I like this fic a lot.

It's a nice idea, but you need to work on pacing and grammar a little bit. Also I don't think Canterlot and Ponyville are quite that close together =p

curving her anger

That should be *curbing* her anger.

Also, I recommend a chiropractor and new massage chairs to help all the backaches from the Alphabet Breast Brigade.

Doesn't dash deserve a pardon for everything she has done for equestria such as saving celestia from nightmare moon, defeating discord, and so on.

Why the fuck does everyone have rediculous sized tits? Really, Twilight is the closest to having normal ones, and DD aren't that common. Besides that, the grammar was very poor, and the dialogue was bad.

no offense, but i feel that gilda let dash off the hook way to easily. none of the crap that went down would have happened if she hadn't been so eager to beat up her old friend.

5502087 First of all, I'm a guy, you don't need to explain to me why boobs make my dick hard. Second, there's a difference between "large breasts" and "I'm fucking twelve years old, so I think the only tits worth looking at are huge". Seriously, Celestia has fucking L cups in this! How the fuck can she stand up straight? It defies logic how any of the women in this get anything done with beach ball sized boobs in the way.

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Oh and by Twilight's "normal sized tits" I assume you understand that it's practically agreed upon that she's flat-chested.

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white knight much

oh my such bravery, this man must like small titties oh i cannot resist his sexy charms, if he doesn't like huge titties then he absolutely must be a nice guy

Mm, perhaps a prereader would help. I really wanna like this since it's going to be one of the few Gilda fics where she isn't portrayed as Hitler and gets raped until she cries, but the typos, pacing, and just random bits of information that don't matter are making it hard. Hope to see its continuation though; you've got a good thing going, friend.

5502167 I'm not calling you twelve, I'm calling the author twelve.

5502520 I'm not white knighting, I'm pointing out how the author used unbelievable sizes to the point of it being stupid.

The grammer is bad yes but maybe english isnt this authors first language. Or perhaps they are writing this from a phone like this here comic. Anyway i like the idea although the breast sizes can be said with a comparison to make it more fun. Also Gilda stories are few especially with her apologizing so yay :flutteryay:

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One thing answers all your questions regarding everything this fic is bothering you with. So Celly's boobs defy logic? The answer?

I am serious. Magic does a lot.

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Grammar wasn't that bad, yes some errors but its more of... Very simple grammar, very little "detail explainin"

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Magic man, that's all there is to say

I couldn't make it. I can't take a story seriously when you just start spouting off about cup sizes of impossible nature like a machine gun.

5506749 well I dont know about you but i had to look up those sizes... i had never seen and therefor never heard of a G cup...

http://www.wizardofbras.com/cupsizechart.aspx

some of the letters very on what size they represent depending on where in the world you are it seems...

5506749 well I dont know about you but i had to look up those sizes... i had never seen and therefor never heard of a G cup...

http://www.wizardofbras.com/cupsizechart.aspx

some of the letters very on what size they represent depending on where in the world you are it seems...

Why do you keep adding weird and unnecessary capital letters to the ponies' name ?

FlutterShy ? AppleJack ? ...It's an universally known thing that those 2 have a '1 word name', with only 1 capital letter at the beginning.

I like the premise (as well as the picture) of this fic. You do need to find a new editor though. Example:

"Mrs. Cake said not until the next three weeks." said Pinkie as she was cleaning the countertop. She was wearing her usual get up with a yellow shirt and blue shirt.

First, it should be "Mrs. Cake said for at least the next three weeks.", since Pinkie was asked how long will Mr. Cake be out of commission.
Second, is Pinkie wearing a yellow shirt with blue shorts, a yellow shirt with a blue skirt, a yellow skirt with a blue shirt, or yellow shorts with a blue shirt?

Mother of God! Every girls tits sound huge!

5502698 Yeah don't feel bad, some people have this Idea of sexy and that Idea is what alienates perfectly good women don't let these damn trolls get to ya' heck I saw the woman with the biggest natural breast in the world...literally, get a size reduction just because it fucking hurt

I'm loving this fic so far keep it up.

I request MOAR please

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You call people trolls because they have different sexual preferences in their fantasy characters than you do. You and that idiot get defensive because people don't like YOUR sexual preferences in fictional characters, which said idiot practically attacked them with and shoved down their throats.

Do you see the problem here? "Gawd, I hate the body proportions you like! I am obviously 100% right by universal law." Then "Those guys don't like the same body proportions I like!? THEY'RE TROLLS!"

So by your own words, argument, inferences and meaning - you are a troll, and so is Frizzy. Congratulations.

On top of that, never try to make it sound like people who enjoy extremely busty or over-proportioned fictional characters are somehow hurting real women. That's feminazi propaganda and absolutely retarded. That inability to separate fiction from reality is a defining trait of insanity and a qualifying symptom of Schizotypal disorder.

You also don't compare a fictional character's physical issues or lack thereof to real people unless the story calls for it. This is a sexual fantasy story. Do YOU think it's sexy that people groan and complain about their bodies and bitch all day? I'm sure that's someone fetish, but I'm willing to bet it isn't yours! Head out of your ass, please.

5655515 Geez it's been a while since I got a comment and it on a fic I commented a while back so forgive me if I sound a little strange considering It gonna take some talking to remember all of the logic I used here, so lets start with the obvious claim here, your saying by backing a guy up on the fact that he has a decent reason for saying the things he's saying, which he says in defense of reasons that were attacked earlier in the comment section might I add, you feel the need to attack us both? You seem to forget that the underlying argument is that started this was a similar name calling mainly the whole white knighting thing which was oh he's white knighting because he says those breast are unrealistic and I'm saying of course they're unrealistic they are extremely painful I been actually called out by sister at one point because I made a joke about big boobs. And you did notice that I never said anything about what Idea of beauty is? That actually was because to each they're own. I personally think my fetishes are crazy in of themselves. But that doesn't stop me from enjoying them. Pay attention to how the argument is progressing darn it and stop bringing the weird shit like schizophrenia just because someone is making a point about how unskilled an argument is presented.

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Seriously? This whole thing started because of someone not Frizzy? I'm going to try and enlighten you just once.

Why the fuck does everyone have rediculous sized tits? Really, Twilight is the closest to having normal ones, and DD aren't that common. Besides that, the grammar was very poor, and the dialogue was bad.

This was Frizzy's post. It was an asinine piece of shit that rammed his personal opinion down everyone else's throats. He is obviously not the intended audience for this story, so he should have left without saying anything. The rest of the intended audience likely doesn't care or enjoys such proportions. So that's like walking into the bar of a sports team's hometown and then loudly proclaiming said team to be shit: It's obviously offensive to the people there, and didn't need to be said! Also, it deserves whatever backlash it generates since anyone who isn't an idiot would have not done that.

So no, he didn't make any 'valid points' that he was then attacked for like some helpless victim. His entire post was offensive and directly insulting. He earned whatever animosity came his way. If you can't see that, then you're one of those idiots who disregards, justifies, or ignores anything that doesn't match how they -want- to see reality, and my point about insanity still stands. It was also Schizotypal and it was right there in the post I don't know how you got that wrong.

Yeah don't feel bad, some people have this Idea of sexy and that Idea is what alienates perfectly good women

As for the rest of your response, this is what I was referring to. I also don't know how you don't understand that. Alienates perfectly good women my ass, this is another point in the insanity column. Don't even get me started on how much sexist inference and hypocrisy is in this one line.

5658196 Yeah and people like you ganged up on him because he had an opinion you did not like. Honestly I really don't care if what the argument is about at this point. He's allowed his opinions and allowed to state if something is ridiculous. It got out of hand because people took offense to what he had to say and went all berserk trying to say they don't respect his opinion. Also schizophrenia...again you can only take that insult to far when the guy pretty much telling everyone else that the type of thinking, "bigger boobs are better." is not okay, is actually Autistic. Your claim that his original comment is sexist and up in pretty much everyone else's face ruins the story in the comments section. On top of that your claiming that my original comment is a point is pretty hypocritical, you missed the point, this was never about body image or whatever, it was about people like you dealing with someone elses criticisms without it turning into a massive attack on someone else.

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Thank you for proving my point. You are an absolute failure, and a hopeless case. You refuse to use common sense and logic, but I suspect you think that you are. You can't even understand what I was talking about in reference to his post and what I was talking about in reference to YOUR post, and you completely got them mixed up. At this point I question if you even understand what it is your words mean and what you've been getting across. If that is the case, I offer my apologies - I didn't realize I was dealing with someone lacking relatively basic levels of comprehension.
If not, you go on demanding that everything be only the way you see it, it won't change reality. Au revoir.

I loved this story so far it wassweet andfunny.I can't wait to see what happens next.

The issue with the cup size thing could have been avoided if the author chose to give visual representations rather than just random bra sizes. If Rainbowdash has a pair of oranges on her chest while Pinkie has a couple of basket balls and Celestia is trotting around with swollen pumpkins in her bra than the audience is able to actually visualize what size each character is. Aside from that and grammar the story has potential to combine some of everybody's favorite fetishes and I for one look forward to seeing if this develops well or not.

CELESTIA IS A PEDOPHILE.

plz, update soon

When will the next chapter be released?

5758803 still grounded so dont have my laptop

5785783 when will you not be grounded then?

"Her short brown flowed in the wind"
Her short brown what?

"but she was close to outclass most stallions when it comes to flying"
Did you mean close enough?

This cup size thing is getting out of hand.

"Well I'm sorry he ad to get sick like that."
Probably mean had

"she seamed to dodge all of them."
You should use seem instead of seam.

There's a lot more I didn't put here.

5785783 grounded for what?

when is a next chapter going to been?

hope the next chapter comes soon i want to see what happens to those two

LIVE DAMNIT! LIVE!

Very Interesting, I wonder what will happen next.

are you doing make more chapter on other story?

5658196 okay, 1: uncalled for attitude dude
And 2: he's right about the unrealistic cup sizes and bad grammar... it gave me a damn headache just trying to read the first paragraph.

Look, before starting shit, look at the facts. This story has very bad grammar, regardless of authors native language, editor, prereader, or any other factors. Another thing: I understand the cup sizes portrayed are fetish material; and while I enjoy normal; this is fine, for what it is.

I enjoy the main overlaying theme of the story, but it needs to be revised regardless of what anyone's opinion is