The battle of the Hoof ended 9 years ago. For some ponies, the scars are still fresh in the mind. As Threnody, a young heartmender working with the Followers of the Apocalypse will find, sometimes the hardest step is getting a Patient to speak.
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Being constantly in pain suck. I had friend who was, from early age. Bad hip join, trauma, constant medicine use... Afraid of hugs becuase they may hurt. Isn't that why Thren shies away from others? Afraid of being hurt, physically or emotionally.
Tower. Star. Sun. North. You think in same direction as me. o.o;
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I keep waiting for someone who look up the meanings behind the cards. But yeah, it's... kind of less than fun.
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Oh, I did. Mostly because I also came up with same combination. But cards change meaning if reversed. Ilean to idea that Dealer leaves that up to ponies if they flip their cards or not. (Stars, do I sound like Dealer here?) That can be interesting because along with mystical meaning those cards also have counterparts in current "metagame" of reality. Wasn't that a crystal tower?
I can't wait for Act 2 :D
Thanks for writing
Yaa new chapter!!!!!
Great chapter heartshine! So can't wait for the next act to drop and the hell raised by the dealer!
"Now my own thoughts were being nice to me. What was with this crap?!"
Wow, that's... quite a line. Well done with it.
"giving the card had a label"
Did something go wrong there?
"I can vaguely picture Callie looked over my side"
"I can vaguely picture Callie looking over my side"?
"recognize that the images watching the ichor slowly draining out of my flank wasn’t just a dream"
"recognize that the images of watching the ichor slowly draining out of my flank weren't just a dream"?
"I was laying on my left side"
"I was lying on my left side"?
"“I excel at being a pest. I learned from Rampage,” she said as she looked up at the ceiling."
Which could be more than just somewhere to look, in that context.
"The last bit of humour left in me dried up as I realised the predicament as she had to stay away from the twins?."
Something seems to have gone wrong in that sentence.
"should have been following up of that sting"
"should have been following up on that sting"?
"For the 23 year old part of me still sitting in the internal medicine office on May 23rd, 2013 after learning that a life saving decision she made in December would prevent her from having children."
I hope writing this helped.
"I... honestly meant to be done by now and then the story kind of kept going and Threnody had more things and oh lord I'm so sorry."
Gee. A PH-based story is running longer than expected. Shock. Surprise. Who could have possibly predicted this.
(:))
"Thank you so much to you all, my readers, and to Bronode and RoMS for their hard work as editors."
You're welcome; thank you for writing, and your editors as well for editing.
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Thank you Reese, for these. I always have to giggle when 3 of us miss some of the little bits. Especially when, on looking at it, it makes absolutely no sense.
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You're welcome, and glad they're something you can giggle over. :D
And yeah, it is amazing how seemingly obvious some things can be when they're finally spotted, yet still have made it through many other pairs of competent and skilled eyes before that.
So... I've read about the cards, and it seems that Threnody passed the worst of it. The tower played it's part, now it's time for the Star and the Sun.
New chapter! Great way to start off the morning with breakfast.
Wow this is an awesome chapter, things keep getting more and more interesting, can’t wait to read more!!!!!
I'm glad to see some growth coming from There's, even if it's painful to watch. I wonder what the dealer's next move will be?
Looking up Tarrot cards, The Star has a much kinder meaning than I'd expected, given the general role of the stars in the PH-verse.
The Tower is paired with The Star and The Sun in this case- the disaster and revelation of her past injuries is interfering with her continuation of life and needs cleansing before she can regain the fulfillment of spirit.
The fact that The Sun indicates this ends with the child riding the white horse is in no way suggestive. >.>
Noticed the update late at night on my side, had to go to sleep, only now I finally got time to sit down properly, without interraptions, to read through the chapter. It was definetly worth the wait. It wouldn't do justice a chapter like this to try and read it in parts through the day.
Ugh, those cards... you know, reading this story actually made me buy a tarot card deck, to try and understand this better, also because of the off, very unlikely chance I would want Dealer to cameo in my Fo:E story as well. Still don't really get it all that much
So, can we get that mayor (forgot her name or even if her name been brought up) to die like a very, very painful way? Or maybe not die, there are a few worse things that could happen. Heck, I would be happy to make suggestions.
Finally, her kids are being addressed, and the idea of them learning the truth one day. Been waiting for that ray of sunshine for a while now. I think Blackjack deserve to have at least some semblance of relationship with them, and they deserve to know the truth too. Although it would cause more than a few chapters worth of drama... hm, now I wonder how many. How long did it take P-21 to admit to Scotch that he was her father again? Probably around that number. Or, you know, years, or whatever
Congratz on getting arc I done^^ And yeah, stories tend to prolong themselves like this. Still writing the story I started here 6 years ago And it was supposed to be a joke-story, a few chapters long! At least with Infinite Potential I plan it from beginning to be ridiculously long... Anyway, I'm sure that however long Speak will turn out to be, you will bring it to a satisfying conclusion, although if for whatever reason the conclusion would involve getting 90% of the main cast killed I will cry
Thren said so many things in this chapter I want to quote and caption "Story of my life!"
Yet she also said so many other things that I'm glad I've never had to experience.
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Pffffttttt Ok, I hadn't thought of that as a consequence! Oh my god! XD
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Comment about ACEs study goes here. But I'm glad that you're enjoying it.
One of my friends said (jokingly) that I should have just named Speak "Fallout Equestria: Feels" and been done with it.
The bomb is finaly dropped!
....well
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On a more serious note, holy hell this is gettin' good
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I feel bad because that's kind of what I do. Everything seemed fine then the feels exploded.
It's interesting that the Tower card definitely sounds like Canterlot and Threnody didn't recognise the similarity. But it seems reasonable that by now there could be generations of ponies growing up who have never heard of the city.
Regarding Threnody's lying, I find that in fiction I almost never feel a character's lapse in judgement to have been constructed believably, but this was a biiiig exception. Maybe it is because Threnody as a character is so solid- which is to say I mean: although I wouldn't be able to be confident about any prediction of mine of her behaviour, nothing she does ever feels like it isn't herself. Even her delayed realisation that she had lied (and reaction to that realisation) worked so well with the Dealer's "warning" regarding presumptions of the future.
I feel real silly too for having forgotten the Dealer's conversation on the cloud until the moment Threnody lied. I anxiously await to see just how much I can believe that the Dealer's stakes for losing the bet are innocuous!
Threnody talking about the closing doors was relatable; usually if those thoughts drift by me I am able to just think about the infinite doors that were never open for me long before I was born and after I died. The things I would never voluntarily choose, or never get the advantageous opportunity, or be allowed to. It sounds kind of defeatist but it could be worse.
Thank you for building this story, and thank you for sharing it!
Tbh i dont care if you make this story as long as ph. It's good and you'll always have a reader. I really love everything about this story so far!
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XD
But on a really, like actually serious note, were you talking about yourself, or a friend and/or patient of yours in the A.N.? Cus as a guy that sounds bad, but I know that for just about every woman in the world that's gotta hurt waaaay worse than (for a guy)...I don't know...your wife leaving you? Your kid dying?
Just wanna make sure you're alright
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Wait wit ACEs study? Tell me moar pls.
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Good God Almighty those made me feel better. Should I feel bad more being able to go from sad to happy and back in a short amount of time? Regardless, don't feel too bad, it's a lot of words, y'all're only human, and, most importantly, I'm pretty sure I'm not the only one who misses that stuff because I know what's supposed to be there so my mind just goes right along. It's kind of like those lists that skip and repeats numbers, or repeats or switch around words, or both, and you don't notice till after it points it out too you.
I have to say, I look forward to a new chapter everyday and know that they take time. I love your story and hope you keep going. The Cards are never a good thing to play with because knowing the future might very well be the thing that causes it to come about. Also *hugs*, I feel Thren's pain too. Thank you for keeping one of my favorite characters going and introducing me to a wonderful new one. Now I just need to find merch of Thren.
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Uh, me. That was a... Hard day in my life and it's something I needed to process. I had a conversation with a friend who suffered several miscarriages, and with my sister pregnant with her first child... I've been trying to figure this stuff out. Poor Thren suffered because of it, but... Yeah, it's hard. I'm not... 100 percent over it, and it gets frustrating when the biological clock ticks and I'm like "girl, it's not going to happen".
Then my sister texts me about pregnancy rash and I'm like... K maybe I'm not missing out on everything.
But there's still a part of me that wishes she could have a baby. But that wasn't in the cards. And I try everyday to not tableflip because of it. I succeed most days! Others I drink a half bottle of rum, because the don't think about it juice does work for a little bit. It's the existential suffering of a hangover that usually means I find less Blackjack-y ways to cope. XD
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Oh! ACEs is Aversive Childhood Events. I... Actually wrote about it in the Basements, Maternity Wards, and the art of not talking about it blog post.
I’m going to be the odd one out, but I’m glad your story ran over! I honestly hope it continues to and become a very long story that keeps a consistent level of quality. I can’t get into short stories and the length of this wouldn’t be enough for me to feel fulfilled with the journey of blackjack and Threnody if it stopped here. I mean we are just getting into the juicy stuff after all!
ThrenXblackjack OTP for life!
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Try me.
Somehow i missed the notification.
Now i am sad that the chapters are so short.
Don't get me wrong, that's a first ever story i got into while it is still in process.
Your ponies are as lovable as usual. Honestly, your writing have some feeling to it that it could get my mood out if the gutter almost back to normal. Even despite the fact they aren't quite happy there for now.
It was just strange to me right now. I hadn't realised Threnody thought too much about foals at all. Guess, not much of us are while in her age.
I guess, news like that strucks the most when you have actually planned something for your life already and that plans go boom.
We knew we couldn't have children since somewhere around 18, and it came rather easily, we just kind of altered our plans before it actually get complex. BJ is so perfectly right on our POV.
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I wanted to get this one out quickly, hence the... brevity. That said, I'm glad it's still enjoyable.
and really, do you really want me to drop 70k chapters like Somber did? XD8978631
I'd really liked that =)
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XD I'm fairly certain my editors, not to mention the team translating Speak to Russian (which still blows my mind), would be less than thrilled. XD
Wow, 16th chapter!
Wheeew... damn, poor Thren that's gotta suck, and damn this chapter went places!
Took me forever to read... sadly it seems I'm behind on a lotta stuff, oof.
Good show!
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Ain't nobody got time for that. I gotta sleep eventually.
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Welcome!
But most of what you said I don't think istooimportant, story goes in unexpected directions, and there's still a lot of foreshadowing that hasn't come to fruition. Catch up to us before speculation.8982612
Hmm... thanks I think? The strike through text there doesn't really feel welcoming though, to be honest. What you're saying is that people shouldn't comment on stories as they read them, and only wait until they reach the current chapter? The impressions I get while reading don't matter because other stuff has happened in parts I haven't read yet? I'm just going to go ahead and disagree with that. The impressions a reader gets as they go matter, even for stories that have been finished for centuries.
If you're not okay with comments on old chapters, just skip my comments.
Canterlot...?
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Nice to see commentary from you here. :)
"I don't think there was ever an explicit mention of a monthly fertility cycle, or of menstruation more specifically. (IMO, the lack thereof in conjunction with the fair amount of detail on other bodily functions and the estrus cycle are decent points in favor of at least menstruation not being a thing--rather like my opinion on STDs prior to one line in the Goldenblood chapter.)"
Aye.
"However, it did seem like there was the implication that mares could become pregnant outside of the main estrus cycle, though I probably couldn't point to where off the top of my head at this point."
I don't remember a particular point either, but that impression (bearing in mind that it's been a bit) seems to fit.
Well, I finally got around to reading this chapter and it was certainly something. The tarot cards are certainly interesting and after reading into them, leave me with more questions than answers. Things could go very well from here on or very badly, largely depending on what meaning you use for the tower card. But it is a Fallout Equestria story so I suspect the latter and that most of the meanings for the tower card are bad. I also see that you picked up some of Somber's protagonist bullying. I look forward to act 2 of however many acts there will be, keep up the great writing.
wow...didn't see that coming.
its nice to see a relatively minor event from early in the story returning to be revealed to have a much larger impact than initially thought. (the rad scorp). makes a reader realize they can't glaze over small events like that as they might show up again (something the original PH did by having them constantly stack up on blackjack's mind as the story went on, and even be used by her against luna's soul near the end).
and whats more, it builds upon a pre story wound(the scaring). wonder how far this will go.....and makes me more and more excited to see the eventual meeting with her mother (taking all bets, who kills her mother and the mayor first? Blackjack or Sandalwood)
all in all can't wait for the next chapter.
btw, is anyone else coming up with extremely wierd theories behind what Cinnamon is up to? cause right now i've had theories from everything ranging from a power grab, to being involved with Threnody's early.....incidents with the mayor, to trying to get blackjack killed......so many possibilities)
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Ack, this is a reminder I need to write! @.@
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Tell me about it...
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to be fair, you've got a harder decision to make. a place to end the story.
Thren can always return to Hoofington and the Star House, or the Society when her adventure is done. i doubt she'll stay in junction at the end of the story
but Scotch Tape? she's so far away, and whats left for her in hoofington? heck, Equestria. where does she return to when her journey comes to an end.
its something that might not seem like much, but as the story comes closer and closer to the final destination, it will become more and more important.
a character with nowhere to return to. both a blessing(nothing holding them back) and a curse (where to end)