My name is Drifter and I write brony stories for OC's and short stories of other events. I am hoping that you can enjoy my writing just as much as I enjoy writing them.
The pony Sun Drifter, is left alone for years till he is rescued by another pony. A pony who had dealt with his pain of being alone. Together, this duo will grow to understand each other with much pain to overcome. Will they fall in love and be happy or will they break apart and be alone again?
Page generated in 0.083 seconds
Total duration
1,012 users online
1,890,263 hits today, 1,870,739 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
You look like you're just beginning to write. There are...4 levels, i guess, of how good you work can be. A 1 is considered great, you definitely made something really cool. A 2 would be considered that you were not good enough. A 3 could be considered that it's atrocious, horrible, needs more work. A 4...there is no four, because if you don't get a rating, then that means it wasn't worth five seconds of reading, and if you find that out, you should quit then and there.
I give this a 2 with commentary. Try to put yourself in your character's shoes, and give them a non child-like personality. The idea of thw story can be anything, so you don't need to worry about that. As for love stories...hardest thing to write, mah dude, so you might want to spend a lot of time looking it over, fixing things, adding things, changing things.
You didn't quite make it to a 1, because it's like listening to a children's book, unfortunately. Your mixing flavors of text incorrectly, so try thinking of ways of making your work look better. Explain the scenery, try not to create too much dialogue, and the rest...it'll come to you, I can't tell you how you're supposed to make a story any better than what I know.
This is just amazing! Love it! I wish I could like endless times!
3467211First of all, thank you for the comment and explaining that. It helps a great deal and I will do my best to listen what you said. I'm always looking forward to comments and readers opinions. Your feed back like I said is much appreciated and will be taken into great consideration.
3467249Thank you very much! You flatter me.
I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I will do my best to put a new chapter every Wednesday for you to read. Don't slam on that like button too hard now. You may break it. 
It's so beautiful!!!
3546843 You flatter me yet again. Thank you for your on going support Pinkie.
I think you meant either 'I will adopt her, Ditzy.' or 'I will adopt Dinky.'
3846778 Oh my. Thank you for pointing that out. I will fix that immediately.
*Notices that it's the end*
...
This is so beautiful!!!