Join Fluttershy and her friends on a journey of social, psychological, and emotional exploration in a harrowing tale of self discovery and clandestine relationships. You may never feel the same way about illicit love.
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huh, this chapter made me wonder how many actual Fluttershy/Twilight shippings are out there. I know that wasn't the intent and it was a good feelsy chapter, so I enjoyed. It was also a surprise to see another chapter, however short, so quickly.
4399379 I think I get bogged down with longer chapters because I compulsively re-read what I've written like fifty times before publishing.. barely even exaggerating. Consequently a shorter chapter takes much less time I suppose.
Glad you liked it.
"I thought you'd never ask".. Suddenly, Sweetie x Fluttershy x Twilight shipping
[some blabber about how frequency could be improved if chapter lengths were more evenly distributed/consistent, if a comfortable time to split can be found anyway]
Also, this chapter and the last chapter imply fluttershy is a massive zoophile, some people might be put off by this but im not~
I want to draw fluttershy and twilight cuddling now.. hmmph.
Shame she isn't an alicorn in this.. yet?
Its good that Fluttershy now trusts Twilight enough to go to her when shes not feeling safe. What exactly was meant by safe? Was it that she was more likely to do something she would regret?
Love the chapter by the way.
I've said it before, and I'll say it again -- I am astounded at how well you are pulling off everything in this fic, Flutterpony. Nearly every scene is written out almost flawlessly, with extremely satisfying dialogue, rich, very deep character development, and a sense of flow smooth as water itself. From the beginning of the fic with Fluttershy's dreams about what she wanted all the way up through her actually entering into a relationship with Sweetie Belle, I was completely immersed. I'm really glad to see Twilight helping them both out like this, too; the line about her having a sense of purpose from this was particularly powerful. Any author could learn a lot from you about plot progression and strong characterizations. Keep up the good work!
I will be honest. This chapter felt too short to me. I do not mind the wait, when I know that I will find high quality at the end of the wait.
I'm guessing that Sweetie belle will stop by and see this and the bull pucky will fly.
NOOOOOOoooooooooo......
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I would tend to agree, unless this chapter depicts a critical turning point in the story, which it may or may not, but regardless, this is the worst mistake Fluttershy has made thus far. Sleep snuggles are a very significant form of comfort, up there with kissing in terms of who you can share it with, although with somewhat different rules (e.g. being ok for parents and their kids). If Sweetie ever finds out about this, she'll be destroyed. And even if not, it's only a matter of time before something else happens if Fluttershy doesn't understand what a betrayal it is. For that matter, I thought Twilight understood, after her discussion of boundaries with Sweetie back in chapter 5.
This is why in my comment on the previous chapter I mentioned that it might be ok to Sweetie and Fluttershy to be more physical even when Fluttershy is somewhat dangerous. Sweetie WANTS sex, so regardless of how carried away Fluttershy might get, she'd likely forgive her. And if trying to abstain results in Fluttershy going to other sources to deal with her physical/emotional needs, that's far less forgivable. The reason Sweetie fell so hard for Fluttershy is that it made her feel desired. So it's absolutely critical that Fluttershy makes sure that Sweetie always feels like the most desirable creature in the world.
It torments me how few people seem to understand this. (not talking about you, Flutterpony, but the characters, and countless other characters, and real people)
Short, yet sweet..
If you even consider doing that, i will send you to the moon.
Thanks all!! I enjoy the comments and your thanks even though writing in itself has been a reward for me.
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I understand the concern some have about shortness. I don't really intend to make them all short though. (I may try to keep the chapters a little shorter for the sake of publishing them more frequently, but I dunno yet.) The purpose of these very short ones might become more defined as I continue to write more, but for now I think of them as theatrical interludes basically.
4399501 Oh Twi is an alicorn here and cuddle pics are always very welcome. Everything so far takes place after Equestria Girls (see the prologue) and just before S4. I'm going to be moving into S4 now though I think. And for the record I find zoophilia fascinating.
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I'm genuinely flattered!
Twilight has to have an especially strong motivation to do what she does I think. I'm really glad if I manage to convey that.
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"Safe" does refer to safety from doing something generally that Fluttershy might regret, yep.
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As far as the faithfulness element here goes. I don't think Twilight would allow it if she considered it anything more than love and bonding of a filial sort. Whether Fluttershy will differentiate between that type of love and the type that comes from something more romantic may or may not be an issue, but the intentions of both were innocent, I think, even if it crossed both their minds that they're a bit old to be sharing a bed outside of a romantic relationship. Then again both have come to question and look at the whole concept of too old/young in a whole different light thanks to Fluttershy's past, (not to mention Sweetie Belle). Also, whether they actually cuddled or just slept side by side is left to your interpretation until it otherwise might become necessary to clarify later on. In the mean time, sorry for the ambiguity.
well my week from hell is done, and besides stress tears, the thought of reading this has been a lot of what kept me going. and like always, the intelligence and beauty and insight of everything u write is undescribab ly great! as always u handle sweetie belle, fluttershy, and now especially twilight's thoughts and development and characters so wonderfully. this is so fascinating and inspiring and worrying and engrossing 2 read!!! i do have to say i think the zoophilia seems unwarranted....i mean dont get me wrong, im not saying that the way that would make me a hypocrite here, i understand that in a world where anmals r shown regularly 2 have a level of intelignece and selfawareness on a similar level of the ponies, then its not necessarily morally wrong 2 engage in sex as long as u can communicate properly and its consensual. but its still a fairly shocking piece of info, and adds a dimension that just doesnt seem like its necessary or goes anywhere. maybe its an important part of ur overall plan and u will come back to it as an integral part of developing fluttershys character and if so then thats fine, but it looks and feels at the moment kind of like this is as far as ur gonna take the idea, and if that were true then it feels superfluous. but thats just me and what do i know lol, anyway everything else is fantastic as always, keep going!!!!!
about sweeties age, its interesting, because in some ways her age group is dictated by concerns of the late teens (the question of who they r and what they will be doing for the rest of their life) so there r aspects of non-childhood strongly present in all the cmc that way. but overall, going by personality and physical appearance and concerns and social placement, i see sweetie belle as 10 to 12, 14 at the very most but thats pushing it
4406789 Many thanks as usual for the enthusiastic reading and comments! Fluttershy's zoophilia is something I hesitated to bring up. It was always part of her character for me from the story's beginning, but broaching the topic fully has been tricky since I don't want it to take too much attention away from the issue of her relationship with Sweetie. It may help to point out that it's actually been referred to well before "Chapter 10" in "Chapter 1" while she's talking to Angel Bunny.
This is a really good fic on a touchy subject.
4415257 Thanks! I got my tense confused there.
4415288 Thanks.
Well, I've finally caught up. A great fic in many ways, but the thing I love the most is how wildly it makes my moral compass spin and how frequently it changes my image of the characters while not changing them at all. An absolutely brilliant piece for making one think about judgement and so on. I can't wait for more.
P.S. You've claimed pride of places as my favourite writer on the site.
4419361 Favorite you say? Huzzah!
I can understand why it would make one question morality and judgement. I've attempted to avoid judgement from the narrative perspective and the characters seem fairly mixed up about it so far after all.
Thanks for the comment and your support.
will sweetie belle be mad at Fluttershy for sleeping with twilight?
I love this story. it didn't seem like something I would be interested in at first, but I got caught up in this tale of love. The characters are deep and you delve into and bring to life this idea and this love. to me, this story is on par, if not better than Past Sins, or any of the best stories I have read and enjoyed. Keep the good work. you deserve every fav and like for this story. You now have an new fan and follower.
4503894 There are very few well-known FiM-fics I've been interested in reading, and Past Sins is one of them. (I hope that too many will not be aghast at the fact that I haven't yet read it.) I usually stick to Rainbow Dash Presents. In any case I've heard good things and I'm flattered (Nyx seems like a cutie), so thank you!
Now I'm tempted to make a parody video of Fallen Angels once it's finished.
4504370 There is one other fic that I suggest reading. It is pretty short, but it is so amazing. It is The Circle of Friends.
I don't really care for rainbowdash presents.
4505723 Thanks for the recommendation.
5580295 yip. You could think of it as something between a prequel and a sequel... an interqual maybe.
Or just a bonus scene...
I have greatly enjoyed what you've written thus far. I was pulled into it from the beginning with the deep insights into Fluttershy's thoughts (and the rest of them - Sweetie and Twilight - as we got further into the story). I do rather wish we had stayed in that ambiguous middle area before Fluttershy came out into the open to Sweetie, but the aftermath has been really interesting as well. As far as romance (genre) goes, I've come to find that I enjoy the chase more so than exploring what comes after, but with what's been going on here, I am happy to make an exception.
With that being said, I did want to say that the chapter that went heavily into Fluttershy's faith really broke the flow and immersion, at least for me. If it had been a home brewed pony version of Christianity of some sort, even something overt (save ponifying Jesus; that I feel would only be fit safely under the comedy tag), then I think it would have been more manageable. I did read that this was a core concept you really wanted to bring into the story, I just felt like expressing my opinion, for some reason :p.
I also wanted to comment upon one of your author notes questions - it was something to the extent of: "What age do you see Sweetie, as she has been written, if she were human, and what are your thoughts if she were a human child in this situation?" (The question may be paraphrased or altered slightly as I'm on a phone and I can't easily check)
I don't know much about equine physiology, so purely basing it off what the story says, "before her first heat" she has clearly not hit puberty yet. In most modern and even aboriginal societies, I think, most would not say that a girl is a woman until her first cycle. This should put Sweetie before a human 12-13, I think. That said, there are laws in place in most modern societies that will bar romantic, sexual relationships at that age, though the cut-off age is different depending on the country/state/province/etc. On top of that, you will have cultural stigma that would further cause issues. Since we are human and have been human, we have had some decent time to study childhood development. Since we live longer than horses and ponies, there is a greater expanse of time between certain milestones, as compared to an equivalent scale for a horse. This is, of course, if the pony universe has the same lifespans as our universe's horses and/or ponies. This paragraph has gone for a while, so in conclusion, this situation for a human child would be much worse (in civilized parts of the world at least) than what happens in pony land. The time scale for ponies and the like is less too, so I feel there would be less stigma, and less a age difference, in pony land.
I appreciate the seriousness and extensive reach you've put into this story so far. As I said before, it is greatly enjoyed and I love getting to see into the characters' minds to such deep depth.
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I suppose you can also call it an interlude, or even an intermission of sorts.
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I would put her tentatively at the farther range of 12, but with a note - Sweetie Belle, if at that age (of comparative development), would be comparatively developed, compared to her friends. Though I suppose something like this can only work if that is indeed the case - she doesn't grasp the entirety of the situation, but she understood quite enough to consider everything, even before Twi started pumping up her understanding level.
Of course, now having to face something a filly of her age shouldn't actually face - if she wants to pull through it - she'll have to do a lot of growing up in the coming weeks and months, in order to reach a level where she'll be capable enough to deal with the inevitable(?) detonation of the situation. For obvious reasons, this will make her leave her friends in the dust, so to speak... In some ways, she'll become more of an older sister, I think. People (and I assume - ponies) who are forced to grow up too quickly tend to feel quite a bit older to their peers.
Of course, there's still the issue of imbalanced development... and other assorted issues... I'm still expecting her to eventually come to a realization that her love is by no means "pure", because it's more about getting attention she should be receiving from elsewhere.
But my greatest concern, right now, is for Fluttershy to eventually realize that the thrill of Sweetie Belle being a filly will eventually wear off... And so... how deep do her feelings for her really go?
Oh, and that little bit about the age of consent varying depending on jurisdiction? I think that goes a long way to show we don't have a good understanding of the issue, and are trying to fix the problem with a uniform (per jurisdiction) solution. The reality of it is - everyone grows up differently, at different rates and with different timing. What makes sense for one person may not necessarily for another, and in such a delicate aspect of human life, being "just a bit off" may have pretty big consequences down the line. Throw in the fact that we have a fair share of both predators and alarmists... - you get the picture.