It's official! This Spike is a socially active version of me... in Equestria... if I were a dragon... And is now my new role model! But honestly, he's very sweet and caring. And Sweetie Belle... You captured her character (I would assume) spot on for her as a teenaged mare.
Sing next part in the form of the older TMNT theme song:
"Teenaged mare with sexy powers. Teenaged mare with sexy powers! Teenaged mare with sexy powers!!!
Those two really are quite the sweethearts aren't they? I can't imagine that whatever Silver tries to do to Spike is actually gonna work, if anything it might be funny.
Noticed a few misspelled words. The three that jumped at me were "stoped", pretty sure you missed a p there; you having "waited" where 'waiter' should probably be and Sweetie Belle having a her name missing a letter or so in a few places.
It's still a fun read, you should probably get a proofreader or program like Grammarly to help out, and maybe go over everything you have posted so far with either or both
Looking forward to the next part.
I's gots an idea about what Silver's gonna do.
Not to nitpick, but the summary should say 'bases.'
Unless you don't care about covering your trebles. huehue
Gooooooooooa
It's official! This Spike is a socially active version of me... in Equestria... if I were a dragon... And is now my new role model! But honestly, he's very sweet and caring. And Sweetie Belle... You captured her character (I would assume) spot on for her as a teenaged mare.
Sing next part in the form of the older TMNT theme song:
"Teenaged mare with sexy powers.
Teenaged mare with sexy powers!
Teenaged mare with sexy powers!!!
She's a mare with sexy powers,
Who's a teen!
Am looking forward to the next part
Spike better not break the Pinkie Promise or else.
5185692 we'll in the brony handbook it says her name is Perl.
Those two really are quite the sweethearts aren't they? I can't imagine that whatever Silver tries to do to Spike is actually gonna work, if anything it might be funny.
Noticed a few misspelled words. The three that jumped at me were "stoped", pretty sure you missed a p there; you having "waited" where 'waiter' should probably be and Sweetie Belle having a her name missing a letter or so in a few places.
It's still a fun read, you should probably get a proofreader or program like Grammarly to help out, and maybe go over everything you have posted so far with either or both