Shining can deal with griffons, mobsters, and the possible end of the world no problem. Dealing with his wife and her girlfriend crowding his bed is a different matter...
3687748 I'll grant you that. But numerous times I tag a location with Crystal. And in the very first chapter in the very first sentence I say they're in the Crystal Empire by name.
Sorry, it just bugs me that that was an issue.
And yes, I used that twice in a row. It's grammatically correct. Somehow.
I don't mean to yell at you. I just had to drill through the most recent chapter and it was pretty intense.
3688991 I propose more explosions, more stupid police force to fit the death, gun fodder and meat shield quota for any one-pony-action-packed-badassery and more villain banter, more vengeance initiative, more extra, crowd deaths, less heroes dying and more bad guys dying... Yeah, And Shining does it all with just one pistol. That's how you make action movies.
3689013 Fine, Shotguns it is with a few face scarring afterwards and Hollywood explosion in the end, carrying both Chrysalis and Cadence in either arm and protecting Truth and Lovebug.
3689137 *Whistling innocently* Oh no, of course not, just thinking of the same crazy ideas this story can go to... with the best results of course. *Trying to hide said notes*
The pegasus turned from speaking with one of the police captains to look at her. He said something to the pony, who nodded and stepped away as Sunshine walked up.
I really doubt this happened in the ventilation system.
“Theo, are the police doing?”
This is by no means the first sentence that has been missing a word, but for some reason it is the one that annoyed me the most.
3687825 I understand, it seems that are you are rushed trying to pump out these chapters. Do you even have an editor?
The Night Guard, an top-of-the-line elite unit which took out a small army of Changelings and two generals, reduced to ridiculously easy to kill redshirts with purely decorative armor. That's just sad
Also, is this supposed to be a MLP fic? Because between all the modern tech, the guns, the dual-wielding ninja cooks and the explosions it's easy to forget.
“The leader is a pink pegasus called Juno. She’s planned this out, covering as many ends as she can. She’s experienced and comfortable with violence and possibly psychotic. She’s brought in a tech and by now they likely own building by now.”
“Bravo team is in position to breech.” Sunshine whispered into her head set. “Commander Robinsson if you want to be able to piss unassisted ever again you will pull back Alpha team right now.” she hissed.
breach breech - I am wearing breeches. breach - The rolling waves breached the hull of the sinking ship.
3687748 I'll grant you that. But numerous times I tag a location with Crystal. And in the very first chapter in the very first sentence I say they're in the Crystal Empire by name.
Sorry, it just bugs me that that was an issue.
And yes, I used that twice in a row. It's grammatically correct.
Somehow.
I don't mean to yell at you. I just had to drill through the most recent chapter and it was pretty intense.
3687763 You need a pic of Zecora to go with that.
This shit real as it gets, son. Feelin' all Bruce Willis and Steven Seagal up in this.
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Send in Shining already, clearly the police force is stupid as fuck, except for Sunshine and Justice for having a brain.
3688077 Nope, this is a hardcore shit getting real action fic.
3688186 True dat.
3688236 Wait for it.....
3688514 Total Recall was best Mind Screw. But no, this is not a dream.
Or... am I lying again.
3688698 Jesus, I'll fix it.
3688705 Thanks
3688744 Yes.
3688766 fc05.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2013/008/b/5/yao_ming_true_story_plz_by_mingtruestoryplz-d5qtvjo.jpg
3688928 Give me a moment.
3688991
I propose more explosions, more stupid police force to fit the death, gun fodder and meat shield quota for any one-pony-action-packed-badassery and more villain banter, more vengeance initiative, more extra, crowd deaths, less heroes dying and more bad guys dying... Yeah, And Shining does it all with just one pistol. That's how you make action movies.
3689005 No, he does it while duel wielding shotguns. Because it's just too awesome to question.
3688950 Shouldn't that second video be seven seconds long?
"Hey, what's wrong with Die Hard?"
"Nothing!"
"Oh yeah!"
3689013
Fine, Shotguns it is with a few face scarring afterwards and Hollywood explosion in the end, carrying both Chrysalis and Cadence in either arm and protecting Truth and Lovebug.
3689111
Have you been reading my story notes?
3689137
*Whistling innocently*
Oh no, of course not, just thinking of the same crazy ideas this story can go to... with the best results of course.
*Trying to hide said notes*
once again, damn........
3689111
And after the credits roll we see Shining Armor holding Cadence close as he lovingly whispers into her ear.
"I want a divorce."
In my defence I blame M. Night Shyamalan (in particular that movie "Devil") for that "What a tweeest!" idea.
Error has not been fixed, would you like to try again? Y/N
N
Program shutting down...
3691444
I think I can fix this.
*Taps away at the keyboard for a few minutes before finally hitting ENTER*
Okay, that should...
[Running Fdisk]
*Silently stands up and just as silently he quickly runs off*
if i want a battle i'd rather play a game...don't overdo the fighting stuff or it'll get a bit boring
just my opinion
3693531 He is Basing it off of Diehard so their isn't too much room for waiting game.
I really doubt this happened in the ventilation system.
This is by no means the first sentence that has been missing a word, but for some reason it is the one that annoyed me the most.
3687825
I understand, it seems that are you are rushed trying to pump out these chapters. Do you even have an editor?
Oh god. I thought I never had to think of that story again. Why would you do this to me?
"My name is Truth Uso"
I see what you did there... お疲れ様!
I love you.
I love you more than any one author on this entire site.
Alright, these terrorists all need to die in unspeakable, terror, horror and agony.
Possibly being kept alive by Cadence and Chrysalis' magic while being set on fire and running around screaming.
I loved it all so much and I can't wait to see what happens next to them all. And where the buck is Shining Armour at he should be there by now.
The Night Guard, an top-of-the-line elite unit which took out a small army of Changelings and two generals, reduced to ridiculously easy to kill redshirts with purely decorative armor. That's just sad
Also, is this supposed to be a MLP fic? Because between all the modern tech, the guns, the dual-wielding ninja cooks and the explosions it's easy to forget.
4031752 those "easy to kill redshirts" are well armed and well trained. This ain't your normal rabble of criminals, you know
To think that all of this could have been avoided if Shining just didn't get out of bed.
Ughh sorry but guns in Equestria is bad enough but a whole plot ripped from Die Hard that feels redunculous is too much. I'm out.
Dis is so Under siege you dont mess with the cook in hes gally
It'll buff out no problem.
holed
hold - I will hold you in my arms.
holed - Rainbow Dash is holed up in her cloud house, and won't come out.
unnecessary repeat
11285442
Yeah, fair
breach
breech - I am wearing breeches.
breach - The rolling waves breached the hull of the sinking ship.