I'm loving this slow build-up in tension. It really helps set the mood, as it were. To be honest, I feel a touch upstaged. Your descriptions are second to none.

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Upstage you? Ha, hardly!

I see what you're doing though...just trying to butter me up because you want to get the next chapter of Moonstone out soon, lulz.

/srsly, thanks for the vote of confidence!

I don't think I have ever read a story from roselucks POV. All of the build up is really well done. Looking forward to seeing the where this leads.

This is really good, I can't wait for the next chapter! I don't think I've ever even a RoseluckxRarity (rariluck, rosarity?) Shipping before, but I can dig it. So props to you for making it work so well. And as loyal said, you're writing really is very good, certainly puts mine to shame.

I haven't read this. I haven't even read the description, but damn, RarityxRoseluck? Instant favorite. I'm always looking for uncommon F/F shippings.

I can't give you enough thumbs up!

Woah

....such a tease

I approve.

So much sexual tension!

More,,,,,,,,.

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Agreed.

Awesome! I can't wait to read more.

This seems interesting. Haven't read that many stories involving Roseluck. I'll give this a try.

4416405 I actually think F/F pairings are extremely common....

4420274 They are common. What I'm talking about is that F/F are usually between 2 main character (, , )
There are tones of those fics, there are also a lot of TwilightxCelestia or Luna. There are a lot of LiraxBonBon or OctaviaxDj P0n3. But when have you seen a Rarity x Roseluck? That's what I was talking about when I said Uncommon. Female characters that haven't been paired before.

WOW! great build up. Can`t wait to read more. Slight sugjestion; don`t go straight for the gusto; a good sign of any writer is the ability to do just as you have done here. That way the end result is all the more satisfying.

the back and forth between the two was pretty good.
they seem like the types who would see whitch would crack first and that came across well.
excellent use of descriptors and quite possibly the most aggravatingly assholish place to cut a chapter.( oddly enough that is a compliment )
all in all nice work.

Anticipation, adrenaline, and uninhibited arousal coursed through her veins now, her mind all but lost in a haze of desire as the fire in her core spilled over her like a lava flow. Roseluck leaned in, bringing her half-lidded gaze in line with Rarity's own. She leaned closer still until only a scant few inches separated their lips.

This is it... This is really about to happen... The thought raced through Roseluck's lust-filled mind as she craned her head up slightly, softly brushing her muzzle against Rarity's ear. Her voice dropped to barely a whisper, though it spoke of nothing but pure desire.

"Then let us begin."

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Holy originality, Batman!

An entirely accurate pictorial representation of my reaction whilst reading this story:
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Please continue at your earliest convenience....

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Thanks, and I certainly will! I'm not the fastest writer out there, so it might take me a bit. But, updates will occur!

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Indeed...

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Thanks! I really wanted to break convention a bit here by choosing a normally unseen pairing..

Oh wow, there is more sexual tension here between Rarity and Roseluck than Rainbow Dash and Applejack, and that's saying something.

Definitely gonna follow this.

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Thanks! I'm glad you like it so far!

The build-up for this is spectacular, it had me on the edge, teasing me with each little bit the whole way through. If the continuation stays at this level, this is a shoo-in for the High Quality Mature Fiction group.

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I'm flattered! Thank you so much!

I'll do my best to keep it up.

........................................................................... more please.

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Since you asked so nicely, I suppose that I will continue working then.

I will laugh my ass off if this was a way to punk Rose

But then, it would be funny if you wrote some kind of twist

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Lulz! I could do something like that, but then I'd have an army of readers after me, armed with pitchforks.

Roseluck won't be getting punked here, but she will have to wait a bit for the payoff that she is hoping for...

Commence read.

Was lead to this and seems to be quite nice.

Though this caught my eye.

blush spread across Roseluck’s face before she could even think to stop it.

Think an A was supposed to start this off?

Oh my. Very well done, GMP. Onwards!

I'd like to see a spin-off featuring the CMC and their hoof-wrestling attempts that night.

I approve whole-heartedly. It's not usual to see clopfics (or hell, romances) that take this time with a good build up.
Definite tumbs-up

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Heh, that approach by Rarity where she makes an inquiry about Roselucks flowers, all I could think was imagining her inner thought of, 'how to get a rose to bloom, glistening wetly with ambrosial dew.'

Sexual imagery and poetry, even though enveloped in words which may seem innocent to the uninitiated. That's the vibe I was getting with the emphasis between Roseluck's 'flowers' and Rarity's 'fashion' words.

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I just read this again!

Wish you would write some more clop cause your damn good at it.

I really miss Loyal...