You're right about Derpy's character being a little off; I think she should be a little cuter. I'd say she could be happier and more innocent too, but she already seems pretty happy and what she's doing certainly isn't innocent.

derpy is a bit out of character (as you said), but this was great if it was your first time writing clop.

Too short!
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2623374 Can't tell if that's a compliment and that you wanted more of it,or if it's a criticism and is too short in general...

2624674 Saying that I hoped it was going to be longer. Duh.

2635391 Sorry, haha. I just felt that I wanted to write something, but I didn't want to expend large amounts of time and effort, especially as I have more exams soon for my A levels.

2608648 2609663 Yeah, I think I learn to write from what I read, and because I've found so few clopfics starring Derpy out there, especially partnered with a human, I struggled, that's probably one of the reasons I skipped out dialogue, haha. Also, yes, it is my first time writing clop, so thanks.

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There's probably so few of it because people love the DoctorxDerpy ship. Myself included; it's my OTP.

hey its better than my first clop fic which im still working on so cudoes to you *Brohoof*

2624674 its just the right size for your first

First time?............................hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.....you get a.....................smile
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Pretty good for a first timer

~unf

fucking love derpy clop.