Princess Celestia is known throughout Equestria as the strong and powerful ruler of land. Many wonder how she keeps her grace with the stress her role presents, and sometimes, how she can keep her sanity. The truth however, is one known to only a few
6094432 You probably also want to go back and re-write the first chapter as well. It's your introduction to your overall fic and I honestly read half of it with the characters as ponies before I remembered that it was supposed to be humanized. A tip; be sure to mention hands and, because it's a clop fic, breasts. Those two things together with the human tag at the top will make sure peoples mental images of the characters are human. You also would want to start adding your fic to groups to help it get noticed by other readers.
6094584 I'll probably go over it again later tonight to try and add those changes in (I think we all know a place I could more about her breast.) I wanted to wait tomorrow to try and get it into other group galleries but I'll try for some tonight. Once again thank you for your input
"He is a spoiled child who must learn he does not have as much power as he believes he does. He even flaunts his honorary ‘Prince’ title to get others to do what he wants!"
Hey, at least he didn't abolish Equestria's most beloved holiday in a hissy fit because he felt insulted.
Or, you know, tried to turn Equestria into Pony Mordor.
I'm excited for this, but I did have one concern. And that wasn't with the story itself. It was the comment, "all rude comments will be deleted." Okay, yes, rude comments are not nice, and no one should have to deal with hate, especially when it comes to someone's first clop (Good start btw), but does that include constructive criticism? Because, as the name states, it is constructive. Just curious. Really excited to see the next chapter!
6101906 As you had said, it is constructive criticism which isn't really rude but a way to fix something, however if worded wrong would be rude. As long as it is something that I can use to better the story it's fine. I meant more of something along the lines of: this is F****** dumb. This is ****. Those types of comments.
This was certainly very interesting. A good start, you sir can have a track and a favourite. We shall see what the next chapter brings but your definately on the way to a follow aswell. Keep it up.
You may want to make the 'humanized' aspect more obvious in the fic itself.
6094409 I thought I had. I'll make sure to clear that up in the next chapter. Thank you for bringing this to my attention.
next chapter plz
6094442 working on it. Patience is a virtue
6094432 You probably also want to go back and re-write the first chapter as well. It's your introduction to your overall fic and I honestly read half of it with the characters as ponies before I remembered that it was supposed to be humanized. A tip; be sure to mention hands and, because it's a clop fic, breasts. Those two things together with the human tag at the top will make sure peoples mental images of the characters are human. You also would want to start adding your fic to groups to help it get noticed by other readers.
6094584 I'll probably go over it again later tonight to try and add those changes in (I think we all know a place I could more about her breast.) I wanted to wait tomorrow to try and get it into other group galleries but I'll try for some tonight. Once again thank you for your input
Hey, at least he didn't abolish Equestria's most beloved holiday in a hissy fit because he felt insulted.
Or, you know, tried to turn Equestria into Pony Mordor.
6094662 lol, it gets better.
Overall, a good start. You may need to work the details out a bit clearer, generally, the word plot isn't used in huamnized fic.
6095040 is that good or bad?
6095517 I was hoping I could get away with it for this chapter but I will change it soon.
You do know the difference between a ring gag and a ball gag, don't you?
6096203 I thought I changed it back? it's suppose to be a ballgag. my bad, I will fix that
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Brah, research purposes. Everything is for research and science.
6097265 So did you like the first chapter?
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Oh! Indeed I did.. Hence I must favorite this for science and research and stuffs!
It's a good first chapter, you got me about halfway to a nosebleed so that's good... Yup..
6097337 I'm glad I'm working on chapter two right now.
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Great!
I'm excited for this, but I did have one concern. And that wasn't with the story itself. It was the comment, "all rude comments will be deleted." Okay, yes, rude comments are not nice, and no one should have to deal with hate, especially when it comes to someone's first clop (Good start btw), but does that include constructive criticism? Because, as the name states, it is constructive. Just curious. Really excited to see the next chapter!
6101906 As you had said, it is constructive criticism which isn't really rude but a way to fix something, however if worded wrong would be rude. As long as it is something that I can use to better the story it's fine. I meant more of something along the lines of: this is F****** dumb. This is ****. Those types of comments.
This was certainly very interesting. A good start, you sir can have a track and a favourite. We shall see what the next chapter brings but your definately on the way to a follow aswell. Keep it up.
6102320 thank very much. I am working on chapter two as we speak.
I'd say to add the 'Anthro' tag to this.
Might want to fix that. But nice work nonetheless.