Brilliant unicorn Star FlailFlare was banished to the Badlands of Equestria, the farthest south-west an Equestrian map goes, when he attempted dangerous experiments in Canterlot. He'd travelled south from there and made a fortress over a thousand years of exile. Now he's completed his calculations and extensive experiments, and is ready to show them to the princesses of Equestria once more. But what's going to happen to him? Will he be banished again, or will the princesses let him stay in Equestria? Will he even make it there?
WHAT'S HIS ULTERIOR MOTIVE??????????
You're doing quite well I think you should get him to meet another pony, rhyming is really hard to do sometimes!
5244732 Haha thanks, and sometimes it is REALLY hard to rhyme (the buck rhymes with orange, anyways?). Do you have any suggestions of ponies? I don't want to shove too many OCs in this story :]
Gah this is first ever comment/reply to comment I need to learn more about this site sometime5245080 Well, you could always use one of the background characters like Derpy or Diamond Tiara... I'd love to see his reaction! Plus I really am enjoying the story so far, well done
5246719 Tanks you so much for enjoying :3 I wasn't sure anyone would really actually enjoy my stories And I'll have to experiment with those other characters so they don't seem too OC
No problem
5249015 Here's some Derpy! But I wasn't quite sure what else to have them say/do/whatever.....So she left.....
If you dont have any idea's he could meet Luna? She might not recognise him after all the time they've been apart. Plus, if you do do that, you could write an extra chapter where Luna tells Celestia about meeting him and she gets mad? Or worried? You dont have to, I just thought of that off the top of my head And I like the way you write, keep it up xxx
5269291 Great idea, thanks! Usually it's the ideas you come up with on the spot that are the best!
It's fine, I'm glad you liked it.
Star flail;
The astronomical seizure.
5271193 I ACTUALLY SEE HIM FLAILING AROUND IN MY HEAD WHEN I THINK STAR FLAIL and then I remind myself that it isn't Star Flail. Then I try not to laugh. Because it's usually in the middle of class when I think Star Flaiiiiiiiiiillllllllll.And a quiet class, as well. Maybe that should be the cover image, a flailing Star
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