Chaos. Order. Two opposing forces that cannot exist in harmony, yet must exist for balance to be possible. A delicate balance. One that should never be interuppted. Especially by those two forces spawning offspring...Oops, too late...
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XD I read it before you even told me to this time. And it's really good btw XD Oh, and I finally got the first comment on a chapter :p
This chapter was great. Daybreak's scene with Gummy was funny and the way Scoots oogle him in his home made me laugh. Great chapter.
Well.
This is...
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THIS IS F**KEN GREAT!
Ok, now seriously, this is a great read. You have perfect grammar (to me), I mean unless I really tried to find grammatical errors, I didn't see any. (Probably cause I read this whole story in one go until it was midnight... ) Now for some reason I have a really strong desire to right a review, and I think I shall! Just when I get the time
Annnnywaayyy. I really love stumbling upon these stories, because it just brightens my heart with a good read. The way you've done the characters, the plot structure, the romance! It all fits so well! I've read plenty of stories where authors have a really good plot idea, but the story is ruined due to improper grammar/spelling/sentence and/or paragraph structure and over exaggeration of things. But you sir, have done well! Honestly, its a really good story. Can't wait for the next update! *squee*
I'm especially eager to find out about (SPOILER >>) Twilight's reaction to Rainbow and Daybreak's relationship
TL:DR, Great read, 10/10. Edit: I took a look at the likes/dislikes ratio... Honestly, try not to worry about it. With your pretty much perfect grammar and spelling, the only dislikes should be for people who don't like your plot line. Which is stupid, because I don't even take a second glance at stories that have a description about the story, which tells me I won't like it. No reason to dislike something for no reason. (Its probably all the
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I do
Ok, not really. They are actually quiet frustrating when an author makes a good cliffhanger.
wow Twilight's a bitch even from the start, but after I read this I might actually hate Twilight more, now that she accuses innocent people for something so small as a storm, (actually that is kinda big if it is a storm) but to actually accuse someone because she hates him, now that is cold and gets me pissed of. I'm just saying if you do hate someone, try not to look like an ass by accusing him/her about something bad.
5976443 I'm so thrilled I portrayed Twi's mood across perfectly. But (even though I'm clearly the one writing it) I kinda can see where she would come from. I mean, he IS Discords son.
Just imagine that, plus he kinda sorta (depending on how you read it) broke her heart. Idk man, that would really make me too
I'm just happy I've got ya feeling for the characters.