Photo Finish helps Coco Pommel take full advantage of the decadent Canterlot lifestyle while she works for her (specifically a weight-gain story)
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WHA-HA-HA, it continues!
I haven't even read the chapter yet, and I'm just going to give it a thumbs up, because I know it will be good!
I was kinda worried this was never going to update again. Thank R Panic for me will ya?
8184671 Aye, that it does, as long as she has a say in it.
8185885 Cool! Let me know what you think of the chapter, please.
8186025 I have thanked him for you. And thank you for coming back; I hope this chapter is good enough.
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After having some time to digest this chapter, I'll name the things I like.
1. I love how everypony is slowly catching onto Photo Finish and her crooked intentions towards Coco.
2. I love how Duff and Fanny interact. I'm hopeful for some revelation as to their history. Like did Duff know Fan before she got big? ...Literally?
3. Photo Finish's and Black Forest's "foreigner exchange" was adorable. There need to be more small moments like this.
4. Dark Chocolate and French Vanilla! They're as cute as I hoped. I also hope you remembered our discussions pf them via PM... Even though that was like a year or two ago. :P
All in all, lovely chapter, want moar, denouttaden.
This just about has me trembling with excitement. I am so glad to hear that you've moved past your self-imposed blocks; we really are our own harshest critics.
This is going splendidly. It's so delightfully genuine. Can barely wait for the next installment. Everything is flowing naturally and your character interactions are superb. Excellently done.
Also, muh fetishes. Hnnngg
8186065 Great chapter! Photo is starting to show physical signs of her attraction. And WHAT A CLIFF HANGER! Damn, I need to read more!
Man.. what a cliffhanger.. cant wait for the next chapter! :D
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I went back and looked at everything that we has discussed. That is a lot to take in still, and I think that there is definitely stuff there that I can utilize.
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Your fetishes, mmyes I'm glad everything is going genuinely; that has been the biggest challenge that I've focused on going through this story.
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My first major cliffhanger in this story, I believe, and I'm glad it's worked so well!
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You won't have to wait too long (unless I talk myself down again, which I'll do my best not to do).
Wow! Thank you guys for all of your support! Yes, I've moved past my self-crippling doubts (hopefully) and should be getting back onto a reasonable schedule. Expect "The Second Incident" tomorrow; I'm already partway through writing it.
Also, if it's not too much to ask for: I'm very curious and concerned as to how I wrote Fancy Pants and Fleur in this chapter. Any feedback that I can use?
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I get the impression you're setting Fleur up to be the antagonist. It's pretty clear that she doesn't like fat ponies, and it seems like her opinion of Photo Finish is dropping now that Photo is associating with them. But Photo needs her business, too, so I don't think she can afford to just brush off Fleur's opinions.
Now I'm wondering if this will turn into a whole "snobs vs. slobs" subplot, and end with Fleur getting humiliated. (Perhaps humiliated by getting force-fed until she's as fat as the ponies she despises? A guy can dream.)
And Fancy Pants strikes me as a nice guy who just wants everypony to get along, and perhaps doesn't notice the tension between his wife and Photo Finish.