Leave of absence

by Stormhoof

More than a disagreement

"What do you mean slacking?!" Spike yelled at Twilight sparkle.

"Now Spike there is no reason to yell, All I'm saying is you could afford to do more work around here." Said Twilight in a calm tone.

"I put books back on the shelves,dust them, clean up every one of your messes, organize your study material, do half of your shopping and you dare say I am SLACKING!" He continued to yell, his face bright red.

"Spike, stop yelling. I am not calling you lazy, I am just saying that lately my workload has increased and you need to learn to keep up better" She said, head turned up and eyes closed.

Spike began pacing angrily,a small flame would erupt from his nostrils every other breath. He barely had time for himself, all his time was spent keeping up with her, and when he was done he would often help Rarity over at the boutique. Every night for the past few months he would go to sleep two hours later and wake up two hours earlier then normal. Glaring back over at her he began to speak.

"If I am such a bad assistant why don't you get a new one? If I am so lazy why haven't you gotten another?!"

"Spike, I am NOT calling you lazy. We both have our part to do, I have my studies, while you clean, organize and send my letters to the princess. It should not be too much to ask that you".

"So thats all I'm good for, huh? Cleaning and sending letters? I cannot BELIEVE this! Did you forget everything I have done? I help you and all our friends and what do I get? Nothing!"He raised his voice more, and more...

"Spike, you need to keep your voice down, the girls will be here in about five minutes, go clean the bedroom if you would, we're having a slumber party and it must—" Again cutting off, he was now two inches from her face.

"And you STILL wont listen! Spike do this, Spike do that, Spike send this letter, Spike take a letter, Spike why is this book out of place. I am SICK of it, Twilight, you can clean it all yourself, and good luck getting a new assistant, you obviously don't need me," he yelled, his eyes burning with hate as he walked past her, grabbing a small pack and quickly filling it with his stuff.

"What do you think you are doing, Spike? Stop this nonsense and go clean up," she said, doing her best to keep her cool with the stubborn dragon. Turning, she realized he was already at the door when they both heard the knock.

Knock Knock

"We're here!" Came the voices of Pinkie pie, Rarity, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, And Fluttershy.

***

Spike opened the door and walked past Twilight's friends, all of their eyes on him.

"Bye everypony," he said, not looking at a one of them. Not even Rarity.

They all looked confused as the dragon walked away.

Twilight then said "Don't worry girls, he is just being melodramatic, he will be back before the nights out." she said, putting on a cheerful tone.

"Dear are you sure? he seemed awfully angry" Came Raritys voice, deeply concerned.

Twilight began again "It was just a small disagreement I assure you" looking over her friends she could already see he was out of sight. quickly letting them in she closed the door.

And so the night began, a few hours had past and each of them had stolen a glance at the door wondering if the small purple dragon would return. It was time fore truth or dare, and Rarity was the one to start it off.

"Twilight, truth or dare darling?" She said looking to the studious unicorn.

Thinking hard she spoke up "I choose truth" She said,looking back.

Smiling rarity began to speak "What exactly was that argument between you and spikey wikey about?"

"I um...." Twilight started, all eyes on her, how could she tell them? she had no choice "Well I simply asked that he work a bit harder, My workload has increased and he hadn't been keeping up too well...and he got into how I am always bossing him around, I did try to reason with him, He is just stubborn..hehe..." She laughed nervously at the end, rarity,applejack, and rainbow dash were all frowning, pinkiepie and fluttershy seemed to be at a loss of words.

Rarity was the first to speak up "Well of course you..apologized to him right?" her voice slightly hopeful.

"Well...No, I was in the right and he was the one who was yelling MY ear off...not like he gave me a chance either." Twilight said, and the response did not seem to please rarity...

"Well darling you simply must! What if our dear spikey wikey doesn't return? he could get himself hurt or worse!" She said, obviously worried.

"Now now rarity... he is going to come back, he just needs time to cool off that's all." Said twilight in a somewhat reassuring voice.

"And if he DOESN'T come back? dear keep in mind that he manages to assist everypony here, if he doesn't come back I can't think of anypony as reliable as him to help us." She said again, sounding a little angry adding "And besides...His birthday IS in a few months,Pinkie pie and I have been planning something special." She crossed her legs, tapping a hoof on the floor.

"Rarity, if he is not back by morning I will send him a letter apologizing...I promise. now lets continue ok?" she said, her statement was met with an approving nod from each of her friends.

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Spike walked a small dirt path, he was already on the outskirts of Ponyville, mumbling angrily to himself. He wasn't going terribly fast, but it was a little faster then a brisk walk, he soon approached the Everfree forest. They would never look there, and after the great dragon migration he is quite sure he could handle it.

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Author note:wanted to do this for awhile, thought I would try it. feedback is appreciated. I will take this chapter by chapter, some will be done as "Journal entries"Others as regular chapters. I know it is off to a rough start, but it will get better I promise.

Good news, with the help of Twillale, My this chapter is halfway through editing...:)Iam shorton time however so will finish the additions and such tomorrow.

Comments

[HarpsichordArt]

Erm, You seem to forget capitalization of names (ex. spike, twilight, etc)

Other than that, nice read.

[Path_of_cloud]

Ohhh 4th wall shattering questions and Sparity boo fucking yah time to read!

[Path_of_cloud]

/whistle I can feel for Spike i'v certinaly experienced a ungrateful bitch claiming i don't do enough while i do everything and they sit on their fat ass.......... is it bad im hopeing Twilight falls down a well at this point.

Anywhys you NEED to capatalize all names other then that grammer seems solid didn't notice any spelling mistakes.

I very much look forward to reading the rest of it keep it up, its got a lot of promise

[Blackbelt]

poor Spike....

Tracking

[rasta-gringo]

When I read this all I could think was: Its about time Spike chew out Twilight. Poor guy doesn't ask for anything.

[Desert Nocturne]

I like the premise of this story. There are a number of gramattical errors that need to be addressed included the chapter title (More than a disagreement). Make sure to capitalize names and watch your punctuation as well. Finally, try double spacing subsequent paragraphs to make the story easier to read.

I look forward to seeing where you take this. Keep writing!

[spikethed]

Before i read.

Thank Celestia. We have some Spike love, dragon almost never gets anylove. Even on the show he gets like five lines i mean what the hell is that its not like his twilights friend or anything no thats cool his a slave. he didn't help twilight make friends no its cool no Spike love is cool.

Anyways time to read.

[spikethed]

WHAT THE FU*K MAN I WAS GETTING SO INTO IT AND THEN BAM CHAPTERS OVER Why!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!??????????????????????????

Anyways Its pretty good I like it hope to read more soon. And please dont have updates months apart this is too good to have to wait so long.

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[UltiXevoz]

Tracking
Grammar issues aside this is some good stuff

[Stormhoof]

Yeah Grammar is not really a strong point, as forthe names, was so hyped was typing fast and not hitting shift...hehehehe..Glad you all like

[FirstToStrike]

Couple of grammar errors, but who cares about that!

Please update soon!

[THAT_1GUY89]

rough? yes.
great start? defenatly!

[PinkerShy]

If you ever need help editing, just ask. Be happy to help at any time!

[Stormhoof]

486814
I dont think you know how nice that is, My grammar in general is rather...erm...terrible...I focus On getting the story out of my head before it runs away from me in fear XD

[PinkerShy]

487644
Its ever not a problem! Just let me know if you require my services! I am available most of the time.

At least you can get your stories out!

[Chill Mists(Chilly)]

This seems very interesting.

[Stormhoof]

491510

Shall I spam Hasbro with fanmails and this story in transcript form? hm? MWAHHAHAHAHAHA

[Shonen XIV]

I'm never forgetting what hasbro did to spike...not attending to Twilight's birthday party...they're cruel

[BlackWidower]

Sounds great so far. Though I notice that you said at the end, some chapters will be in journal format. I'd like to suggest you don't do that. Not to say quick little excerpts from somepony's journal would be a bad idea, especially to examine the character's psyche, but an entire chapter? The change in format could throw some people off. Plus, I can't think of a reason to do an entire chapter that way.

[BlackWidower]

Oh, another thing: Why didn't anypony call Twilight out on her stubborn stupidity? Something like this:

Twilight: I was in the right and he was the one who was yelling MY ear off...not like he gave me a chance either.
Rarity: [slight pause] Darling...are you shitting me?
Twilight: Huh?
Rarity: You increase your workload and give Spike a hard time for not keeping up? No offence darling, but that makes you sound like a bitch.
Twilight: What!?
Applejack: Mmmhm.
Pinkie: Yep.
Rainbow: Huge bitch!
Fluttershy: Definitely bitchy.
Rarity: He tries his hardest to help you in any way he can, and you yell at him because it's not enough?
Twilight: I didn't yell at him!
Rarity: Not the point.
Twilight: Argh!
Rarity: He is possibly the hardest worker in all of Ponyville, helping anypony out at any chance he has, and you call him lazy?
Twilight: I didn't call him lazy.
Rarity: You said he's not working hard enough. Should I grab my dictionary or do you have one?
Twilight: [long pause] Holy crap! I'm in the wrong!!!
Rainbow: There we go! :D

But that's just me.

[Stormhoof]

494425

Well Twilight being bullheaded about this plays a role later on... be patient...and...Rarity shall contfront her later..I assure you... I assure you...
*spoiler*
This fic is more of a "Spike becoming badass when on his own"Kind of thing. you will see what I mean
*end spoiler*
And I really want to keep foul language out of this fic. Everypony has their reasons for not confronting her right hen and there I promise.

[Trickquestion]

I hope this updates soon.

[SouthernCross]

Lack of capitalization, quite a few grammar errors and feels overall rushed to the point where I can barely understand what is happening.

[Kelvin Shadewing]

Apart from obvious grammatical errors, there is something seriously wrong here: He may be younger then twilight but not by much, and she has no right to boss him around. DO NOT USE NARRATIVE COMMENTARY! This will kill your story faster than pretty much anything. Seriously, there is nothing more infuriating to read than a narrator commenting on a story, especially when the story itself is great. Seriously, I've seen stories with amazing plots and concepts become physically painful to read because the author inserted narrative commentary. Get rid of it, because this story has promise, and it deserves better.

[testuser22]

Several grammar issues. Is lacking a lot of commas and Punctuation.

[Pia-chan]

yeahh sparity fic!!! i so needed one! :'D I just suggest you follow symple gramatical rules. You could ask someone to help you before uploading a new chapter, and also for the ones you already uploaded, an editor I mean. So they could help you becoming better.

[Shadic Midnight Blitzer]

"REVOLUTION! REVOLUTION! REVOLUTION!"

"TAXATION WITHOUT REPRESENTATION! BEGIN THE REBELLION!"