After a traumatic experience with an animals life Fluttershy could have saved, the shy yellow mare tries to repress her memories in her nursery turned sanctuary. However this sanctuary turns nightmare as one of the filly mare friends interrupt her.
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Indeed it is. You seriously need to slow down, take your time and patch things up.
In other words this is how you're writing and how you shouldn't be writing:
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The real problem is maintaining active conflict throughout the story. However, especially with this chapter I have to agree it was rushed. Trust me, I've been trying to write at consistent pace however responsibility's in real life have been a taking up my time. Trust the chapter of the story I've been most proud of is "Mother" and the next chapter will hopefully be more akin to it.
Good luck on the next chapter. :-)
all I'm gonna say is lots of spelling errors through the entire story.
a few spelling errors, but I enjoy this story, even if it makes me get the feels eheh