What? No sexy time? Haha, Applejack and Rarity are such pervs xD.
Welp, now we know for sure that Twilight was there with Celestia when this virus was created, I'm just wondering now what part she had in the making of it. Poor Twi, having that guilt tugging at her :c
Next chapter! Looks like shit will be going down soon! Mwahahaha....*ahem*. Curse this story making me late for the things that I should be doing. Laters.
Very nice. i thought spike would have done something heroic by now. idk i just feel spike would do something like that. he did with the dogs. anyways very good chapter let me explan better with this. whoaorno.com/images/368.jpg
436275 dude theres 28 days later werid zombie type ponies applejacks killed ponies and stuff so what you exspect she just listerned in not watched tho ;)
I'm enjoying this even though it seems a bit generic in a few way, it works.
Funny commentary that played through my head!:
This is it Celestia! You'll never hurt anypony like this again! Twilight! Wait! You don't know what you're... why are you walking funny? um... that... I... well you see... Big Macintosh? ... ya. wow... that good huh? To be honest, I don't remember much after the third orgasm. ... damn. You're telling me!
Twilight...I'm pretty sure you could have waited to go running off into the forest after Celestia until AFTER you get your friends, Luna, and a legion of guards to go with you.
I kinda wish you would have added more stuff about Catie and Twilight. I dunno, i would have liked to see more about them. Like Twi telling her a good-night story/give her a good-night kiss, or cuddling or Catie asking Twi stuff about why she´s blushing around BigMac, or Spike asking if she´s a new assistant, etc.
Would have felt somehow better to have read such stuff too besides all the madness, ya know.
Twilight... you MORON. Yeah, just go after Celestia and her entire guard all on your own. That'll work out really great. Aside from 's fucking idiotic descisions, I'm quite enjoying this.
really like it so far! only issue i find is how fast the "romance" seems to be going. end of the world seems like a bad excuse regardless. anyways great chapter!
Shadow-Mane simply stared at her, his eyes partially widened and a look of worry pressed over his face. "Twilight..." he finally whispered "Why do you insist that I'm against you? I have never once lied to you at all during the time you've known me. I have given you only cold, hard, facts. I DID see you at Canterlot, ok!?" This had the immediate reaction of Twilight slowly lowering herself to the ground, a look of disbelief on her face. She listened as he went on "I didn't know about any of this, any of this 'memory' stuff you just mentioned! I saw you in Canterlot, and you looked fine! You were with Princess Celestia at the time, and I was guarding Luna with Captain Moon-Lance! She said something about taking you on a tour of her newly opened university, and after that, I didn't see you again until just earlier at Town Hall!" That's the truth, I swear on it on my life as a Royal Night Guard! May Luna strike me down with Nightmarish vengeance if I lie!"
Couldn't grab just the part I noticed, but have an extra quotation mark here at 'Town Hall' when Shadow-Mane is still talking to Twilight that needs to be removed.
Daaaamn good story mang! Really getting into it so far!
Applejack and Rarity are a little perverted...Good chapter though. I look forward for more.
What? No sexy time? Haha, Applejack and Rarity are such pervs xD.
Welp, now we know for sure that Twilight was there with Celestia when this virus was created, I'm just wondering now what part she had in the making of it. Poor Twi, having that guilt tugging at her :c
Next chapter! Looks like shit will be going down soon! Mwahahaha....*ahem*. Curse this story making me late for the things that I should be doing. Laters.
Have a good one.
AAAAnnnnnd the plot thickens!
awww no twilight dont chase Celestia in the forest no one can hear u scream out there
Very nice. i thought spike would have done something heroic by now. idk i just feel spike would do something like that. he did with the dogs. anyways very good chapter let me explan better with this.
whoaorno.com/images/368.jpg
436275 dude theres 28 days later werid zombie type ponies applejacks killed ponies and stuff so what you exspect she just listerned in not watched tho ;)
should of, could of
wrong.
should have, could have
Furthermore, you consistently wrote then instead of than.
Aside that, I like the way this is going.
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I've been thinking of getting a pre-reader so I can avoid these ._.
But who...? I'll post a blog about it and see who all would be willing.
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I'd be willing, but only as a second proofreader, since I hate to take full responsibilities.
Great googlie mooglie! I should NOT have read this at 2am.
OMGWTFBBQ my friends did that to me once i nearly fucking died they sounded like applejack saying i was doin a real good job keepin my girl company :(
the way you end each chapter is sending shivers down my spine.
next chapter, Onward!
THE PLOT! She thickens!!!
alsoo i have this feeling that twilights gonna be pregnant...
I'm enjoying this even though it seems a bit generic in a few way, it works.
Funny commentary that played through my head!:
This is it Celestia! You'll never hurt anypony like this again!
Twilight! Wait! You don't know what you're... why are you walking funny?
um... that... I... well you see...
Big Macintosh?
... ya.
wow... that good huh?
To be honest, I don't remember much after the third orgasm.
... damn.
You're telling me!
Twilight...I'm pretty sure you could have waited to go running off into the forest after Celestia until AFTER you get your friends, Luna, and a legion of guards to go with you.
At first I was like:
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But the I was like: Oh thank Luna! (scene was skipped)
But now Twilight has lost her mind! Yes Twilight, go and find the lab that started the infection, I assure you that won't backfire in the least.
You made me laugh so hard I had tears coming out of my eyes
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That is all.
I kinda wish you would have added more stuff about Catie and Twilight. I dunno, i would have liked to see more about them. Like Twi telling her a good-night story/give her a good-night kiss, or cuddling or Catie asking Twi stuff about why she´s blushing around BigMac, or Spike asking if she´s a new assistant, etc.
Would have felt somehow better to have read such stuff too besides all the madness, ya know.
Twilight... you MORON.
Yeah, just go after Celestia and her entire guard all on your own. That'll work out really great.
Aside from 's fucking idiotic descisions, I'm quite enjoying this.
You are not prepared!
-Illidan Stormrage
Rainbow Dash what were you trying to tell Twilight in the letter signed Rain-Rain.
And it was going so well!
Actually, I'm not SURE that Celestia's death is absolutely necessary here, but okay, whatevs. You go, girl.
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Well, she could just make a new bunker and virus otherwise...
really like it so far! only issue i find is how fast the "romance" seems to be going. end of the world seems like a bad excuse regardless. anyways great chapter!
Couldn't grab just the part I noticed, but have an extra quotation mark here at 'Town Hall' when Shadow-Mane is still talking to Twilight that needs to be removed.
Daaaamn good story mang! Really getting into it so far!