New chapter, but there's a catch. · 8:46pm Nov 13th, 2014
Well, I've *finished* the next chapter for What I've Become, but I'm really not sure if I'm happy with what I'm doing with it. I've sent it to my prereaders, but only one has gotten back to me with anything. I still think it's missing something.
What do you guys think? do you want me to release it now, so you can throw me suggestions? Or do you want me to wait until I'm able to figure out whats missing? Please tell me what you think
EDIT: Due to the suggestion of Oxyaction, I've decided to let those of you who want to have a sneak peek and possibly contribute have early access to the next chapter of my story. Remember, everything in this chapter is subject to change, and as I've said before, I'm not sure that I'm happy with what I've done with the chapter.
The password is Havokcells
Well... um... hm...
There are pro's and con's for both options...
If you release it now, then we would get it sooner, and you would get more feedback, but we would get a lacking chapter.
If you wait, we would have to wait, you wouldn't get as much feedback now, but you might find what's missing and fix it, feeling better about the chapter...
I KNOW!!!
Release a new chapter for The Nautilus Protocol!
Hummmm...
Quality over quantity. Thats my vote
How about do a beta test? Give it a password and those who want to test it comment on the blog, that way you can cater to both groups
2592944 I'd sign up for that...
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I agree with these two.
2592959 2592947 2592944 I decided to take Oxyaction's suggestion to heart. The password and link are in my blogpost.
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Yep, totally the best solution one can think of in this situation.
Just post the password or a link to the temporary file in this blog alongside with a note asking for feedback about yet *unfinished* chapter.
I would totally give it a try but due to my timezone it'll most likely be another 14 hours before I can read it =\
EDIT: too late =P
EDIT2: I was totally the first one to notice =P These comments should be auto-refreshing or something =\
2592970 Already been posted in the blog.
2592964 So far I like it. It feels a bit short. Maybe you could try to write between his unconscious and conscious state what the Ponys do.
WARNING, POTENTIAL SPOILERS AHEAD!
Hm, I wasn't expecting him to turn back into a human... Wasn't expecting it at all. Oh well, I can't say if I'm happy or not about this turn of events since I have no idea where you are going with it (maybe except aliens finding him). The quality of the chapter seems good enough to me, so I guess it's fine.
Sorry for no detailed review from me, it's just too late here and I'm too tired =\
I like this idea. Maybe I should use it someday to get feedback on chapters I am having difficulty deciding on.
My mmo guild would certainly appreciate me not bugging them about suggestions when I get stuck at least.
2593012 Again, not sure if I like what I'm doing here. May change what's here.
I'm liking the chapter, but I also identify with that feeling of wrongness that comes with your own work. I won't ask you to release it early and move on until you're satisfied with it.
I liked it.
whats missing from this is luna's thoughts during this... unless you plan on using her POV in the next chapter then you should include them in this one somehow... thats just my opinion though :) excellent chapter and fantastic story regardless :D
The chapter looks good to me, in general.
Luna's "Your welcome" should have been "You're welcome," but that's just a trivial point. The informal style of the writing throughout works pretty well with Alex's character, I think. Keeping Luna's identity hidden from the reader makes the end more interesting, too.
You've left plenty of room for more events and situations during Alex's recovery--if indeed he has a full recovery--before the story goes on to whatever you plan next.
Yeah, what else can I say? I liked it.
I agree, it's missing... something... I have no idea what though...
Very nice change! I hadn't even considered the Evil Mad Scientist Bad Guy getting slapped down so quickly, but it was actually more believable than the usual "Nobody figures it out until the big battle at the end of the story." Huzzah! :WeNeedAHappyLunaSmilie:
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genius idea.