lord persona
-Scars
-The name “Daniel Blaze”
-Karate courtesy of old man grandpa
-Swords
-White hair, purple eyes, evil smirk
-The sword everyone’s talking about, specifically its make
My favorite line so far is “I got word my grandfather was injected with some kind of deadly poison which is fatal to the human body.”
As opposed to the other deadly poison that’s just mildly irritating to the human body?
Again, this works as a parody. I think Daniel is a hilarious Gary Stu. But let me try to guess where this story’s going to go:
Daniel finds himself in Equestria with a bunch of anthro ponies who don’t have a clue of who or what he is. He triggers at least one pony by just existing and being different, and this prompts said pony to attack him. But Daniel is such a great guy he forgives the attacker. Daniel continuously circles back to his horrible sad past and becomes depressed by it, but is reassured by the ponies because they’re cute and good guys and they make him feel better, only for his sour mood to come back 12 hours later. The ponies can’t get enough of him or even fall in love at first sight. They are amazed by his strength and fortitude and love to help him with his weaknesses- am I in the ballpark here? I could be wrong, but this is the type of fic feel I am getting.
In short: wish fulfillment, Gary Stu, hilarious story as a satire but not worth the read as anything else. I recommend you rethink the story and the characterization. Shake well with a beta for best results.
Huh a lot of stories are being redone lately. Well I hope to see it soon!
i'll be looking out for it i was fan of EHS form the start: so i know EHSR will be just as good