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Well, that is such a feakin' relief...
only two of the questions r going to answered? great...now were never gonna find out how Midnight survived...oh well, least well know about that pic of Shinings rump!
So... questions 1 and 3, right?
6393722 What is?
6393746 Oh well. Maybe I'll write a side story on that.
6393828 Obviously it'll be 2 and 3.
6393848 That you didn't kill off such an integral character, maybe...?
6393944 Ah... They all still die
6393990 Good cover
6393848 CALLED IT!
I'm pretty sure many of us saw this coming... Still one of the best cases of "News of my death was greatly exaggerated" I've read in a while!
6394363
"I shall read this later."
6395136 Yeah, I'm still learning. Though, I'm happy to see you giving this a chance. I'd love to hear any input you may have on it.
Now... Surprise! in next chapter we will learn about what happened in ponyville, and about that photo. leaving midnight for another time.
6396577 I know, right?
6395165
Well, and I reached the end. For the moment at least.
I don't really know how I feel about all the sudden side characters like Tigers, the obvious mates for the other mane 6 and so on. They all have this "anime" vibe to them. And the runes turned seals let all of them pretty much do anything. Is Gary Stu still a Gary Stu if all the other characters are also Gary/Mary Sue? It's a bit much. I like my ponies winning out of team effort and outsmarting the enemy instead of beating them into pulp. Mr. Star is always like: "I can't do that", but does it two chapter later anyway. The story stated that Twilight was the most powerful being in existence that isn't an immortal goddess, still Midnight seems stronger.
My next point is more a personal thing, but I don't like these new ancient artifacts things. Call them a seventh Element, Element of *"§$"§$', or whatever you like. Its... If that concept was a steak, it was done a few hundred years ago. Never liked it, and I most likely never will. And that with in combination with the, in my opinion, "out of character" cutie marks for the CMC...
My last point is, Deus Ex Machina. It think twice now, everyone was saved by a sudden outburst of the Elements or otherwise. Its too convenient. My suggestion is, make the "good" lose sometimes. Let everything go so wrong that it hurts. Let Scootaloo die and let her stay dead. So that everything has a impact. I actually knew that Midnight wasn't dead. He is the freaking main character. (Made the same mistake in Nightmare. Thats why Journey has more than one actually.) [And I know that this one Tiger died. Pup... something. Redshirts don't count, you can't even remember their names most of the times.]
One scene I have to mention: I had a shiver run down my spine. When the CMC were down in the old secret lab under the Everfree. The whole thing was really well done.
To sum it up, this is me nitpicking at high levels. Like I said in my first comments, this started in 2013 and the readers wanted other themes back then. The human soldier in Equestria was new back then. Today we know it as generic shit. But this is still one if the better stories out of all of these. You made much out of a bad concept.
6400283 Thank you again for the criticism. I'll keep all of that in mind as I proceed. I'm glad you could suffer through my crazy story writing style
I'm quite certain question 3 will be answered in full detail. I'm not sure if question 1 or 2 will be the other one answered.
6436522 Mr and Mrs Cake are number one and two. Applejack is good, but due to her skill being limited to apple related baked goods, Pinkie takes the #3 slot.
6436544 Because 'Mister E' sounds like mystery.
6436563 He had it pressed between his hooves.