Good little slice of life chapter! I know it gave you issues, but it turned out pretty well in the end. Stuff like this makes the clop more meaningful when it finally does happen. I'll be interested to see what finally happens with Lily, too.
Edit: Not only would it be hack writing, but nonsensical to say the least. Ponies aren't a suspicious race, but a conservative one. They are also infinitely curious. She's uneasy at the onset for what it might mean down the road, but she sees magic everyday. She'll be fine.
6044773 Rose is a bit concerned with the social impact such technology might bring, but has no reason to fear technology itself which is just another form of magic. She's somewhat unreliable as a narrator here, because she can't pin down her exact feelings. One thing she can certainly get behind at the end of the day is Richard whom she cares about deeply.
Huzzahs! Finally caught up! Really enjoying it so far. It's actually the first story like this I've read that's from a pony's first person perspective and I do enjoy the conflicts you've created in Rose that we really would've missed out on had it been third person or from Richard's first person. Also caught the nods to my own story in there, made me grin. And now comes the torturous wait for the next installment. Woe.
6102443 You're in luck! I'm writing the last scene for chapter ten right now. I'm going to have it proofread and edited once it done, and it shouldn't be more than a week before it goes live.
I haven't actually read a story like this either and that was a big factor in me writing it the way I did. I like the idea of ponies reacting to a world with humans in it waaay more than having to do the humans react to being in a world of ponies thing again.
There was even a light inside the chamber when you opened the door to let you see everything in the dark. That seemed unnecessary to me, is it keeping everything lit when I’m not looking at it? I closed the door and opened it back up quickly.
I was really hoping Richard met Carrot Top. I can already see the hilarity that could bring. Ah well, story's not over yet
6044773 Just imagine what those old timer humans must have thought about computers and that crazy thing called the internet!
Old man: How do I get this consarned contraption to turn on!?
Grandkid: You push this button here, Gramps! *pushes button*
Old man: Blasted technology! Why can't they just put a light switch on it instead! Now what is this 'Netscape Navigator' doo-hicky thingamajig? *Clicks Icon* Search bar? I know where the bars are, I don't need to search for them! Bah! I grew up without this technology crap and I'm perfectly fine without it! Rasslefrazzin' *mumbling*
Keep'em coming! Great chapter!
Great chapter! I like these little moments between the characters more than clop to be honest. Makes them feel more real.
6037536 There's a little bit more clop left in this thing, but character interaction is what I'm going for now. Glad you enjoyed it!
6037522 Thanks!
Good little slice of life chapter! I know it gave you issues, but it turned out pretty well in the end. Stuff like this makes the clop more meaningful when it finally does happen. I'll be interested to see what finally happens with Lily, too.
foal plays with a mobile hahaha
i want a chapter with rose having a tech nightmare ?
6037883 We're all in for quite a ride.
6039175 Not in this story I'm afraid. Would be kind of cute to see Richard playing kindergarten cop though.
6039489 I'm glad you approve good sir!
Edit: Not only would it be hack writing, but nonsensical to say the least. Ponies aren't a suspicious race, but a conservative one. They are also infinitely curious. She's uneasy at the onset for what it might mean down the road, but she sees magic everyday. She'll be fine.
6044773 Rose is a bit concerned with the social impact such technology might bring, but has no reason to fear technology itself which is just another form of magic. She's somewhat unreliable as a narrator here, because she can't pin down her exact feelings. One thing she can certainly get behind at the end of the day is Richard whom she cares about deeply.
Glad you're enjoying the story.
Huzzahs! Finally caught up! Really enjoying it so far. It's actually the first story like this I've read that's from a pony's first person perspective and I do enjoy the conflicts you've created in Rose that we really would've missed out on had it been third person or from Richard's first person. Also caught the nods to my own story in there, made me grin. And now comes the torturous wait for the next installment. Woe.
6102443 You're in luck! I'm writing the last scene for chapter ten right now. I'm going to have it proofread and edited once it done, and it shouldn't be more than a week before it goes live.
I haven't actually read a story like this either and that was a big factor in me writing it the way I did. I like the idea of ponies reacting to a world with humans in it waaay more than having to do the humans react to being in a world of ponies thing again.
I was really hoping Richard met Carrot Top. I can already see the hilarity that could bring.
Ah well, story's not over yet
6044773 Just imagine what those old timer humans must have thought about computers and that crazy thing called the internet!
Old man: How do I get this consarned contraption to turn on!?
Grandkid: You push this button here, Gramps! *pushes button*
Old man: Blasted technology! Why can't they just put a light switch on it instead! Now what is this 'Netscape Navigator' doo-hicky thingamajig? *Clicks Icon* Search bar? I know where the bars are, I don't need to search for them! Bah! I grew up without this technology crap and I'm perfectly fine without it! Rasslefrazzin' *mumbling*
Can we get a shower first? I don’t like to go hunting when I stink. I prefer my mare's hot and sweaty.