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wow umm .. soooo.. what just happened ?
7856510 A new journey is what happened.
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oh ok
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So I thought this story started out pretty strong. I love stories that look at an aspect of a society tear it down and try to rebuild it (especially if it turns into a tragedy). But I am sorry you lost me when you started to turn your story into a 'end of the world' one where the character is the 'chosen one' to 'save the world'.
You had a strong antagonist with just pony society and it's views on slavery and trying to change them. You did not need throw away bad guys that have fiendishly evil plans that no one cares about. The best villains are not just black and white but grey, ex. Celestia could be the strong, just leader we know her as but then have her be the one most resistant to change since she has slaves of her own.
Well that's enough ranting. I made it to chapter 17 but this is where I jump ship. I wish you the best of luck with the rest of your story.
7860322 Sorry you jumped ship. Maybe one day I'll just write a story without a bad guy with slavery. But I'm glad you enjoyed the story till chapter 17
Damn, a lot happened in this.