357549 I know, but Kkhat the author of Fallout Equestria made it a point to mention Unicorn's had to cut off their horns to wear power armour, and Inkwell is rather attached to his. I mean the only parallel I can think of to that would be like cutting off a finger to use a hidden blade. But who would do that... oh, wait Assassin's Creed 1 .
Anyway I won't spoil whether Inkwell loses his horn or not.
357566 That sounds so...stupid. (They want to go to war, so they cut off the unicorns horn, so they can't use magic...NO WONDER THE WORLD WAS DEVASTATED! DIDN"T ANYONE USE THEIR HEADS! (I exclude Celestia, because she wouldn't do something that stupid, or go to war with anyone, but that's beside the point.))
357574 They didn't want to go to war. It was all a sad series of events that led to war. Project Horizons expands on it a lot, it's a side-story by Somber which is Kkhat approved. According to Equestria daily, I dunno if that means it's considered canon but whatever.
Edit: I do not consider PH canon to my own story.
Also Celestia abdicated the throne to Luna when the war started. Exactly what Celestia did during the war is unknown, but Big Mac took a bullet for her which led to Power Armour development by Applejack. It would take forever to explain everything so I can only advise you to read tFallout Equestria It will get sad at times but it will be worth it, trust me .
2,5K words... Doomande you can do it. Do what you ask? Well REVIEW TIME!
I do not know what it is with me and the classical "War. War never changes" intro a lot of Fo;E writers like so much and me, but we are not good friends and I can normally feel physically that I crinch, but not this time. Maybe are it because you are not going over the top with it but just stating facts, could have something to do with the fact that they are Steel Rangers and actually know war more than most or you did something magical that I donĀ“t know of, but no matter what you did, was the twitch there not this time.
I must say that you have me intrigued sir, both by the high level of details that says more than meets the eye, and the fact that it are a story from the perspective of a Steel Ranger. That he are still a trainee and not a real member so to say are a minor detail. And I can't wait to hear what kind of diluted history lessons he had from the Rangers, with all their propaganda and what not. That your chapters have a good "bite" size are also a good thing, there is way to many stories there are out there with 20K or even 30K word chapters, but I can easily see myself use some more of my reading time returning to your story in the near future
Nitpick: "When you're a steel Ranger you have two potential paths" The steel is also a part of their name should it not have been capitalized?
1548040 Thanks Storm, I went ahead and Capitalized the Ministry names, excluding the of, cause that would be silly. Also Snow isn't exactly a common sight in the wastelands, it's mostly just rain or dry regions that are deserts due to being outside the S.P.P tower range, as far as I know anyways. Wintertrot is closer to the Far North, more Northwest
1612085 I am rather pleased with my version of the classic intro, I wanted it to be unique amongst others, whilst not getting too preachy. Hence why I didn't go overboard and mention things like betrayal, forgetting the elements etc. My chapters will probably get longer, but I'll try to keep them in the 10k region, there are some stories that can do a 15-20k chapter that really keep your attention throughout it. But I feel if I did it, I would be stretching out the story for no real reason. Maybe my opinion will change and I'll break the 10k boundary from time to time but I don't think I would enjoy writing 15-20K chapters all the time.
As for what History the Steel Rangers learn, well I'll let Inkwell fill you in when he has a reason to talk about it. Capitalized Steel Ranger properly now too, thanks for pointing that out.
I don't know why, but I picture Inkwell having the personality traits of Tony Stark, and the voice of Deadpool (from his new video game at least) Nevertheless, I really enjoyed this. I have been trying to find a new Fallout story, and I had seen this on the EGD Fallout updates a few times. So far so good.
4536556 Don't worry, we caught that spelling error. It'll be fixed, when we release the revisions/updates, which are almost finished. As for the Trait, it just seemed like a logical choice, but I see your point about it being solely negative. I'll make an alteration to it, before I release the updated chapters. Thank you for the comment, it's been helpful.
I found it first! Anyway I will have to read it later and stuff.
Welcome aboard! Though your already part of the group, you can add your story and become, complete! Jk.
Anyway good luck.
- Noakwolf.
*Starts slow clap*
Well played good sir
I see your usual attention to details here. Good job sir.
Son, you did not disappoint. Continue.
354781 I'll add it once I have a few more chapters ready.
355505 Thanks you
357110 Thanks Fulgor. I plan to make the chapters much longer. And do my best to detail everything.
I like it. (Though, I usually include inner thoughts in my writing, but to each person their own.)
I'm not a big fan of Fallout: Equestria. (I don't care for post-Apocolyptic worlds. Too depressing.) But I shall track this one.
And no armour made for Unicorns? Really? The goverment workers are MORONS!
357549 I know, but Kkhat the author of Fallout Equestria made it a point to mention Unicorn's had to cut off their horns to wear power armour, and Inkwell is rather attached to his. I mean the only parallel I can think of to that would be like cutting off a finger to use a hidden blade. But who would do that... oh, wait Assassin's Creed 1 .
Anyway I won't spoil whether Inkwell loses his horn or not.
357566 That sounds so...stupid. (They want to go to war, so they cut off the unicorns horn, so they can't use magic...NO WONDER THE WORLD WAS DEVASTATED! DIDN"T ANYONE USE THEIR HEADS! (I exclude Celestia, because she wouldn't do something that stupid, or go to war with anyone, but that's beside the point.))
357574 They didn't want to go to war. It was all a sad series of events that led to war. Project Horizons expands on it a lot, it's a side-story by Somber which is Kkhat approved. According to Equestria daily, I dunno if that means it's considered canon but whatever.
Edit: I do not consider PH canon to my own story.
Also Celestia abdicated the throne to Luna when the war started. Exactly what Celestia did during the war is unknown, but Big Mac took a bullet for her which led to Power Armour development by Applejack. It would take forever to explain everything so I can only advise you to read tFallout Equestria It will get sad at times but it will be worth it, trust me .
not a bad start, will read more soon.
I guess i was lucky that the Pondale Rangers had unicorns in their ranks of power armour wearers.
I have to admit, that first chapter was quite a good read. I can't wait to read more of it.
I'm surprised Inkwell has never even heard of snow, myself.
(Also, I would suggest capitalising all the Ministries, i.e. Ministry of Awesome, Ministry of Wartime Technology. Makes it a little easier to read)
2,5K words... Doomande you can do it. Do what you ask? Well REVIEW TIME!
I do not know what it is with me and the classical "War. War never changes" intro a lot of Fo;E writers like so much and me, but we are not good friends and I can normally feel physically that I crinch, but not this time. Maybe are it because you are not going over the top with it but just stating facts, could have something to do with the fact that they are Steel Rangers and actually know war more than most or you did something magical that I donĀ“t know of, but no matter what you did, was the twitch there not this time.
I must say that you have me intrigued sir, both by the high level of details that says more than meets the eye, and the fact that it are a story from the perspective of a Steel Ranger. That he are still a trainee and not a real member so to say are a minor detail. And I can't wait to hear what kind of diluted history lessons he had from the Rangers, with all their propaganda and what not. That your chapters have a good "bite" size are also a good thing, there is way to many stories there are out there with 20K or even 30K word chapters, but I can easily see myself use some more of my reading time returning to your story in the near future
Nitpick:
"When you're a steel Ranger you have two potential paths" The steel is also a part of their name should it not have been capitalized?
1548040
Thanks Storm, I went ahead and Capitalized the Ministry names, excluding the of, cause that would be silly. Also Snow isn't exactly a common sight in the wastelands, it's mostly just rain or dry regions that are deserts due to being outside the S.P.P tower range, as far as I know anyways. Wintertrot is closer to the Far North, more Northwest
1612085
I am rather pleased with my version of the classic intro, I wanted it to be unique amongst others, whilst not getting too preachy. Hence why I didn't go overboard and mention things like betrayal, forgetting the elements etc. My chapters will probably get longer, but I'll try to keep them in the 10k region, there are some stories that can do a 15-20k chapter that really keep your attention throughout it. But I feel if I did it, I would be stretching out the story for no real reason. Maybe my opinion will change and I'll break the 10k boundary from time to time but I don't think I would enjoy writing 15-20K chapters all the time.
As for what History the Steel Rangers learn, well I'll let Inkwell fill you in when he has a reason to talk about it. Capitalized Steel Ranger properly now too, thanks for pointing that out.
I like this so far.
This is how you open a story. A well done cover that suggests somebody cared about this story and summarizes the setting; a promising setting.
The first chapter isn't slow, it sets things up and knocks them down, giving reasong to continue reading.
I wish more were like that.
2740387 Thanks. I'm very happy with my opening and I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the story.
I don't know why, but I picture Inkwell having the personality traits of Tony Stark, and the voice of Deadpool (from his new video game at least) Nevertheless, I really enjoyed this. I have been trying to find a new Fallout story, and I had seen this on the EGD Fallout updates a few times. So far so good.
Traits generally have a positive note to them. Nothing seems positive to this one. Also,
*your
4536556 Don't worry, we caught that spelling error. It'll be fixed, when we release the revisions/updates, which are almost finished. As for the Trait, it just seemed like a logical choice, but I see your point about it being solely negative. I'll make an alteration to it, before I release the updated chapters. Thank you for the comment, it's been helpful.