Everyone has heard the stories of Fillydelphia, from the Stable Dweller herself down to the lowliest slaves that survived the unspeakable horrors and hardships. Many forget those who weren't slaves or slavers, but they have stories too...
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Finally posted the new chapter, and with it comes a short pronunciation guide that I'll update as needed. I put that in the author's notes in the prologue.
Leaning pretty heavily on 'despair', I see. Decent chapter.
Ok... I really cried for Ida on this one...
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Sorry about that. Well, I guess that kind of was the intended effect, but still. Not going to give spoilers, but things should settle down on the sad stuff for a while soon, heh.
Oh, but thanks for the watch!
4937888 BTW i suppose there isn't any fanart about the fic (cause i haven't found any)...
i might be drawing something later (because this troubles me )
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Oh, sweet. I'd love to see something if you do! Hopefully I've been descriptive enough for the characters and what they look like (maybe not so much for Kaz, but you've got the Pipgriff pictures to give you an idea).
Good to see a nice griffon fic. I remember when I was writing my story (still am, I just need to get around to it...). I did tons of research on birds and cats to give them the appearance that they were NOT ponies, and were very much different. If you need some links and stuff about birds and cats, let me know.
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Great minds think alike I suppose. I did the same, which led me to learning quite a lot of interesting things. Things like how the griffons probably shouldn't have much of a sense of smell, but I kind of ignored that bit in the interest of not eliminating a useful sense. The cat parts on the other hand led to some more interesting private details that I don't think will make it into the story, heh.
Oh...oh dear. It always blindsides me whenever an event in an FoE fic STRIPS a perk away from the protagonist. Ida's quest companion perk really lulled me into a false sense of security. Obviously, despite being his superior's fault forcing Kaz to work despite his severe sleep deprivation, it won't mean a damn in his defense if fatal friendly fire was called into question.
The only two optimistic paths (out of the ten pessimistic outcomes) would be that either the Talons have to relieve Kaz of punishment when they confirm it's the mistake of his superior making him work in this condition (which still invites many fellow Talons calling him a murderer night and day). Or they REALLY misinterpret their confession and think someslave killed Ida instead of him, and Kaz would be even more messed up they're chasing a lie and not him.
And those are the optimistic outcomes I can think of
The super-duper optimistic outcome was that Kaz was so sleep deprived he was hallucinating the whole thing. (but this is Fallout Equestria, easy breaks don't exist)
Either way, all pretense Kaz could become a glimmer of comfort for some slaves, an inside source to help them get by is going to be moot with what he's done.
Here's hoping Kaz reaches Fatal Sleep Deprivation (http://fallout.wikia.com/wiki/Sleep) before Stern enacts whatever punishment she has in store for him.
4945567 Ha! I found out the exact same ting about smell, as well. I also learned some things, as well, especially since in Fallout Equestria, the phrase "By the Great Egg" is mentioned, and I had to figure if... well, how bird-like they were in certain respects, so I could think of what kinds of instincts they might have. And stuff.
I like this, keep going.
Man, what a gut-wrenching twist...
All the more reason for me to eagerly look forward to more.
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Sounds like you like it, and more is coming soon, at long last! Real life has hit in a lot of places so I haven't had the time I wanted to spend on this, but the next chapter is almost done.
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I'm glad it's coming off as convincing, but I have no military experience, heh. I did read some field manuals and a few other policy manuals as research material, but that doesn't compare to actually being there, of course. Any inaccuracies I'll just pass off as the Talons trying to imitate organized militaries but not getting it completely right.
Wow, that hurt. In a good way. I mean... not in a good way, but like in a "you wrote something that made me feel something" way.
In other news, I think your writing overall has been improving through the course of this fic, and that's always neat to see. (Not to imply that it was bad or anything, just that it started at one level and is now at a higher one.)
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It wasn't a typo, but thanks for pointing it out. Evidently I just chose pretty poorly when coming up with that griffon's name, but Sergeant Brigitte Swiftwind was Liese's sergeant, so yes, Gunther was pointing it out so Kaz could give her the money to pass along to Liese.
Welp... that is one way to earn some EXP that I didn't saw coming
Well written; but killing off Ida kinda did it for me. Too dark for my blood- so cutting my losses there...
That said, well done on writing a gut-punching emotional fic.
I had a feeling this was going to happen but didn't think it would happen so soon. Things sure are going to be going from bad to worse from now on it seems. Poor Kaz.
Wow um...okay I gotta ask before reading any more of this....is there ANYTHING happy in this story? It just keeps getting worse and worse...its really hard to stay interested cause it just feels like the author is leading us up to the main character committing suicide.
I hope not...this is the first and only fallout story I've found with the main character as a griffon...itd suck if it was just tragedy after tragedy and then death....
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It's a sad story overall, and this is probably the low point. I won't spoil much in case you do decide to keep reading, and the tone does improve slowly over the next few chapters, but it's still a little rough for the next chapter or two. The first part of the story generally involves Kaz getting beaten down and adjusting to his new life, but the rest of the story is less bleak.
Still, I know a few people have stopped reading at this point, and I won't blame you if you decide it's not something you want to read.