yeah I know vinyl's kinda rough but damn did she step on sunsets feelings...purposely. Then trying for the rebound....yeah heres a match to lite a fire in that empty skull.
Makes me think of the game Catherine. One life posed towards freedom and chaos, the other towards stability and control. Personally, I'd like to see both scenarios play out in a branching story-line sort of thing, but if I had to vote, being the Libertine I am, I'd vote Vinyl.
My honest opinion? I'd like to see both versions of the ending. One where he goes with Sunset and one where he goes with Vinyl.
Between the two, my choice would be Sunset. The story has been focusing on her as the main love interest with Vinyl playing third wheel mostly, just sort of springing up and taking over her role to make the triangle. Sunset on the other hand had the most actual character and relationship development with our main character.
So if you only make one ending, I'd prefer the Sunset ending. If you've got the inspiration though, I wouldn't mind seeing "what could have been" with either girl.
6439065 I personally agree with this one. Make two endings instead of just one.
Our "hero" would probably end up happy either way. Subset is obvious and I think that Vinyl might also be a real choice for her. Might settle her out a little bit but still has that freedom.
Now I really want Sunset to win! For the love of god make her win, I have been a Sunset Shimmer fan since the first movie so if you please LET HER *BEEP*WIN!!! No different endings, one ending ONE and that is you or me and whatever how you see it Sunset wins. Sunset Shimmer all the way!!!
This doesn't directly answer you question, but I don't think you should immediately follow this chapter up with the protagonist choosing between the two girls. Everything in the story so far casts Sunset in a sympathetic light: she's the sweet, steadfast friend with whom the protagonist stands the best chance of having a fulfilling relationship. She's made personal sacrifices to in order to be with him - even if it's just to be his friend, and even as she desires so much more. Her seriousness reins in the worst parts of his personality - to admittedly limited results, but it's due more to his misinterpretation of her feelings towards him than anything else. Now that's out of the way, there's a lot of potential to see the protagonist grow as a person.
Vinyl, in contrast, would likely drag the protagonist down with her in a spiral of self-destructiveness (as Sunset notes). The character's recklessness and irresponsibility have driven her relationship with the protagonist throughout the story because they complement those very same parts of his personality. While we've seen glimpses of Vinyl's emotional vulnerability, it hasn't been explored that thoroughly. Yes, she could use a friend, and her approach to forming relationships seem to always involve alcohol, sex and/or violence. That doesn't seem healthy. So far she's improved enough to be in a mildly antagonistic friendship with Sunset but that isn't enough to make most people root for her. Her relationship with the protagonist has still been a murkily defined friends with benefits deal that she chooses to see as a romance, and her victory in the love triangle would come at a cost most readers would see as unreasonable.
Jumping right to an either-or decision at this point in the story doesn't seem like a particularly interesting decision because there's little reason to agonize over it. My opinion is that you should have the characters make amends, fleshing them out while building up a romance over the course of several chapters. I think if you asked this question again at that point, you'd get more interesting and varied answers.
This is getting annoying. Even ignoring how utterly stupid the main character is (usually whenever it's most convenient for the story), this last chapter was just... I mean, can you please find a characterization for Vinyl and actually stick with it? She's become less of a character and more of a plot device, doing whatever needs to be done to move the story forward, even if it doesn't make sense. And the threesome thing? She thought he was serious? Sunset didn't even try to get an explanation? That didn't sound completely stupid to her?
At this point, I don't think I care who ends up together. By this point, the characters are practically one-dimensional with personalities that change as the story needs them to, with a lot of the story only being possible due to the main character having a massive idiot ball. Not only that, but pretty much none of the characters are even likable anymore due to all the crap they've been doing. If this story wants the reader to absolutely hate all the characters involved by making them act like horrible people, then why would it expect the readers to care about what happens to them?
I think what disappoints me is that you are clearly a good writer. The writing quality is very good with little to no errors being found, and the details and descriptions are very, very well done. Even the emotions and characterization are amazing when the story manages to keep it consistent long enough. Not to mention the way it shows instead of tells. I feel like a lot of what made me love this story was lost due to forced conflict and drama.
>She sees you and drops her eyes to the floor, not wanting to meet your gaze. "Sunset, about last night..." you open your mouth, but the myriad of dialogue you want to let out catches in your throat. Kiss her!
>Her flat tone feels like ice spiking through your heart. The lightly smeared mascara underneath the new layer tells you she didn't take last night too well, and only makes you feel worse. Anon, fuck you.
>With a new found purpose, you walk back home. You know you have to sort this out with Sunset, alone. I'm afraid he will turn full idiot now.
>or whose personality is so god-awful that I can't even hold onto one set of friends for longer than six months. Should I go on?" that I can't? I think that I is a mistake, or something.
>"Oh, shut the fuck up. At least I have a boyfriend." Oh, fuck.
>Sunset doesn't resist at all once she feels your lips connect with hers again and your arms around you. Around her
>leaving Sunset in nothing but her socks and little lacy choker that came with the maid outfit Korra, pls
>Vinyl moves aside, presenting you Sunset, legs spread and ready to go. Good work, DJ-pon3.
>The three of you bask in the afterglow for a few minutes, simply letting the memory of your first time together sink in. First, not the last.
>"Yeah, he promised me that he'd let us out of our contracts if I could get you into a threesome with us." Vinyl looks over to meet Sunset's suddenly furious gaze and raises an eyebrow. "What? I just saved you from a few more weeks of maid duty. You're welcome." Yes, no, maybe, I don't know. Fuck. That's true. Nicely done!
>Sunset's glare turns from Vinyl to you. As soon as you meet her eyes, you know you fucked up. Tears well up at the edge of her vision, and her expression is nothing but pure anger and betrayal. AHAHAHAHA! Classic Anon!
>"Oh yeah? What was it then? One good fuck before you ruin your life with her?!" Sunset is shaking she's so mad. She looks between you and Vinyl, then slaps away your outstretched hand. "Don't fucking touch me." Sunset finally closes her eyes and lets out the first wave of a sob. She looks away and tries to contain herself, but to no avail. "I can't believe I just did that..." she whispers to herself as she gathers up her clothes and runs out of your room, slamming the door behind her. Why aren't you hugging her yet? Why aren't you confirming that you love her? Why are you that a fuss, Anon?
>"Oh, fucking stop," she says, gritting her teeth. "Ever since high school you've done nothing but waste your life with girls like her, doing nothing but living in the moment while other girls who were much better for you waited, and waited." Yeah, Anon! Fuck you!
>"I love you, you fucking idiot," Sunset lets out, followed by a whimpering sob as she continues to cry even harder. "I have ever since high school." >You don't even know what to do. You just stand there, dumbfounded. You know you can't hug her, she'd just push you away. There are no words that could fix this right now. >"I loved you so much that even after we graduated I couldn't stand the thought of moving off away from you. I followed you to that shitty community college, scared that if I ever actually said anything, you might push me away, think of me as just another one of the girls..." Sunset crosses her arms and puts one of her hands up to her face, the confession tearing her apart inside after what just happened. I don't like how did you turn Anon into a blink idiot. Seriously, making Anon a dip shit doesn't taste well.
>That was it. That's what broke you. You feel the tears streaming down your own cheeks now. The thought of your best friend like this is tearing you apart on the inside, and there's literally nothing you can do right now to help her. You can't even move anymore. Your mouth won't even open to say anything. I can't stand that pussy. He could do anything, so he did nothing. Holy, pls.
>"Wh... I... I just remembered, I have to go do a... a thing," she says, her words choking up in her throat. >Vinyl quickly and silently gathers up her clothes, puts them on, and heads out the door without a word. Fuck you, Anon.
> Author's Note: >Who's it gonna be, boys and girls? Soarin. And fuck you for making Anon suck a pussy.
Man, I wish I was this guy's neighbor. After hearing the moans of multiple girls, I would've been like, "Wow! This dude is getting it DONE in there! We gotta be friends so he can tell me shit!" But, then I hear some loud emotional arguments and shit and go like, "What the fuck happened in there? It went from sex to drama? Damn, this guy got a story I don't want to be apart of. Back to my PS4." :D
Sunset. Definitely Sunset.
Well fuck. Pull off some major plot twist or something. Some old friend comes into his life and he falls in love with her instead, that'd get me.
I just hope he ends up with Sunset.
Sunset, without a doubt.
Sunset Shimmer would be preferable, but whomever you feel like putting us with is ultimately up to you.
i love Vinyl, I really do, but its gotta be Sunset.
Guessing this would be the same as flipping a coin and guessing, I think Sunset though, but I've been wrong before.
woot new chapter :D :D :D :3 I noticed others saying who they want for the final paring and personally i would say both
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But really its all up to you holy :) hoping for more :3 good luck with your writing :D
120% Sunset
yeah I know vinyl's kinda rough but damn did she step on sunsets feelings...purposely. Then trying for the rebound....yeah heres a match to lite a fire in that empty skull.
I vote for Sunset. I got to say that the threesome was hot as hell, but Vinyl really screwed it up by opening her mouth.
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Makes me think of the game Catherine. One life posed towards freedom and chaos, the other towards stability and control. Personally, I'd like to see both scenarios play out in a branching story-line sort of thing, but if I had to vote, being the Libertine I am, I'd vote Vinyl.
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...neither?
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Vinyl. Only because Scratchie's my fav.
I'd be neutral otherwise.
Although a harem would be nice for our protagonist...
People hav to choose only one? Why would you do this to us....
Sunset. No contest.
My honest opinion? I'd like to see both versions of the ending. One where he goes with Sunset and one where he goes with Vinyl.
Between the two, my choice would be Sunset. The story has been focusing on her as the main love interest with Vinyl playing third wheel mostly, just sort of springing up and taking over her role to make the triangle. Sunset on the other hand had the most actual character and relationship development with our main character.
So if you only make one ending, I'd prefer the Sunset ending. If you've got the inspiration though, I wouldn't mind seeing "what could have been" with either girl.
Has to be sunset. Vinyl bangs a drunk guy twice and assumes that's dating? Then ruins any chance he had with sunset. Doesn't deserve him.
Vinyl I love you, but Sunset has my vote here
Well, the story up to this point has been written in a way that pretty much points to Sunset...
And they do say bros before hoes, and, well, Sunset is (was?) basically that, unless upgrading her status voids her of her previous one.
I could see the story going Vinyl though, from a purely backstory-based view. Just another one of those decisions to throw into the pile.
Just write both (separately).
Sunset but why not both?
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The answer is clearly obvious. Do the true neutral thing and take out a loan, bet on a women's wrestling match, and go to space.
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Sunset Shimmer is the girl he need.
hrmmm tricky id say sunset
6439065 I personally agree with this one. Make two endings instead of just one.
Our "hero" would probably end up happy either way. Subset is obvious and I think that Vinyl might also be a real choice for her. Might settle her out a little bit but still has that freedom.
Now I really want Sunset to win! For the love of god make her win, I have been a Sunset Shimmer fan since the first movie so if you please LET HER *BEEP*WIN!!! No different endings, one ending ONE and that is you or me and whatever how you see it Sunset wins. Sunset Shimmer all the way!!!
I sau Sunset
Sunset. With Vinyl there really isn't much of a relationship.
Sunset. End of discussion.
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This doesn't directly answer you question, but I don't think you should immediately follow this chapter up with the protagonist choosing between the two girls.
Everything in the story so far casts Sunset in a sympathetic light: she's the sweet, steadfast friend with whom the protagonist stands the best chance of having a fulfilling relationship. She's made personal sacrifices to in order to be with him - even if it's just to be his friend, and even as she desires so much more. Her seriousness reins in the worst parts of his personality - to admittedly limited results, but it's due more to his misinterpretation of her feelings towards him than anything else. Now that's out of the way, there's a lot of potential to see the protagonist grow as a person.
Vinyl, in contrast, would likely drag the protagonist down with her in a spiral of self-destructiveness (as Sunset notes). The character's recklessness and irresponsibility have driven her relationship with the protagonist throughout the story because they complement those very same parts of his personality. While we've seen glimpses of Vinyl's emotional vulnerability, it hasn't been explored that thoroughly. Yes, she could use a friend, and her approach to forming relationships seem to always involve alcohol, sex and/or violence. That doesn't seem healthy. So far she's improved enough to be in a mildly antagonistic friendship with Sunset but that isn't enough to make most people root for her. Her relationship with the protagonist has still been a murkily defined friends with benefits deal that she chooses to see as a romance, and her victory in the love triangle would come at a cost most readers would see as unreasonable.
Jumping right to an either-or decision at this point in the story doesn't seem like a particularly interesting decision because there's little reason to agonize over it. My opinion is that you should have the characters make amends, fleshing them out while building up a romance over the course of several chapters. I think if you asked this question again at that point, you'd get more interesting and varied answers.
Three routes. One for Vinyl, one for Sunset, and one for both of them. Sunset didn't seem to mind having Vinyl back there during sexy times.
Besides, if anime has taught me anything, it's that there is always a harem route.
CHASE Sunset, CHASE Vinyl or Do Nothing. Wait, I've been playing too much Until Dawn.
*Selects Sunset*
As much as I like Vinyl, Sunset is the best option.
Sunset's my choice, here.
Sunset is my choice
I am starting to feel bad for Vinyl, she seemed so sad
Vinyl scratch fer da win boys
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This is getting annoying. Even ignoring how utterly stupid the main character is (usually whenever it's most convenient for the story), this last chapter was just... I mean, can you please find a characterization for Vinyl and actually stick with it? She's become less of a character and more of a plot device, doing whatever needs to be done to move the story forward, even if it doesn't make sense. And the threesome thing? She thought he was serious? Sunset didn't even try to get an explanation? That didn't sound completely stupid to her?
At this point, I don't think I care who ends up together. By this point, the characters are practically one-dimensional with personalities that change as the story needs them to, with a lot of the story only being possible due to the main character having a massive idiot ball. Not only that, but pretty much none of the characters are even likable anymore due to all the crap they've been doing. If this story wants the reader to absolutely hate all the characters involved by making them act like horrible people, then why would it expect the readers to care about what happens to them?
I think what disappoints me is that you are clearly a good writer. The writing quality is very good with little to no errors being found, and the details and descriptions are very, very well done. Even the emotions and characterization are amazing when the story manages to keep it consistent long enough. Not to mention the way it shows instead of tells. I feel like a lot of what made me love this story was lost due to forced conflict and drama.
>She sees you and drops her eyes to the floor, not wanting to meet your gaze. "Sunset, about last night..." you open your mouth, but the myriad of dialogue you want to let out catches in your throat.
Kiss her!
>Her flat tone feels like ice spiking through your heart. The lightly smeared mascara underneath the new layer tells you she didn't take last night too well, and only makes you feel worse.
Anon, fuck you.
>With a new found purpose, you walk back home. You know you have to sort this out with Sunset, alone.
I'm afraid he will turn full idiot now.
>or whose personality is so god-awful that I can't even hold onto one set of friends for longer than six months. Should I go on?"
that I can't?
I think that I is a mistake, or something.
>"Oh, shut the fuck up. At least I have a boyfriend."
Oh, fuck.
>Sunset doesn't resist at all once she feels your lips connect with hers again and your arms around you.
Around her
>leaving Sunset in nothing but her socks and little lacy choker that came with the maid outfit
Korra, pls
>Vinyl moves aside, presenting you Sunset, legs spread and ready to go.
Good work, DJ-pon3.
>You can hear an audible gulp as you slip out of Vinyl's mouth.
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>The three of you bask in the afterglow for a few minutes, simply letting the memory of your first time together sink in.
First, not the last.
>"Yeah, he promised me that he'd let us out of our contracts if I could get you into a threesome with us." Vinyl looks over to meet Sunset's suddenly furious gaze and raises an eyebrow. "What? I just saved you from a few more weeks of maid duty. You're welcome."
Yes, no, maybe, I don't know. Fuck. That's true. Nicely done!
>Sunset's glare turns from Vinyl to you. As soon as you meet her eyes, you know you fucked up. Tears well up at the edge of her vision, and her expression is nothing but pure anger and betrayal.
AHAHAHAHA! Classic Anon!
>"Oh yeah? What was it then? One good fuck before you ruin your life with her?!" Sunset is shaking she's so mad. She looks between you and Vinyl, then slaps away your outstretched hand. "Don't fucking touch me." Sunset finally closes her eyes and lets out the first wave of a sob. She looks away and tries to contain herself, but to no avail. "I can't believe I just did that..." she whispers to herself as she gathers up her clothes and runs out of your room, slamming the door behind her.
Why aren't you hugging her yet? Why aren't you confirming that you love her? Why are you that a fuss, Anon?
>"Oh, fucking stop," she says, gritting her teeth. "Ever since high school you've done nothing but waste your life with girls like her, doing nothing but living in the moment while other girls who were much better for you waited, and waited."
Yeah, Anon! Fuck you!
>"I love you, you fucking idiot," Sunset lets out, followed by a whimpering sob as she continues to cry even harder. "I have ever since high school."
>You don't even know what to do. You just stand there, dumbfounded. You know you can't hug her, she'd just push you away. There are no words that could fix this right now.
>"I loved you so much that even after we graduated I couldn't stand the thought of moving off away from you. I followed you to that shitty community college, scared that if I ever actually said anything, you might push me away, think of me as just another one of the girls..." Sunset crosses her arms and puts one of her hands up to her face, the confession tearing her apart inside after what just happened.
I don't like how did you turn Anon into a blink idiot. Seriously, making Anon a dip shit doesn't taste well.
>That was it. That's what broke you. You feel the tears streaming down your own cheeks now. The thought of your best friend like this is tearing you apart on the inside, and there's literally nothing you can do right now to help her. You can't even move anymore. Your mouth won't even open to say anything.
I can't stand that pussy. He could do anything, so he did nothing. Holy, pls.
>"Wh... I... I just remembered, I have to go do a... a thing," she says, her words choking up in her throat.
>Vinyl quickly and silently gathers up her clothes, puts them on, and heads out the door without a word.
Fuck you, Anon.
> Author's Note:
>Who's it gonna be, boys and girls?
Soarin. And fuck you for making Anon suck a pussy.
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Man oh man, the heartbreak, the tension....!
Man, I wish I was this guy's neighbor. After hearing the moans of multiple girls, I would've been like, "Wow! This dude is getting it DONE in there! We gotta be friends so he can tell me shit!" But, then I hear some loud emotional arguments and shit and go like, "What the fuck happened in there? It went from sex to drama? Damn, this guy got a story I don't want to be apart of. Back to my PS4." :D