Reworking Dr. Faunas Clinic · 9:00pm Jan 17th, 2023
I'm finally figuring out how to make these chapters more readable and easy to understand.
The idea is to remove some of Aella's scenes, and then put what's left in its own section. Possibly at the end of chapter 5, Water Works. I don't want it to feel forced, but I think it'll fit well! Since the chapter ends with the ghoul whose name I cannot remember telling Aella to take care of herself sets it up nicely. It also matches the theme; That Aella's ignorance and morality are just as dangerous as poison and gunfire.
I'm also considering shifting the POV of Chapter 6. I've been reading Wings of Fire lately, and I love how in each book the author picks one character to focus on, but it's still told in the third person. I think using third-person limited in the chapter could give some interesting insight into either Scarlet or Free. Now I just need to decide on who I want to make the primary focus. I was thinking Scarlet. The chapter is to develop Free and Scarlet as characters and develop their friendship, and I think that'd still be doable through Scarlet's eyes. The reader would be learning about this new character as the audience does as well. I think it works
Do whatever you feel is right. Ps. This is one of my favorite stories right now
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Oh that's so sweet, thank you! Then I'm glad to tell you I should have another chapter out by the end of the month! ^.^