You say as it it was a chore for Luna to clean the desk; if anything, that fucking in the principal's office was more of a voyeur's dream video. I believed that Luna and Celestia not just reviewed the tape, but that they pretty much had sex with each other during the video (Princest, anyone??). I mean it took them three days between Sunset and Adiago's incident and Princess Celestia berating them for it.
Anticlimax indeed. Not bad, but not that good either. An innocent bit of clop, and a bit more tame than I was expecting. Still, some of your descriptive elements and dialogue was well-done. If you were to devote yourself to a more meaningful story with better attention paid to pacing and characterization, it'd be an instant hit.
This is awesome. All so awesome. I like how they don't even really get in trouble either. As much as I would've said 'leave it here with Principal Celestia,' I really did like the confirmation in the final chapter about there being no audio.
“ AHEM !” Celestia had placed her hands on her hips, glaring them both down. “Now, this lover’s quarrel is very cute but I believe you both owe Vice-Principal Luna an apology. Because she was the one who cleaned up after your mess and was the unfortunate one to… to had… ahem . Let us just say someone had to review the recording to see what had happened here.”
Okay, that ending was hilarious!
Now I'm imagining a sequel featuring Twilight vs. Trixie.
...Oh and by the way, you're up to about 2 million hits on Pornhub.
Luna is scarred for life
So much for the threesome.
Still a good ending.
OMG THE ENDING <3
loved this, great job all around
At least it wasn't view on the mini TV screen on all the rooms in Canterlot High.
I feel really bad for Luna
Luna is scarred for life.
(Unikitty voice) Embarrassing!
(in Unikitty voice) Embarrassing!
Celestia probably is telling them that because Luna not only had to clean it up, but she also had to watch it too. The whole damn thing.
*Gets up*
Peace.
5661811 Peace.
Oh God almighty, thanks for this 849 words of hilariousness!
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You say as it it was a chore for Luna to clean the desk; if anything, that fucking in the principal's office was more of a voyeur's dream video. I believed that Luna and Celestia not just reviewed the tape, but that they pretty much had sex with each other during the video (Princest, anyone??). I mean it took them three days between Sunset and Adiago's incident and Princess Celestia berating them for it.
5677938 .... fuck. You gave me an idea.
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Yes...
Here we go again!
5678412 I FUCKING HATE YOU.
But no seriously, I love you. But.... really?! REALLY?! Fucking bullshit.
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Love you too bae.
OK, now that you two have stopped making out, I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU ENDED IT WITHOUT SUNSET CALLING IN THE DEAL!
bacon?
*Snort*
I love it when a clop end in comedy.
Anticlimax indeed. Not bad, but not that good either. An innocent bit of clop, and a bit more tame than I was expecting. Still, some of your descriptive elements and dialogue was well-done. If you were to devote yourself to a more meaningful story with better attention paid to pacing and characterization, it'd be an instant hit.
At the end of the day? 7/10
Haha! Great ending XD Made me laugh. :3
This is awesome. All so awesome. I like how they don't even really get in trouble either.
As much as I would've said 'leave it here with Principal Celestia,' I really did like the confirmation in the final chapter about there being no audio.
What is with girl on girl. Really. NEED MORE PORN. it is great, by the way.
Sequel?
Give that girl an award she did not deserve that.